New Chapter for Christmas Presents Undisguised
Christmas Presents Undisguised
Lady Strange76 Reviews | 5.84/10 (76 Ratings, 0 Likes, 66 Favorites )
An 8 chapter Christmas murder mystery starring Hermione Granger and Severus Snape. It is post-Hogwarts, post-Voldemort and has political, philosophical, sociological overtones. Vaguely compliant to HBP but not DH. Assumes Dumbledore's death in HBP was staged. *Contents may be disturbing to readers*
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It seems that Harry has picked up where Voldemort left off, they may be killing different people but it is still barbaric murder most foul. And as for Dumbeldor , I would prefer to face Voldemort he was a bastard but he never pretended to be anything else.
I thought it would end up being Neville. Hadn't thought of Gudgeon, though. Very intriguing story.
Response from Lady Strange (Author of Christmas Presents Undisguised)
I do try. Thinking up twists to murder plots amuses me when I already have the mastermind in mind. Glad you liked it.
A side note about the Salem Witch Trials: in 1692, in Salem, there were a specific set of actual trials, not just the swim/sink tests for witches. Those who confessed to their crimes escaped death; those who refused to sin by confessing to a lie were hanged. Most of those killed were women, though some were men. One notable man, Giles Corey, was pressed to death with stones because he refused to give names. Many of the accused were socially marginal, or had land bordering the land held by socially ambitious.When the wives of high ranking members of society were among the accused, some doubt was introduced....I love the story. I'm just a lit-based history junkie (and spend time when I teach US History focusing high school students on a history of hysteria.)
Response from Lady Strange (Author of Christmas Presents Undisguised)
Quite all right. I tend to ramble too. Merci du compliment.
Very nice wrap up. I kind of suspected Neville from the someone who is no one comment, but dismissed him. I should have stayed on track with it since he was so out of character torchering prisioners. All well you pulled the wool over my eyes (and I suspect you enjoy hearing that too.).
Response from Lady Strange (Author of Christmas Presents Undisguised)
Thank you for the compliment. I am very glad you enjoyed this story.
That same line from Aurthor Conan Doyle was also used in a Star Trek movie. The one where the Klingons finally make peace with the Federation. Spock said it. I am glad to know where it originated from. I am enjoying your story. Very interesting.
Response from Lady Strange (Author of Christmas Presents Undisguised)
I am happy to oblige. I too am a Trekkie *makes Vulcan salute* Thank you for reading and taking the time to review this story.
This was an enigmatic display of brilliance. I thoroughly enjoyed this story. It was nice to see the "brilliant" side of those two, instead of the angsty "romance". Super!
Response from Lady Strange (Author of Christmas Presents Undisguised)
There was a tiny hint of possible romance, but I wanted to show them coming to a healthy respect for each other first. Thank you for reading and reviewing this story.
oh, I'm sorry we didn't get to see Dumbledores face too (or Harry's for that matter). Great story, although I'm still very curious about what went before (and after...)
Response from Lady Strange (Author of Christmas Presents Undisguised)
Perhaps I will write another mystery with HG and SS and will reveal more about the 'before' and 'after'. Thank you for the kind review.
I just had a scary thoguh. Neville is the killer. There is just something really disturbing about this version of Neville. As always I enjoy your stories. And just to comment on your AN for Chapter 1 about leftism and stalinism, maoisk etc. As someone on the centre-left of the political sprectrum I think it is very important to remember the horrors commited in the name of socialism, communism etc. There is always something very disturbing going on when the ideas become more important than the people the ideas should serve. Oh, and one more comment. There is not a lot of backstory here. But something must have happened to Hermione to get her of her soapbox. The founder of SPEW is very quiet about the injustices of Harry's regime. Will this have something to do with the obligation she is under to Dumbledore? Oh well, on to the next two chapters and maybe I will find out.
Response from Lady Strange (Author of Christmas Presents Undisguised)
Thank you for the long thoughtful review. Well, I may reveal more about Hermione if I write another mystery. Until then, thank you once again.
That was an excellent story. It is nice to read something so well written for a change.Thank you.
Response from Lady Strange (Author of Christmas Presents Undisguised)
Thank you for the kind review.
great story and so well written
Response from Lady Strange (Author of Christmas Presents Undisguised)
Thank you for the kind review.
I spent the last 4 chapters in denial that it was Neville. His gran's death was the most incriminating clue. I think I missed Hermione's reasons for exiting her service as an Unspeakable Unspeakable. Great story thanks for writing it!
Response from Lady Strange (Author of Christmas Presents Undisguised)
Thank you for your kind words on this fic...I wanted Harry to be the fellow myself, but then, Neville kept raising his hand, so I had to put him there.
I'm dying to see what Severus is planning. On with the story!
Response from Lady Strange (Author of Christmas Presents Undisguised)
Severus has tricks up his sleeve, fear not.
This chapter is bloody brilliant you gave me goosebumps when reading about Dolohov. Couldn't Severus and Hermione overule Neville's torture? They had the warrant.
Response from Lady Strange (Author of Christmas Presents Undisguised)
Thank you. Well, the warrant is for investigation. Azkaban is a place where the geneva convention does not hold.
Still no clue on who the murderer is but one thing's for sure it is not Dolohov. The "Real killer" is probably middle class with a job that doesn't satisfy their ambition. I like that we never really see Harry. It gives a feel on how events/facts can be twisted when people report to him. He is never really seeing how things are done in his world. Most probably he is hiding behind a desk, stuck in meetings all day thus detaching him from real life's struggles...
Response from Lady Strange (Author of Christmas Presents Undisguised)
Exactly - that's why we do not see Harry. Harry has become a consummate bureaucrat *shudders*. He is detached from the 'grassroots' as we are fond of saying in politics. It's very elitist this Potter adminstration - and draconian. I based the Potter administration's politics and some of its methods on my experiences in my country. You may read it as a thinnly disguised criticism of my country's system... Including politics in fanfic without actually naming the country or the people seems to be a good way of not getting caught and imprisoned under the internal security act...
There is a method to this madness indeed! When will they notice that the case brings them closer?
I saw in one of the reviews of the previous chapter that you had to face an internal inquiry. I hope that you survived relatively unscathed... It's remarkable how ugly relationships deteriorate within a department and I hope that you are able to finish your thesis without too much bad blood from your previous thesis advisor... I've heard horror stories but even my own prof has been known to be quite vindictive for relatively petty things (think revoking study visas of students wanting to move to other cities for personal reasons). If it is not too personal a question, has this experience diminished your wish to stay in an academic environment?
Response from Lady Strange (Author of Christmas Presents Undisguised)
Oh no, I still want to be in academia. If only to avoid these sorts of things. You may read my nonsensical rantings on my blog at http://www.livejournal.com/users/mmestrange/. Search for all the entries entitled "So, it is to be war between us". there are 4 parts in all (at present).This is only the MA level, I can imagine the politics at the PhD level. par Dieu. I know what you mean about petty profs. the poli sci dept here where i am is full of them. if you want to talk academia or anything else, feel free to email me.
Response from alitheia (Reviewer)
Yes I'll check it out. If you have seen the vipers at the Master's level the department you are in is really something... I don't know about the British system (do you get a comittee of professors that oversees your work?) well in the US you really need to be careful in choosing that comittee. If the professors hate each other (or if they hate your major prof) they will not hesitate to use you to get their point across. Also I'm not sure if you are allowed to see how they interact in comittees but let me tell you it is nasty. Even the most seemingly peaceful department has trouble brewing.
I know what you mean about fanfics. They are really an island of comfort sometimes and it allows us to reveal what bothers us (without incriminating ourselves).
I've spent a semester debating whether I want to stay in academia. I think I share your point of view and I'm glad you will remain to fight another day.
I must say that from the list of victims my first thought was of Neville. Of course since Mrs Longbottom was raped I'm kind of reluctant to think along those lines... And Severus would probably have been on his list of people who wronged him -if Neville was the murderer.... But it's true, there's no correlation, I see some bank workers, some aurors a store clerk and an old lady. Perhaps any other brutal murders will make more sense...
Response from Lady Strange (Author of Christmas Presents Undisguised)
Ah, there is a method in the madness, you have to look for it. As Neville was a little to obvious, i hoped that it would throw people off him for the moment. As for the rest, you have to keep reading to find out.
Why do they think the murderer lives around the slums? He/She might just be luring the victims there. Or maybe I misunderstood and they want to inteview the inhabitants for any clues. Perhaps they can talk to Dumbledore, he can give them some hints on disguising. I find Severus's ‘His presumptuous ways will be the death of him, I pray!.." a bit worrisome. Also will we be seeing how Ron, Hermione and Harry came to have such positions? Ron is still loyal to Harry and still holds him in high regard but Hermione no longer thinks so. Maybe she had more interactions with his position of power than Ron. On with the story!
Response from Lady Strange (Author of Christmas Presents Undisguised)
Everything that is unsaid explictly is hinted at. Harry promoted his friends to high positions at the ministry. he became minister at the end of the war when Voldy was overthrown. This was (believe it or not) the wish of the public. He accordingly promoted Ron. Hermione went o her path to Cambridge (St John's College), but was roped in by Albus to the Unspeakable Unspeakables. As an Unspeakable Unspeakable, Hermione has clearance to the highest echelons within the Ministries, Ron does not. As you will notice, Ron is ill suited for his position - he is inobservant, obtuse &ca.
Lady Strange, I had to do a bit of a search to find this story and have just read the first chapter. Very interesting beginning even though the execution was disturbing. I wonder why DD is walking around like a beggar. Is he ever present in his true form or only during meetings with his department? Funny that his brother recognizes him regardless.
Also, I was wondering about the etymology of the word Chirurgeon. It is really from ancient greek and it means to work with your hands (χειρα=hand). It's funny that it reached middle english through the french translation of the word.
Now on with the story...
Response from Lady Strange (Author of Christmas Presents Undisguised)
Ah. Albus just enjoys going about incognito in the most extreme forms. Aberforth can smell his brother miles away (i don't mean that literally).
Excellent! Well done! Bravo! Live long and prosper, Titania
Response from Lady Strange (Author of Christmas Presents Undisguised)
Thank you! It wasn't all that fabulous in the first draft! thank you so much for your good opinion of this story.
Wow! I had to go back and re-read the story, just to see everything in context. Brilliant! Neville and his assistant both captured, and Neville died with less pain than his victims. Nice touch to have Mundungus be the one to kill Neville and get the reward, as no one ever expects much from him. Not sure I understand the reasons the Order couldn’t go after Neville; after all, they told him to let himself get captured. Perhaps circumstances changed and they couldn't save him, but to "reward" him later by putting him in charge of Azkaban was truly unwise. Azkaban is not the place for someone recovering from longterm captivity. I'm happy you have Severus and Hermione off together to a nice start with dinner, and can only imagine that somehow Harry and Dumbledore (and Ron) get removed from authority - or S&H leave the country. THANK YOU for sharing this fic!!
Response from Lady Strange (Author of Christmas Presents Undisguised)
Glad you enjoyed the little fic. I know it was imprudent to leave Neville in charge of Azkaban. Albus will let Severus and hermione go and they will return to St John's college and write many papers together.
What an interesting turn of events. I would have never seen that coming. Congrats on such a compelling story.
Response from Lady Strange (Author of Christmas Presents Undisguised)
I do try. thank you for your continued interest in this story. i'm very glad that you enjoyed it.
Great story!! I had a feeling Neville was at the bottom of this when I saw what he was doing at Azkaban....lovely mystery story!!
Response from Lady Strange (Author of Christmas Presents Undisguised)
Thank you! So, you figured it out in ch6... oh i hope it means you're observant and i'm not a terrible mystery writer! lol. glad you liked the denouement.
I adored this story! Thank you so much for posting. **Big goofy grin** Well, well.... Little Neville turned out to be the naughty boy. It was quite intense for a moment, wasn't it? I enjoyed every moment though. Cheers!!!
Response from Lady Strange (Author of Christmas Presents Undisguised)
Glad you enjoyed it. The intensity was nearly killing me too. I'm glad that it's all wrapped up!
Wicked Severus, letting Dung get the reward. That's really great. What a wonderful ending! Thanks so much for posting.
Response from Lady Strange (Author of Christmas Presents Undisguised)
There had to be a twist somewhere. glad you liked it!
Loved it!
Response from Lady Strange (Author of Christmas Presents Undisguised)
I'm glad you did!