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luvsev

15 Reviews | 7.0/10 (15 Ratings, 0 Likes, 19 Favorites )

Romance Alternate Universe Potions Under Duress 2,215 Words 1 Chapter Complete

Hermione Granger Severus Snape

Upon Severus' death he is given a choice... eternal peace, or his ultimate wish... love.

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Chapter 1: With You

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luvsev

Member Since 2008 | 71 Stories | Favorited by 76 | 664 Reviews Written | 948 Review Responses

I am a 20-something-year-old who admits to not knowing or having everything figured out, beta, foodie, bibliophile, and dabble in art. Most days I may be found in the kitchen indulging in the culinary arts.

I adore a multitude of pairings in the fandom, though I am partial to: SS/HG, DM/HP, NT/HG, PP/MB, SS/HG/LM, Snupin, and LL/HG.

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0/10

This Story was really nice, I enjoyed it

8/10

That was sweet beyond all measure!

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Response from luvsev (Author of With You)

Thanks, I am glad that you thought so!

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Response from luvsev (Author of With You)

Thanks, I am glad that you thought so!

10/10

This is incredibly beautiful. I love it enormously. Do it again any time you want.

Response from luvsev (Author of With You)

Thank you for your lovely review. It is reviews like the one that you have so kindly given that encourages and inspires new authors such as myself.

Response from luvsev (Author of With You)

Thank you for your lovely review. It is reviews like the one that you have so kindly given that encourages and inspires new authors such as myself.

10/10

Beautiful! I always love hearing the tale told by one of them - a retrospective can be so full of emotion. :) Lovely!

Response from luvsev (Author of With You)

I am greatly pleased that you enjoyed the tale that I have spun. Thank you for reading and reviewing.

Response from luvsev (Author of With You)

I am greatly pleased that you enjoyed the tale that I have spun. Thank you for reading and reviewing.

10/10

What a lovely story, my only comment is that if Ginny was married then she was the Matron of honor not a Maid. thanks for writing, Huanita

Response from luvsev (Author of With You)

Thank you for your review as well as the correction. I am pleased that you liked my story.

Response from luvsev (Author of With You)

Thank you for your review as well as the correction. I am pleased that you liked my story.

10/10

What a lovely way to begin my day. Thank you for this, it's beatuifully done, like a smooth emotional ride. Good job.

Response from luvsev (Author of With You)

Thank you for the sweet review, it always makes my day to get positive feedback from fellow authors.

Response from luvsev (Author of With You)

Thank you for the sweet review, it always makes my day to get positive feedback from fellow authors.

0/10

First person is something rarely seen in stories, and you've done a great job with realistically conveying Severus' thoughts and emotions. I'm curious - what was the occaision for his reminiscence?

Response from luvsev (Author of With You)

I am glad that you liked my story. This was my first time ever writing in the first person from a man's point of view; it was a rather interesting experience. The occasion for Severus' reminiscence is that he was looking at his sleeping wife and son, and he thought that if he had not returned, he would not have what he does. I know that I did not add that moment, but I figured that since you asked, I would tell you. Thanks once again for reading and reviewing my story, it means a lot to me!

9/10

Very beautiful! I'm not usually a fan of 1st person but it really works here. You really feel all his pain and joy. Excellently done.

Response from luvsev (Author of With You)

I am glad that you liked my story. As for the first person point of view, I am not usually a fan of it either. I tried to convey all of what Severus was feeling without taking him too far out of character. Thank you for reading and reviewing! It is appreciated.

Response from luvsev (Author of With You)

I am glad that you liked my story. As for the first person point of view, I am not usually a fan of it either. I tried to convey all of what Severus was feeling without taking him too far out of character. Thank you for reading and reviewing! It is appreciated.

10/10

lovely, fluffy goodness

Response from luvsev (Author of With You)

I am glad that you thought the story was lovely. Thank you for reviewing!

Response from luvsev (Author of With You)

I am glad that you thought the story was lovely. Thank you for reviewing!

10/10

This warms and comforts my heart from the hurt JKR left there when she abandoned Snape so shabbily. Thank you for a beautiful tale!

Response from luvsev (Author of With You)

Thank you for reviewing! JKR hurt a lot of us by leaving Severus to that fateful bite. Personally, I was angry at her for making him suffer so much, he deserved better than he got. By writing this story, I gave him the ending that I wanted to see. I am delighted that you thought it was beautiful.

Response from luvsev (Author of With You)

Thank you for reviewing! JKR hurt a lot of us by leaving Severus to that fateful bite. Personally, I was angry at her for making him suffer so much, he deserved better than he got. By writing this story, I gave him the ending that I wanted to see. I am delighted that you thought it was beautiful.

0/10

Nicely written.

Response from luvsev (Author of With You)

Thank you, I am pleased that you enjoyed it.

Response from luvsev (Author of With You)

Thank you, I am pleased that you enjoyed it.

8/10

Prof M McGonagall

There is a lot that is good in this story. You write some very nice descriptive details. You have some very nice imagery in your writing. I really thought your description of the October when Lily died had some lovely imagery. I wish that your story wasn't telling us so much, though. More dialogue in the story would probably have helped with that and let us connect more emotionally with the characters. Of course, this would also have made the story longer. You probably would have had to divide it into chapters at that point. I think you could improve this further by fleshing it out a bit more and giving us more of the details of what happened rather than just telling us what happened.

Response from luvsev (Author of With You)

Thank you for your review! It always pleases me to receive others opinions on my work. Thanks for taking the time to let me know your thoughts.

Response from Prof M McGonagall (Reviewer)

In looking at this story again, maybe it was just the first person POV that wasn't working for me because the action of the story was obviously removed from the reader by time. I don't know. The quality of your writing is good. It's just that somehow I didn't feel connected so much to the emotions of the story. Tiredness, perhaps?

Response from luvsev (Author of With You)

Thank you for your review! It always pleases me to receive others opinions on my work. Thanks for taking the time to let me know your thoughts.

Response from Prof M McGonagall (Reviewer)

In looking at this story again, maybe it was just the first person POV that wasn't working for me because the action of the story was obviously removed from the reader by time. I don't know. The quality of your writing is good. It's just that somehow I didn't feel connected so much to the emotions of the story. Tiredness, perhaps?

0/10

Nice story :)

Response from luvsev (Author of With You)

Thank you for reviewing, I am glad that you liked my story.

Response from luvsev (Author of With You)

Thank you for reviewing, I am glad that you liked my story.

10/10

That was a very touching story. It also had a whole lot more meaning since you wrote it from Severus POV. Wonderful job. Your writing portrayed his emotions very well and I only noticed maybe one typo. Again, fantastic job!~Jen

Response from luvsev (Author of With You)

Thank you for reviewing. I really appreciate it! I wanted to tell a story from Severus' POV that gave a snapshot of what he went through and what he was feeling at the time.

Response from luvsev (Author of With You)

Thank you for reviewing. I really appreciate it! I wanted to tell a story from Severus' POV that gave a snapshot of what he went through and what he was feeling at the time.

10/10

You have a very eloquent narrative style.

Response from luvsev (Author of With You)

Thank you for your lovely review! It made my evening to know that someone thinks so highly of my writing.

Response from luvsev (Author of With You)

Thank you for your lovely review! It made my evening to know that someone thinks so highly of my writing.

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