Chapter 2
Chapter 2 of 9
shellsnapeluverHermione accidentally, on purpose, uses a Time-Turner. What happens when she travels back to the Marauder era? What will become of her future? Travel with her as she embarks on a journey that no one, especially Severus Snape, will forget.
Hermione had awoken to find her bag and books on the chair along with her assignments from the day. She quietly read through some notes that Snape had left her and started on her homework.
When she returned to the Gryffindor common room, she was ambushed by her new friends.
"Mione, I'm so sorry; I didn't mean it. I was just trying to get at him. Snivellus is such a bastard," Sirius said the minute she walked through the portrait hole.
"Actually, I think that word is a little harsh, Sirius. Yes, he is cruel and mean, but not a bastard. He actually helped me and apologized for hurting me."
"No way--"
"Not Snivellus!"
"Yes, and his name is Severus."
"Don't tell me you have a sweet spot for the greasy git," James said.
"No. I'm new here, and I don't want to go making enemies just yet. But, thank you for your opinions; I'll keep them in mind."
"Come on, Mione. The boys are going to hang out by the Quidditch Stadium. We can take our books and study while they screw around," Lily said.
"Okay, at least one of you has their head on straight," Hermione joked.
A week had passed, and Hermione was already going mad. She didn't know how much longer she could stand being back in time. James and Harry were so much alike that each time she saw him, she wanted to cry. Lily had reminded her of Ginny, which made her think of Ron. She adored Remus and wished she could tell him who she was, being that he was going to be the only person who would be alive when she returned... if she ever returned. She ignored Peter, trying very hard to not hex him each time she saw him. Sirius was a flirt, and she enjoyed his attention and didn't want to deny him that pleasure, seeing as he was only three years away from being locked away in hell.
Then there was Snape. He hadn't talked to her since that first day. He had even changed his seat in Potions to the opposite side of the room. She couldn't take her eyes off of him--she wanted to be near him, to smell him and get to know him. Several times, she had been staring at him, and he had looked up like he knew she was watching him.
She had passed him on the way to her Muggle Studies class that afternoon; it was as if they were in slow motion as they walked directly next to each other, locking eyes for a split second, then turning away quickly. She yearned for him desperately, but didn't know how to approach him.
It was Friday night, which meant it was game night. Hufflepuff against Gryffindor. Hermione knew she needed to go and support James, but something in the back of her mind told her to stay at the school. She had explained to Lily that she was very tired and would meet up with her later.
Hermione was on the way back from the bathroom after having had a nice, refreshing shower, humming to herself along the empty corridor, when a hand shot across her face, and her body was wrapped into black robes and pulled inside an empty classroom.
"AHHHHHH...mpffff--mpffff!!!" She had started to scream, but her sounds were muffled by the cold hand. The classroom was very dark, and only a small sliver of moonlight was shining in toward the back of the room, leaving her in almost complete darkness.
"Calm down! I won't hurt you."
Severus! She stopped squirming, anticipating his next words.
"If I let you go, promise you won't scream?"
She nodded her head.
"Good girl." He removed his hand from her face and let his other one release her waist. "I've been watching you all week."
"You scared me to death! If you wanted to talk to me, you should have done it a different way!"
"Element of surprise. Keeps things interesting," he whispered.
"What do you want?"
"Potter and Black haven't done anything to me this week. What have you told them? And don't lie!"
"I don't know... They called you a bastard the day after I left the hospital wing, and I told them that you weren't one. Although, you can be cruel. And that you actually helped me. That's it; I swear."
"I don't need your fucking pity."
Hermione's heart sank at his use of words. "Pity? I do not pity you!"
"Then what do you call it?"
"Sticking up for someone I lo... like!"
He had grabbed her shoulders and pulled her closer. She could feel his breath as he spoke to her, and she wished he would kiss her.
"I told you not to lie to me."
"It's not a lie... I like you."
"Why?" he snapped.
"I just do!"
Snape released her and fled from the dark classroom, leaving Hermione bewildered.
Stupid girl. Doesn't she know who she's messing with? Potter and Black probably put her up to screwing with my mind. I'll get to the bottom of her nonsense, though. Watch out, Mione! Nobody pulls the wool over the Half-Blood Prince's eyes and gets away with it!
Hermione slowly left the empty classroom, walked back to her dorm and lay down on the bed.
Way to go, Granger. You just scared him off. You are here for a purpose, so do your job and stop dreaming of Severus... SNAPE! Think of him as Snape!
She pulled the blankets over her shivering body and drifted off to sleep.
It was early the next morning when she awoke and snuck down to the common room. Remus was sitting on the chair in front of the fire, looking very pale.
Without turning his head, he spoke to her. "Good morning, Mione. You're up awfully early."
She knew that he smelled her, but she had to play it off like she didn't know anything.
"How did you know it was me?"
"Sixth sense."
"Well, it seems you are the one who is up early."
"I never went to bed," he said.
She walked over to the other large chair across from him and sat down. "Why not?"
"I'm not feeling well. I get sick easily, and when I do, I usually can't sleep."
Hermione felt so bad for him; she wanted to show her support but couldn't. "I'm sorry to hear that. Did you go to the game?"
"Yes, we won. Did you not hear the party that was going on here last night?"
"I was fast asleep. It's been a long and strange week."
"Understandable. But you weren't alone, were you?" he said with a suspicious tone.
"I don't think I understand." Her heart started pumping harder.
"Hmm." He stood up and leaned over her and took a deep whiff of her body.
"Excuse me!" she said, shocked.
"I told you that I have a sixth sense about these things. What did he want?" He sat back down in the chair, waiting to hear her story.
"What did who want?"
"You know who. And you know that I know."
Before she could answer, the door to the common room flew open and someone came through the portrait hole.
"We'll continue this later," he whispered. "Ah, Sirius... sleep elsewhere last night?"
Sirius came strolling over to where they were sitting and plopped down next to Hermione, sighing with relief. He had pink lip prints on his cheek, his hair was untidy, his shirt was buttoned wrong, and his shoelaces were untied.
"Yep. Those twins in Ravenclaw have more energy than a crazy Cornish Pixie."
"Eww," Hermione said with disgust.
Remus started laughing. "Yes, well, don't complain. You brought that on yourself!"
"I know. I'm going to go bathe, then take a long nap." He looked over at Hermione. "Perhaps I could persuade you to give me a hand in the tub?" He smirked.
"Get out of here!" She chuckled. "Speaking of bathing, I'm going to go get a shower, head down to breakfast, and then do some homework, so I'll be back much later."
"Mmm... maybe I should lend you a hand in the tub?" Sirius said.
Hermione snorted at Sirius as she walked back up to the dorm to retrieve her bathroom items.
"I had to ask!" Sirius shouted from behind her.
Damn Remus Lupin and that nose! He knows about Severus... SNAPE! And you know he won't stop pestering you about it either.
"Hi, Lily. Did I wake you?" Hermione asked when she walked through the door.
"No, my stomach did. Too much butterbeer last night--we won, though!"
"Yes, Remus told me."
"You missed a great game... ugh! What type of perfume are you wearing?" Lily said, scrunching her nose. Hermione smelled her arm, the one that Sirius had been closest to.
"Essence of Ravenclaw twins. Courtesy of Sirius Black," Hermione said.
"Enough said." Lily giggled. "I warned you that he was a ladies' man."
"Yes, and a major flirt."
"Of course. The trick, though, is to get a boyfriend. Ever since James and I started dating, he has left me alone."
"I'm working on that," Hermione said quietly.
It had now officially been a month since she arrived in 1976. Halloween was a few days away, and Hermione had not yet started figuring out how to go about warning people about the coming years. She actually put it to the back of her mind; she was more interested in getting to know these people, especially the mysterious boy who would become the man she loved.
After Snape cornered her in the classroom a few weeks ago, he had only talked to her once, when they were paired in D.A.D.A.
"Come on! Give me all you've got," he taunted her.
"You don't want me to hex you. I'll make your eyes cross!" she shot back.
The class was outside by the Black Lake, practicing, and Snape took her to an area that was the furthest from the rest of the class. They had been paired and were told to cast defensive spells against each other. Snape had only done a small spell on her; he didn't want to hear her cry. But, when she stood back up, he realized that he had underestimated the new girl.
"Rictusempra!" she shouted.
Snape fell to the floor laughing; it was like a thousand hands were tickling him to death. Hermione walked over to him and released the jinx. He was lying on the ground looking up into her eyes, thinking she was going to hex him again. He tried to reach for his wand without moving too much, but it wasn't near him.
"You should laugh more often, Severus. You look very handsome when you do." Hermione left him there on the ground and walked back toward the class.
That was all Snape needed to decide that this witch had lost her mind. Handsome? He had never heard that word directed toward him. Black, maybe, but not him. He was still lying on the ground when another person leaned over him, blocking the sun and creating a silhouette.
"What did you do to her, Snivellus? I saw her storm off after she attacked you."
"Sod off, Black."
Snape rolled onto his side, away from Sirius, gathered his wand and jumped to his feet.
"You're pathetic. Letting a girl out-duel you."
"You're pathetic, thinking that your usual tactics of seduction will work on a girl like her! I've seen the way you flirt with her!" Snape snapped back.
"On a girl like her? Tell me, Snivellus, do you like Mione?"
Snape had started to walk away when Sirius tripped him. "You do, don't you? Severus Snape, the greasy git of the dungeons, actually likes a girl! And a Gryffindor girl, for that matter! I guess that means those rumors that you're gay aren't true--"
"I said, sod off! Incarcerous!" Thick ropes jumped out of Snape's wand and bound Sirius' arms to his body, causing him to topple over. Snape turned and left him there. Sirius was trying to wiggle himself free.
Great. Now the whole school will think that I like that annoying girl. I better get her alone before he has a chance to rot her mind.
Hermione was talking with Lily when Severus approached her. "We are supposed to be working together for the remainder of the class; you still owe me fifteen minutes of your time." Hermione grinned and then followed Snape toward the edge of the Lake.
"Okay, you have my attention. What would you like to practice now?"
"Nothing, I just needed to warn you about something."
"What?" she said, sounding serious.
"Black. He saw you jinx me, and we got into another argument. Basically, now he thinks I like you and will be telling the whole school as much. By the end of the day, no doubt."
"And?" she huffed.
"AND? I DON'T LIKE YOU--I mean... err... I was just warning you!"
"Fine, you warned me," she said sadly and tried to walk past him.
"Mione," he grabbed her arm, "I'm sorry; that didn't come out correctly. I figured you would be disgusted by the thought that I would like you."
"Disgusted? I meant what I said earlier. You should laugh more often." She pulled out of his grip and walked away. He ran after her.
"Mione, wait. Look, I'm not a nice person. Don't try to be friends with me."
"I'll do what I want." She kept walking.
"Err, woman! You are driving me insane. Stay away from me--I'm no good!"
She stopped and turned to him. "No good? Why do you say that about yourself?"
"Nothing. Don't worry about it."
She took a step closer to him, looking up at him with caring eyes. "Severus, there's a Hogsmeade weekend coming up. Would you like to join me?"
"I... I don't go there. No."
"How about I stay behind?"
"Is this some sort of joke that you and your friends are trying to pull?"
"No, you jerk! I'm trying to ask you out, and you are making this very difficult! Forget it!"
Hermione ran off in tears. Severus stood there, angry. He blamed Potter and Black--he was always suspicious of things, and now, when something genuine came along, he ruined it.
"She really does like you, Severus," said a soft voice from behind some bushes.
Snape turned, pulling his wand out, and faced Remus.
"Lupin. Get out of here."
"No, Severus. I heard every word. You are acting like a fool, thinking she has some sort of plot to trick you. She really does fancy you; believe me, I can sense it."
"What do you care?"
"I care about her because she's my friend, and I don't want to see her unhappy--and trust me, she has been very unhappy this past month. She's scared, and she thinks she's alone. She may put on a good front, but I know when she's been crying, and I know when she's angry, just like I know that you don't really hate her. So, please give her a chance. I think she would be good for you," Lupin stated.
"Damn you and your extra senses. Fine! There's no use in lying to you, but so help me, Lupin, if word of this gets to Black or Potter, I will--"
"I know, I know. You'll tell the entire school I'm a werewolf."
"Damn straight. Now move. I have to go ask someone out on a bloody date."
Severus pushed passed a smiling Lupin and hiked over to where Hermione was standing. He walked up behind her and leaned down to her ear, whispering quietly, "I'm sorry."
Hermione stiffened, but didn't turn her head, just continued to listen to the boy behind her.
"I would like it very much if you stayed behind this weekend. I want to take you somewhere special here on the grounds; is that okay?"
She shrugged her shoulders, playing hard to get.
"I promise I won't be an arse. I do like you--a lot. I'm just scared."
Finally, Hermione turned around and faced him.
"Me too," she said looking up into his dark eyes. "Meet me in the Great Hall Saturday, then."
"She must be hiding somewhere, Harry. You know when she wants to be alone, we can't find her."
"No, Ron. Something isn't right. Hermione has been missing for a full day! We can't even find her on the map! I think we need to tell Professor McGonagall."
"Fine, let's go."
Harry and Ron walked down to her office and knocked, but there was no answer. "It's getting late. Maybe she's doing rounds before bed? Why don't we go get your map to find her more easily?"
"Good idea."
They started jogging up the stairs, but stopped because the stairs had started to move. They clutched the rails and waited for them to stop, but at the top of the landing waited the one person they were not looking for.
"Out wandering the halls again? You're lucky you have fifteen minutes to curfew. However, by the way you two were running--you weren't headed off to bed. Twenty points from Gryffindor."
"Professor Snape, please! It's Hermione," Ron pleaded.
"She's missing!" Harry shouted.
Snape raised his eyebrow. "Missing?"
"She's been gone for over twenty-four hours, and nobody has seen her! We have searched everywhere!"
"Over twenty-four hours?" he said slowly.
"Yes!" Harry bellowed.
"Shite." Snape pushed passed them and started running down the stairs, with Harry and Ron at his heels.
"Sir! What is going on?" Ron said
"Is it... Vold--"
Snape stopped suddenly, making Ron almost run into the back of him.
"How many times have I told you NOT to say his name in front of me!" he said to Harry.
"Sorry, but what's going on? Does he have anything to do with her disappearance?" Harry asked.
"Not directly. Fetch the Headmaster; I have to get something. I will meet you three in his office." He turned and started back down the stairs. Despite being nearly twenty years their senior, he was able to outrun Harry and Ron.
The boys went up to Dumbledore's office and started shouting all sorts of passwords to the gargoyle.
"He won't open up because I'm not in my office," said a tender voice from behind them.
"Professor Dumbledore! Hermione's been missing for over twenty-four hours, and Professor Snape told us to tell you and that he would meet us here in your office!" shouted Harry.
"She's missing? Oh, dear. Go inside, quickly." The stone gargoyle opened up, and Harry and Ron ran up the spiral stairs and into the office, hoping that Snape would be in there waiting on them. Instead, a raven patronus was floating around the office.
"Personal," the raven Patronus said in Snape's voice as Dumbledore walked into the room and spotted it. Then it disappeared.
"What was that?" Ron asked.
"I thought you said Severus went to get something?" Dumbledore said to Harry, ignoring Ron.
"He did--what's going on?" Harry said.
"He's been summoned. I don't think he will be making it to our meeting."
"Summoned! Couldn't he have waited until he told us where Hermione is?"
"No, you heard his Patronus. It said personal, meaning Voldemort specifically wanted to see him at that moment in time, and he had to go or would be severly hurt. What was he going to go get?"
"He didn't say. We told him she's been missing for over twenty-four hours, and he cursed and started running down the stairs. We followed him and asked what was going on, and that's when he told us to meet him here."
Dumbledore walked over to the fireplace and Floo-called Remus Lupin. "Please come here, Remus; it's urgent." In a flash, the D.A.D.A. teacher emerged from the fire. Since Kingsley Shacklebolt had taken over the Ministry, Remus was able to come back to Hogwarts and continue teaching.
"Remus, Hermione is missing. Severus was summoned, but he was supposed to meet me here with Harry and Ron. Have you seen her?"
"No," he said with a worried look on his face.
"I think we will have to wait until Severus gets back. He must know something that I don't." He turned to Harry and Ron. "I will alert you as soon as he returns. Until then, keep searching for her. But first, we will let the Order know she's missing, and we can search the grounds more thoroughly."
"She's not on the grounds, sir," Harry said.
"How do you know?" asked Dumbledore.
Harry turned his fixed glare on Remus. "She's not on the map."
Lupin's eyes widened.
"Map?" asked Dumbledore.
"Never mind about that right now, Albus. Hermione's in danger," Lupin said.
Thanks Lariope for betaing this chapter--again.
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119 Reviews | 6.66/10 Average
This story was wonderful! My favourite so far of any Hermione time turner fics ive read. I really like the way you wrote Severus' character. You didnt make him too whiny, or too mean like some other fics that Ive read. Your writing style is also fun to read. Im looking forward to reading others stories of yours.
Response from shellsnapeluver (Author of The Time-Turner)
Thank you so much,
Response from shellsnapeluver (Author of The Time-Turner)
!! I really love time-turner fics so I appreicate your review very much. My other writings are a lot darker, just to warn you... lol!Shell~
“I know. I didn’t know you were his girlfriend; if I had known, I swear I would never have made any advances on you.”“I know, that’s my and Severus’ fault.uh that totally is not her or severus' fault. it doesnt matter if she is seeing someone-he just shouldnt do that period. he was extremely forceful and god knows how far he would have went.
Response from shellsnapeluver (Author of The Time-Turner)
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im pretty sure her bruise wont appear that quickly.
Response from shellsnapeluver (Author of The Time-Turner)
Well, it did.
wow that was awesome!ha :) if it was a book i wouldn't be able to put it down but in this case i wasn't able to put my laptop down :P nicely done!it made me go aww at the end
Response from shellsnapeluver (Author of The Time-Turner)
Wow, thanks!!!! That is such a beautiful compliment, you are too sweet!!*hugs*
bloody superb story! I started it and couldn't stop reading it. Normally time turner fics are quite similar, but it was different and throughly enjoyable! Credit to your writing skills. It s 5 star from me!
Response from shellsnapeluver (Author of The Time-Turner)
Thank you so much!!! It really makes my day to know someone couldn't put down my story... you are so sweet.Thank you again.
Response from shellsnapeluver (Author of The Time-Turner)
Thank you so much!!! It really makes my day to know someone couldn't put down my story... you are so sweet.Thank you again.
Great chapter!, hot and touching...I'm thrilled at the idea that Severus has loved her all along.Very much enjoying this story!
Response from shellsnapeluver (Author of The Time-Turner)
So glad you are! Thank you... yes lots of love from Sev!
Response from shellsnapeluver (Author of The Time-Turner)
So glad you are! Thank you... yes lots of love from Sev!
This chapter was really sweet and romantic! Your portrayal of young Severus is fascinating!Very well written my dear :)
Response from shellsnapeluver (Author of The Time-Turner)
Why thank you! :)
Lovely chapter!I enjoyed how you have portrayed young Severus...still him, but a lot more vulnerable!And your Sirius?? OMG, he's hilarious! I love this:Sirius came strolling over to where they were sitting and plopped down next to Hermione, sighing with relief. He had pink lip prints on his cheek, his hair was untidy, his shirt was buttoned wrong, and his shoelaces were untied. “Yep. Those twins in Ravenclaw have more energy than a crazy Cornish Pixie.”Very well done my dear!!!
Response from shellsnapeluver (Author of The Time-Turner)
hahahahah... Thank you for the clapping dude! This is why I loved writing this story... because I can do things with characters we don't really know too much about... like Sirius, Remus, James, Lily and Young Sev. So much fun!:)
xoxoxo
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Thanks for a new wonderful time-travelling story! They are my favorite. I loved this one very much.
Response from shellsnapeluver (Author of The Time-Turner)
I really like them too! They are so much fun! Thank you for reading and reviewing!! Cheers!
Yay! A LOVELY, PERFECTLY WONDERFUL HAPPY ENDING!!! I love happy endings. I think you can tell. But all the same, I cannot wait until your intended ending goes up. I suspect it will have something. . . or everything. . . to do with Bellatrix and Lucius and Rodolphus, but I don't care. Sad endings are better for you anyway. Even if happy endings make you feel tingly inside, like this one.Anyway, amazing story! Please write more?~Katie
Response from shellsnapeluver (Author of The Time-Turner)
Hi Katie,I'm so happy you loved the ending! Squee!!And you suspect right... the three ARE on the loose...Stay tuned and more will come!!!Thanks for reading and reviewing too, :)Shell~
What an intriguing start! I loved how Hermione's thoughts kept oscillating from the past to the present. Very well done!Lovely use of imagery too...I particularly liked this one:" I've always thought I was a pebble in your shoe.”I can see you are a very talented artist and writer! :)
Response from shellsnapeluver (Author of The Time-Turner)
You have made me so happy that you are reading this! Yes, the past and present mixes a lot in this story!Squee!!Shell~
I suppose Harry has heard about his parents from lots of people, but to hear it directly from his best friend who had just left them must make them seem a lot closer. I loved the ending Severus deseves some happines. Talk about foreshadowing tho....
Response from shellsnapeluver (Author of The Time-Turner)
Thank you for reading the story and reviewing! Yes, it means so much to Harry to actually hear about his parents from his best friend... it's something he will treasure always.Oh good... so you see some foreshadowing... lol yes, yes... what will happen???
Response from shellsnapeluver (Author of The Time-Turner)
Thank you for reading the story and reviewing! Yes, it means so much to Harry to actually hear about his parents from his best friend... it's something he will treasure always.Oh good... so you see some foreshadowing... lol yes, yes... what will happen???
A happy ending...I love it.
Response from shellsnapeluver (Author of The Time-Turner)
Yes, happy! Thanks for reading and reviewing.
I can't believe it - they are still alive.Until the last line I half expected those fugitive Death Eaters would come around and kill them both on the beach or something like that...Thank you for an amazing story!
Response from shellsnapeluver (Author of The Time-Turner)
Wow--I didn't think others would think that I might kill them off! I just wanted the readers to know that there was still a danger out there...Thank you for saying it was an amazing story, that warmed my heart.
Very nice ending. I'm glad Harry was able to learn a bit about his parents from Hermione. I suspect it did them both good.
Response from shellsnapeluver (Author of The Time-Turner)
Thank you so much. Yes, I thought it would be nice for Harry to hear about his parents, to get an insight to them...
A blissfully wonderful ending.Bravo!
Response from shellsnapeluver (Author of The Time-Turner)
*bows* hehehhe... Thanks!
Thanks! Great finish to a great story and I look forward to the alternative ending. Question for you - Why use the word Professor in Hermione's dialog when they orgasm? Hermione has been calling him Severus prior to it and after it. I did a double-take and I just felt it 'jarred'. Um, I suppose it reminded me of his older Professorial self and schoolgirl Hermione rather than the couple that had been built up during the story. I am just interested in your choice there....Notwithstanding that, I truly loved it *:-) and claps enthsiastically*.
Response from shellsnapeluver (Author of The Time-Turner)
Thanks for your question--I think one of two things happened... that might have been apart of the old version, and I just forgot to change it, or it was because she was finally free to call him that, like it had been forbidden for her to say that because 1. she was in the past and 2. because it always has been severus and now it was just a naughty fantasy to scream that out... I didn't think much of it. Maybe I should change it?But otherwise, thank you for the clapping... *grins*
Oh, I can't wait to see what this other ending is! I like that you decided to break it up and provide two endings.
Response from shellsnapeluver (Author of The Time-Turner)
Yeah, I decided to take the ending and just make a whole new story out of it, so it will be a sequel. And you can figure out who will be making an apperance...
Nce nice ending loved the part about his body being 20 years older and him concerned! But I wonder what you are planing next?...........great story!
Response from shellsnapeluver (Author of The Time-Turner)
Thank you. I thought it was important to know that over time, your body changes... and she still loves him no matter what he looks like.Yes, what AM I planning next? Well, I wonder who is on the loose... heheheheh
A well wrapped up story. I really enjoyed the tale. I especially liked Severus's thoughts of panic at the end of the chapter.
Response from shellsnapeluver (Author of The Time-Turner)
Thank you
Response from shellsnapeluver (Author of The Time-Turner)
. I'm glad you understand his panic... it's very valid. And very real.
Great finish, nice to see them out in the sun, well presumably he gets out in the sun at some stage!
Response from shellsnapeluver (Author of The Time-Turner)
hahahha... yes, that was totally her idea to get to the beach... as you can tell, the sun and him don't mix well, but he lives through it... for her.
That's mean to leave it as a cliffie, but you are forgiven with the sequel coming. You're gonna kill one of them off aren't you--
Response from shellsnapeluver (Author of The Time-Turner)
Muwhahahah... what am I going to do?? hmm.... thanks for reading!
Anonymous
First reviewer! Wheeeeee!
I should take a cue from you and review as I read, because I don't want to forget things.
First of all, this was the best of ALL the chapters, for a lot of reasons, and I think you ended it perfectly (especially with that little bit of foreboding). It's like, this is a movie, and now we are ready for the sequel!
I liked how they told everyone. It was clear, concise, didn't tell more than they needed-- it was discreet and respectful to themselves. Second, I liked when she and Harry talked about his parents. That was really well done. I don't like Harry, but I could totally feel for him-- here was someone who not only knew his parents, but knew them just a short time ago!
I loved Snape getting the room ready. His thoughts-- this is honesty, I thought. Of course he would feel like "my body has changed" and "I'm not an 18 yr old boy with stamina and energy and a perma-erection". That was fantastic. If he had been all cocky (haha) I don't know if I would've believed that. That insecurity was true and real and made me love him!
I have a thing for him wearing just black trousers and nothing else, so... unh. It has to be barefoot and bare-chested, too. I would totally attack him like that.
Now, the spanking scene. Read twice. Leaving this review now to read again. Damn. I'm glad I hadn't read that before my detention scene-- I would've stolen it, LOL! Fucking perfect. Oh. God. Perfect. I can't even tell you which part was best. Throwing her onto the bed so that she bounced across it? Fuck. Me. Not letting up when she refused to follow directions? Yeah. Yeah.
Re-read! You rule!
Oh, and thanks for the sweet shout-out. I was all like, Yeah, I talked to Shell, uh huh....
Author's Response:
Okay, first of all... I just wanted to thank you for supporting me, I mean you do in private, but to actually come on here and leave not just a review, but a lengthy review... well, that means more to me than you think.
I am so happy you approved of the ending!
And of course he wouldn't be cocky about his body! That's lucius... hehehehhe.... But, I'm so glad that you and others believed in that because that was a fun scene to write... espeically when he forces her to look at the Dark Mark...
Uh duh. Black trousers and nothing else. That is the fucking sexist thing!!! I could seriously orgasm without having to touch myself by just looking at that man dressed in nothing but black trousers!
And omg the spanking--when i read your dention scene, I was like--oh dear... I have that in TT! heheheh... we have sick minds, yes? And you are killing me! "Fuck.Me." bwhahahahah
Just whwen things can finally go right for them, we find there is still a danger out there for both of them. Sigh. Will they ever get their happily-ever-after?
Response from shellsnapeluver (Author of The Time-Turner)
I know... I'm so mean. lol.