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Second Life
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Hermione is forced to lead a double life when she agrees to Dumbledore's plan to protect Professor Snape. Inspired by the Marriage Law. Warning for student/teacher relationship, though Hermione is of age.
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I guess it just hit me that you've been literally incorporating bits of DH into your story. It's so seamless that I wouldn't be able to tell if JK's words weren't in italics! Brilliantly done.
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Thank you so much!
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Thank you so much!
Their tenderness is so real and bittersweet...I loved reading this chapter.
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I'm so glad, Belladonn2010. Thank you! Eleven has always been one of my favorites, and I'm so glad you liked it.
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I'm so glad, Belladonn2010. Thank you! Eleven has always been one of my favorites, and I'm so glad you liked it.
Snape's reaction to Hermione's tears...ahhh it broke my heart I can tell you've put a lot of thought into his complex psychology.
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Thank you! I'm glad you felt this was a very psychological chapter; despite the physical nature of his wounds, I did too. Thank you for reading and reviewing!
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Thank you! I'm glad you felt this was a very psychological chapter; despite the physical nature of his wounds, I did too. Thank you for reading and reviewing!
...Yum!I like that Hermione takes Snape slightly by surprise. Catching him off-guard is simply delicious, is it not?
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Yes, and so hard to do!! :)
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Yes, and so hard to do!! :)
I like your characterization of Snape in this chapter - severe and steadfast, yet ultimately helpless as Dumbledore's "weapon." I'm glad you didn't show a "soft side" which, in my opinion, doesn't exist (or if it does, it wouldn't be exposed without a LOT of effort!).Also, I guess this chapter banished those questions I had after reading the first chapter. It seems more believable now.Your depiction of the marriage itself was spot-on; succint, not drawn out and (too) angsty. On to chapter three...
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Oh, I'm very glad things are seeming clearer. I do think there's a kind of suspension of disbelieve that you need to get through to get to Dumbledore's deeper plan, but as in canon, I'm not sure the plan itself couldn't have been thought through more clearly. :)And I'm glad you enjoyed Snarky!Snape. I so enjoy writing him.
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Oh, I'm very glad things are seeming clearer. I do think there's a kind of suspension of disbelieve that you need to get through to get to Dumbledore's deeper plan, but as in canon, I'm not sure the plan itself couldn't have been thought through more clearly. :)And I'm glad you enjoyed Snarky!Snape. I so enjoy writing him.
This chapter is a good example of strong writing, and I look forward to reading on...I'm not sure if you are open to constructive criticism, so forgive me for being forward, and I'll totally understand should you choose to disregard my comments. The logic behind Snape's marriage to Hermione seems a bit hurried. If Dumbledore was looking for a way for Snape gain the trust for the Order, I feel like he could have found a different way (e.g. he could leave behind a letter or something of the like, to be read after his death, assuring the Order that Snape is to be trusted). However, I understand that marriage has historically been used as a powerful tool to fortify an otherwise brittle relationship between two parties. In any case, your writing has made me think beyond just your words, which in itself is an admirable quality. Keep writing!
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Thank you, Belladonna, for such a thoughtful review, and I'm glad you've chosen to continue on. I think you're absolutely right, that there is something lacking in the logic of the premise, although I hope you will be able to forget it as the story progresses. And I think, too, that we begin to see that Dumbledore may have wanted to create a situation in which someone could bear witness to what Snape does through the final year of the war. And then, of course, there are motivations of his of which we know nothing in the first chapter. I do hope you enjoy it!I am always open to constructive criticism; I think fandom is a wonderful community for enriching writers and their abilities.
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Thank you, Belladonna, for such a thoughtful review, and I'm glad you've chosen to continue on. I think you're absolutely right, that there is something lacking in the logic of the premise, although I hope you will be able to forget it as the story progresses. And I think, too, that we begin to see that Dumbledore may have wanted to create a situation in which someone could bear witness to what Snape does through the final year of the war. And then, of course, there are motivations of his of which we know nothing in the first chapter. I do hope you enjoy it!I am always open to constructive criticism; I think fandom is a wonderful community for enriching writers and their abilities.
I really shouldn't try to read this at night, it keeps me up for way too long! XD I have so many questions in my head about the future of this story and yet it seems pointless in asking since I just can click on and find out :D
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Thank you, Kelly! I hope some of you questions are getting answered. Now get some rest! :)
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Thank you, Kelly! I hope some of you questions are getting answered. Now get some rest! :)
So that is how he was able to get away with it. Good idea with the bones!
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Thank you! That was a tricky scene to write. I'm glad you liked it. ;)
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Thank you! That was a tricky scene to write. I'm glad you liked it. ;)
You know in a way this tale kind of down plays Hermione's smarts. In canon she was able to do all this herself, but in this tale she is being helped by Snape greatly. Not saying that it is bad just stating a difference between her story and yours. (I hope that does not sound to critical against your work, because I am enjoying this story a lot)
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I know exactly what you're saying,
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, and it's definitely something that this story has been criticized for. To me, and this is just my perspective, Hermione is a character who has more going on than just being Harry's smart friend who always has the answer, and I felt, as I read DH, that she'd been made TOO smart. It seemed too easy to me that she always knew the right Charm or Spell. I think SL was my attempt to temper that a little, to let her be her age more and to come into her wisdom gradually. But I absolutely see your point. Thanks for such a thought provoking review!
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I know exactly what you're saying,
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, and it's definitely something that this story has been criticized for. To me, and this is just my perspective, Hermione is a character who has more going on than just being Harry's smart friend who always has the answer, and I felt, as I read DH, that she'd been made TOO smart. It seemed too easy to me that she always knew the right Charm or Spell. I think SL was my attempt to temper that a little, to let her be her age more and to come into her wisdom gradually. But I absolutely see your point. Thanks for such a thought provoking review!
OMG I wonder how he is going to get out of killing her parents, I assume that he won't but I wonder how what he has gotten planned to get of punishment for not doing it.
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I'm glad you have faith in him. :) You will soon know! Thanks for reading and reviewing!
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I'm glad you have faith in him. :) You will soon know! Thanks for reading and reviewing!
I knew immediately what she going to do when they were passing around the potion, I had a feeling that she would give it to him instead. However, I was surprised by the kiss, that devious man XD. That was one hot kiss there!Now the plot has changed, the love between them as been establish and the second part of the story begins -- dealing with it when they are parted from each other. Clicking on!
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Oh, I'm glad you liked the kiss. And you're absolutely right, there's a definite transition in the story going on there. I hadn't thought about that before. Thank you!
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Oh, I'm glad you liked the kiss. And you're absolutely right, there's a definite transition in the story going on there. I hadn't thought about that before. Thank you!
Part of me wonders if she'll tell this to Harry but its doubtful considering that she is now protective over Snape, if not more than Harry now. Clicking on for answers. This story is SO good!
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Thank you! And I definitely agree that there's a shifting of loyalty between Harry and Snape, though I think ultimately she's desperate to structure her world to where she can be loyal to both. Thank you for reading!
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Thank you! And I definitely agree that there's a shifting of loyalty between Harry and Snape, though I think ultimately she's desperate to structure her world to where she can be loyal to both. Thank you for reading!
I could have sworn that I posted a review for this, but it appears not. I am remiss. No more.First of all - thank you for the most incredible ride. This is a Book 7 that makes both the child and the adult in me smile.The thing that I've loved from beginning to end is the tenor of hopefulness that weaves its way throughout the whole story. Nothing over the top, just the kind that exists in everyday living.This ending is peaceful and realistic. I can actually sense the healing in our two favorite characters.I loved the way Severus girded his loins, so to speak, and did what was necessary to make a start of things. From facing his demons and returning to Hogwarts for the tree and the letter of recommendation, to seeking out employment that didn't pay him what he's really worth in the field, but allows him to continue to establish trust in the Wizarding community and amoungst his colleagues, it shows that he is regaining his courage, that his relationship with Hermione has helped him to access his inner strength.It was very special to me that Severus went out of his way to do things to make Hermione laugh, smile, and feel loved as she was coming down off of her survival adrenalin high that she sustained in the run-up to the trial and through it. It was like every success he had in bolstering Hermione, repaired a bit of his own self-worth.The thing I liked the most though was Hermione telling him that, as appreciative as she is, he didn't have to 'buy' her love. It was unconditional.Anyway, before I write a novellete, let me just say thank you once again. (Rating? Ten Stars.)~
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Arynwy,This could not mean more to me, as you've said everything I'd hoped for for the final chapter. I reread it last night for the first time since it posted--I was simply too emotionally close to look back until then--and so this means more to me now than ever, as my memory of it is fresh. Thank you for everything, Aryanwy--for all your reviews and encouragement. And thank you most for speaking to the hope exists under the surface, that I so hoped was there all along. Much love,Lariope
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Arynwy,This could not mean more to me, as you've said everything I'd hoped for for the final chapter. I reread it last night for the first time since it posted--I was simply too emotionally close to look back until then--and so this means more to me now than ever, as my memory of it is fresh. Thank you for everything, Aryanwy--for all your reviews and encouragement. And thank you most for speaking to the hope exists under the surface, that I so hoped was there all along. Much love,Lariope
This story was amazing. Thank you. It's one of the few in my favorites now.
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Thank you so much! I'm so glad you enjoyed it. And thank you for all your reviews!
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Thank you so much! I'm so glad you enjoyed it. And thank you for all your reviews!
Why didn't she return to school and finish her year? What about her NEWTs? They meant everything to her? Why isn't Hermione working if she isn't in school. I like that they are brewing together, but she has to find her path too.
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I think she will. I think she is suffering from the strangeness of having "been of use" for so long, and stepping immediately onto a path that she will get to choose for herself is harder than she would have expected. Thank you for reading and reviewing!
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I think she will. I think she is suffering from the strangeness of having "been of use" for so long, and stepping immediately onto a path that she will get to choose for herself is harder than she would have expected. Thank you for reading and reviewing!
Wow, Luna was so able to piece things together. I loved her testamony. As usual good job with this trial. It's like being there!
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Thank you! The trial was brutally horrible to write, both emotionally and technically, so that means a lot to me. And of course, I'm so glad you liked Luna. She is one of my very favorite characters. :)
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Thank you! The trial was brutally horrible to write, both emotionally and technically, so that means a lot to me. And of course, I'm so glad you liked Luna. She is one of my very favorite characters. :)
I think you did well with the trial. It was believable and intriguing. Probably the best I've read so far.
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Thank you! This was my second attempt at trial fic, and honestly, I hope I never do it again. EVER. :) But that makes your compliment mean more. I really appreciate it. xoxox
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Thank you! This was my second attempt at trial fic, and honestly, I hope I never do it again. EVER. :) But that makes your compliment mean more. I really appreciate it. xoxox
Oh my gods! You brought up the Elder Wand - had it exposed in court! wtf! What are - were you thinking? You've put a death warrent and target on Harry's chest! Anyone who's evil or wanna be will be gunning to get that wand! Are you insane? Couldn't you have found a way around it? Figured out something creative and not endangered Harry for the rest of his life?After everything.And everything Hermione and Severus did to save him, protect him and you just make him target for the Deathstick, Death's wand?Yuck.The rest of the trial was interesting, and you handled it well enough in my mind. Besides, the Wizarding world isn't perfect and having a few slop ups in the 'legal process' would seem par for the course' I think.
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To my mind, putting Severus on trial is the same thing as putting Dumbledore on trial, and I think the Dumbledore's candidness about what he had done and why is the real reason that Severus was freed--despite Kinglsey's good handling of the show.As far as the Elder Wand is concerned, I'd like to think that Harry broke it, ended it, instead of sticking it back in DD's tomb. That was in the notes but never made it into the story, so I can see where this chapter would seem horrifying. Sorry!
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To my mind, putting Severus on trial is the same thing as putting Dumbledore on trial, and I think the Dumbledore's candidness about what he had done and why is the real reason that Severus was freed--despite Kinglsey's good handling of the show.As far as the Elder Wand is concerned, I'd like to think that Harry broke it, ended it, instead of sticking it back in DD's tomb. That was in the notes but never made it into the story, so I can see where this chapter would seem horrifying. Sorry!
I think you did a great job with the trial. It was riveting and yet such a dymanic bit of writing. I couldn't get ove the 'evidence' and how Kingsley twisted everything around. whew
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Thanks! I owe Kingsley to OpalJade who flat out insisted that Kingsley could not be the politician I had originally intended him to be. And I think that she was spot on, though I was very resistant, and I'm very happy and lucky to have taken her advice. I'm glad you enjoyed it!
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Thanks! I owe Kingsley to OpalJade who flat out insisted that Kingsley could not be the politician I had originally intended him to be. And I think that she was spot on, though I was very resistant, and I'm very happy and lucky to have taken her advice. I'm glad you enjoyed it!
The hearing was as hard to read as it might have been to sit through. I wanted so much to add my thoughts in! Lucius was so arrogrant and yet he didn't do much dammage. I still feel sorry for Hermione. She's trying to be so brave and supportive and he won't give her anything in return.
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It's hard for him, I think, to be so helpless, to feel such lack of control when control is something he values so much in himself. But I agree--it is very hard on Hermione. He is fortunate that she is so incredibly tough.Thank you for reading and reviewing!
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It's hard for him, I think, to be so helpless, to feel such lack of control when control is something he values so much in himself. But I agree--it is very hard on Hermione. He is fortunate that she is so incredibly tough.Thank you for reading and reviewing!
So Kingsley finally gets it? and he's still being a prat? gads. I loved Minerva's giving Hermione her support. I nearly giggled at the reporters questions, as if she was going to give him an exclusive, HA. Severus is surely acting cold toward her. and the visit from Kinglsey to Spinner's End made my skin crawl.
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I think that for Kingsley, this is a logistical nightmare. He's just been made Minister of Magic and public opinion wants to skewer and burn the Death Eaters, probably Snape in particular, and yet he's just learned that Snape is not only not a Death Eater, but married to a former student... and somehow he's going to have to spin this to the public so that they'll find it acceptable....My head hurts for him when I think about it!!I'm so glad you liked Minerva. She's been a pleasure to write throughout. :)
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I think that for Kingsley, this is a logistical nightmare. He's just been made Minister of Magic and public opinion wants to skewer and burn the Death Eaters, probably Snape in particular, and yet he's just learned that Snape is not only not a Death Eater, but married to a former student... and somehow he's going to have to spin this to the public so that they'll find it acceptable....My head hurts for him when I think about it!!I'm so glad you liked Minerva. She's been a pleasure to write throughout. :)
Oh, why did Severus shove her away. He needs her and she is there for him, just like she'd promised when they married? self-defamming fool. I'm not sure I like how you wrote Kingsley. His manner is no better than the last two Ministers, (I don't count tDL's pupet, he was under the Imperous.) and what - Rita is at it? How did she get this information?Poor Hermione, she was completely railroaded by Kingsley, they took his wand, stripped Severus' magic and ... augh.
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I think Kingsley is a tricky one--and a man in a very bad position indeed. I can't imagine how to take over the leading of a world that is in that much pain, nor how he would want to deal with the problem of Severus. But he bears watching--OpalJade stepped in rather forcefully about him, and I hope you find him more to your liking later on. Thank you for reading and reviewing!
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I think Kingsley is a tricky one--and a man in a very bad position indeed. I can't imagine how to take over the leading of a world that is in that much pain, nor how he would want to deal with the problem of Severus. But he bears watching--OpalJade stepped in rather forcefully about him, and I hope you find him more to your liking later on. Thank you for reading and reviewing!
Gods, you have Severus as the wlaking dead. He's so screwed up. I could hug Mr. Weasley. Once again he's good sense was in the right. another good one... next.
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He is the walking dead, here, I think. that's an excellent analogy. I think everyone is during the first few hours (even days) after the war, but Severus most particularly, as he's having to rebuild his entire worldview.I'm so glad you liked Mr. Weasley. I love him very much. He steals every scene I ever put him in with his bumbling wisdom. Thank you!
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He is the walking dead, here, I think. that's an excellent analogy. I think everyone is during the first few hours (even days) after the war, but Severus most particularly, as he's having to rebuild his entire worldview.I'm so glad you liked Mr. Weasley. I love him very much. He steals every scene I ever put him in with his bumbling wisdom. Thank you!
Poor Trelawney. YOu followed canon well and added more to it. and Severu on the sidelines helping. Awesome.
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Thank you!
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Thank you!
I loved how you wrote the battle and the conflict of fighting. Good job.
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Thank you--writing the battle scenes was hard, but I consistantly found that I enjoyed the action/adventure parts of the story.
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Thank you--writing the battle scenes was hard, but I consistantly found that I enjoyed the action/adventure parts of the story.