I really enjoyed reading the flight on the Thestral from Hermiones pov, rather than Harrys.   You write well.  I am enjoying this story.  Pleae update soon.

Another wonderful chapter.  The part with Seversus at the end is poignant.

Your use of Moody is brilliant. First, if he of all people sits in the Headmaster's office and agrees that this marriage is needed, how could she doubt him?  Then in canon he gets killed, just when she needs him most.  Brilliant.

you broke my heart, with Snape's emotion, now fix it and make me all lemony

Ugh! How's Hermione going to convince Snape of his worht if they can't even be with each other?? This chapter was incredibly heart-wrenching. Loved it!!

wow this is really comming along you are really doing a wonderful job my dear

I love the description of Hermione in the picture. It is exactly what Snape is feeling, what he should be feeling, and it is amazing to see him work through those emotions.

You continue to impress me with how well you weave canon into your fic. The ending with Snape was very believable and my heart broke for him and Hermione. It does make one wonder how much progress they'll make in their relationship before the war ends.

This was masterful!  Well done! 

I have a weird feeling about it. It makes me uncomfortable. This war time, this is serious and you express it so well that it's just like I'm threatened myself. I'm very very impressed.

Such a little thing, but I don't believe anyone has described Snape's sitting room as "cramped and mouldy," yet I always imagined it to be all mildewy, musty.

Such a small thing, yes? Not so small our hero's depressed grief while in that cramped and mouldy room. I could draw parallels between the room and himself, and then add a fairly mundane observation about throwing open the windows, LOL- letting the sunshine of Hermione's smile into his life. But that's cliche, and you're taking this story to sublime levels, yes, even the darkest depths are sublime.

Another tip of my hat. Forgive the flowery (and idiotic) prose.

Author's Response: *Hugs you* I'm happy we share mouldy images of Snape. ;)

First of all, thank you so much for the update! It was a rather dark chapter, but I knew it had to be, so it was no surprice:-) As usual brilliantly written, and as usual do I love your story:-))

You had me in tears at the end of this! So sad, so heartwrenching. I love what you have done with canon; this fits so perfectly I am starting to believe that this is actually what happened and Jo just left some stuff out. Excellent excellent work, as always. I look forward to finding out how you will handle the rest of DH. Or, rather, improve the rest of DH!

I liked rereading that scene (one of the best of the book) from other points of vue.

This is so fabulous. I felt sick when Hermione realised that, without Moody, she was on her own. And that last scene with the photograph. Oh...

It's very original having Moody as the one Order member who knows the truth and still trusts Severus!

*speaks in a very conspiratorial voice*"Glenog Jones of the Hollyhead Harpies"Psst!  It's "Gwenog"</no I did not memorise the names of every single character ever mentioned in the Lexicon, no I certainly did not!> *cough*>.>

*sigh* His life is so bleak. So . . . full of lack of respect, so full of lack of love, from even his parents, his closest friend, and his mentor. I really just can't forgive Jo for saying he's a "deeply horrible person" when he never knew love, affection, normality and respect from anyone. His whole life has been "deeply horrible"; how is he supposed to know or behave any better?There have been some decidedly funny lines in your story; Harry and Snape sniping at each other was priceless. Snape Levicorpusing Harry and gloating about it was very in-character. And there were some lovely poetic descriptions in the smut!

I hope Hermione telling the Weasley's that her parents aren't really dead doesn't somehow get back to the Death Eaters. I don't think that would bode too well for Severus!But anyways, I love your fan fiction so much. I love how you fill in so many gaps. I'm looking forward to the next update!

I'm sorry Hermione loses Moody so soon after that.  At least he knew. 

Good chapter, one question though.  If they expect the MoM to be taken over why not hide the marriage certificate?

I really like you having a "good" Moody in there. I've always liked him, and he is usually portrayed as a nasty, prejudiced wizard ... As always, great work!

Terrific story so far.  You've kept everyone in character, and I like the way you've filled in the glaring gaps left by JKR.  Looking forward to the rest.  Although I hope you don't kill Snape, I hope you leave canon at that point.

I LIKE your Moody - it's such a true to life representation of what he should be. So often he descends into a caricature. 

Excellent. I've been re-reading DH on the train the last couple of days to get in the swing of things for this fic, and I gotta say this fits pretty seamlessly so far. I loved the order meeting. Molly Weasley is in such an unenviable position. I would not like to be in her shoes one little bit!