The Attack
Chapter 14 of 15
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The Attack
The morning dawned bright and inviting. The young lady made her way down the stairs to the street and on her way to work...greeting her neighbors and the early morning tradesmen. Another lovely lady, well-attired, watched the first lady walk along a quiet boulevard.
"AVADA ... "
The well-attired lady's wand hand was grabbed, and a hand clamped over her mouth as she was hauled back into the alley.
A moment later, the well-attired lady turned to her abductor in fury. "She's going to kill us! She's going to kill us, Jack!"
Her fury built. "Don't you care for us? Do you want to see us dead? Do you want to see me dead? Why don't you just take my wand and kill me? Take my wand and kill me, Jack."
Her fury boiled over. "The Dark Lord was weak. He was weak. Do you hear me? He could have killed Potter a dozen times. A dozen. He could have killed the whole damn trio. But no, he had to play around, playing with petty revenge. He had to send a boy. He should have sent a witch. The Dark Lord threw it away trying to set up pretty scenarios. It's not pretty scenarios. It's them or us."
"Oh, Jack, you're going to kill us," wailed Bellatrix, grabbing his cloak and shaking it in frustrated anguish.
'Damn all the gods, she might be right,' thought Jack. "I don't want to make the mistake the Dark Lord made of not listening to Trixie.'
'But I couldn't live with myself if I let Trixie or Narcy do it,' he thought as he folded Trixie in his arms.
'I'll kill the meddling witch,' he decided.
* * *
- "Witch seeking Potions master to stir her cauldron."
"No, no, no," muttered Hermione to herself. "I've got to be more subtle."
She had had the brilliant idea of contacting Severus through the Personal Ads of the more popular newspapers. She had thought it would be easy to place innocuous looking, but identifying, ads in the mundane papers even though doing the same in the wizard publications would be trickier. The whole process, however, was proving more difficult than she had imagined.
'Maybe if I adapted some of the usual ads,' she thought. 'Let's see.'
- "Enjoy walks on the beach and candlelit dinners. Appreciate sense of humor."
'There's a start,' she decided. 'All that's needed is a bit of rephrasing.'
- "Enjoy dank old dungeons and brooding evening meals. Humor is overrated."
'I think I'm getting the hang of this,' she concluded.
* * *
"You're being careful, aren't you?" she accused him.
'Marvelous,' he thought. 'The first thing in the morning, a squabble.' He sipped his coffee, waiting for more accusations. If he were lucky, they would contain enough information to let him know why he was in trouble.
"You wake up and double check to see who's in bed with you before saying anything. I wouldn't mind if you called me Narcy, and Cissy wouldn't mind if you called her Trixie. You act like you're afraid you'll call us something else."
"Oh, Hermione, you've got to let me get more sleep," he moaned.
"That's carrying humor too far, love. The cream in my coffee curdled."
She showed him her cup. It had curdled. There are disadvantages to being a witch.
He snapped his fingers, and cream appeared in his coffee. He handed it to her and rubbed her shoulders. It was another morning at the Manor.
He showered, thinking he shouldn't appear in front of a bunch of kids reeking of Trixie and sex, but then he remembered she had worn his shirt last night. He borrowed it back, thinking he was lucky the school allowed only cats, owls, and toads...a hound would mean instant exposure. He mentally reviewed the faculty roster. No, no werewolves.
Contrary to his expectations about villainesses, Trixie was a morning person and a gifted and meticulous experimenter. She got the other two moving in the morning and spent the day working on the painkiller potion swiped from Miss Granger's flat.
'The patience of a saint,' Jack had joked to himself.
He occasionally wondered why Miss Granger had not tried to develop such a beneficial potion.
The combination of Trixie and Jack in the lab and Narcy and Jack blocking out lines of investigation had them identifying the compounds in the painkiller within a month. Luckily for them, Severus had been rushed. He had modified a mundane narcotic, and he had not protected his potion from spell-chemistry. Now the three were working on reproducing the compounds and protecting them from both mundane and magic analysis.
The project and the threat of Miss Granger were taking their toll. By the time Jack, Narcissa, and Bellatrix arrived back at the Manor for afternoon tea, the three sought release in action. It was wild broom rides and ferocious spell casting. Jack had obtained a copy of the confidential manual for the law-enforcement division, and they had worked on the counter-spells until they were doing them in their sleep. They expected to face overwhelming odds. In case they couldn't make it to the escape tunnel, they practiced a mobile defense designed to separate and pick off their opponents.
The exercises were followed by showers and Jack giving a massage to the two women. There usually wasn't much left in Jack, and the massages were occasionally perfunctory, but he dared not skip them. What he had told Potter was true: it was a chaste way to pay attention to both of them, and it contributed to a harmonious evening. It relaxed them enough that they usually decided who was going to spend the night with Jack while getting their massage. Not that there was much to decide. It was almost always an every other night arrangement. The ladies thought that a bit unromantic, but neither wanted to give up her night. After years alone or estranged, they were beginning to like sleeping with their lover and greeting him the first thing in the morning.
Their tolerance for a threesome, their dedication to the task at hand, and their enthusiasm for the world around them had Jack enamored as never before. Every night he participated in the transformation of a professional companion into a loving companion.
Not for a single second did he believe it would be okay to begin the morning with a wrong name.
* * *
Several weeks later, Jack was in his office reviewing what Trixie had said after she returned from a trip to Canada. The Quebec wizards had settled around Montmagny, a village on the St. Lawrence River, and the Quebecois had no interest in the recent Brit civil war. The district shop had offered Trixie a position as a Potions mistress, and it would like to market the painkiller developed by her research-oriented husband, Jack Holt.
Jack thought about the next two years as planned by Trixie and Narcy. Trixie was certain she could set aside her aristocratic habits and play the part of a professional for two years. It was better than being a fugitive...and she was an early riser as she reminded them. Narcy thought that in two years she could regain active control of the Malfoy assets and transfer them to the Americas. Jack could spend a month in Quebec brewing potion for Eastern Canada and the Northeastern United States while continuing his potion research. Then he could spend a month in Great Britain helping manage and transfer the estate while continuing his potion research. The two women were certain he could handle all this and keep two witches with a growing amorous appetite happy.
"You're very capable, Jack."
Narcy had smugly informed him that Trixie had February.
'Two sisters,' thought Jack. 'Trixie is gentle and loving, and she likes her sex life, her new-found sex life. Narcy is more tightly wound, but when she lets go, it's like a coiled spring.'
There was a knock, and Narcissa entered. The approaching major change in her life had her in a serious mood.
"Do you love me?" she asked.
"Yes."
"Do you love my sister?"
"Partly. Somewhat."
"That's what my sister thinks. You're treating her very well. She really likes you."
"If this goes on much longer, I won't be able to leave either one of you. Perhaps things will change when we get to Quebec. Your sister will have a chance to meet people."
'Yes, things might change,' thought Narcissa. 'You could fall in love with my sister instead of me.'
"If this goes on much longer, Bella and I will never want it to change," she said.
'I'm being drawn into a long term relationship with them,' thought Jack. 'I know better. I know they're aristocrats who'll never accept me, but I can't resist them.'
* * *
"Is he practicing again?"
"Yes."
Even the Black sisters had to suppress a shudder. They had checked the storeroom and discovered Grandfather Vogel's wand was missing. The two sisters assumed the wand had called to Jack when he entered the storeroom in his current state of mind. Grandfather Vogel had often been called 'The Bird' because he had sent many souls flying.
One misty Friday evening, Jack announced that he was restless, he would take a short walk, and he would be back soon.
Two sisters, fully cloaked and determined, met him in the foyer. "You're not going alone, love."
* * *
Hermione, giving up on romantic relations, was being one of 'the boys.' This Friday evening, she had gone bar-hopping with Edmund and Rogers, two new members of the Ministry.
The mist and a cloak swirled out in front of her.
"Hermione Granger."
"Huh?"
"Fill your hand, you Gryffindor witch."
"What?"
Time slowed for Hermione. She saw Edmund step in front of her and be knocked aside. She saw Roger step in front of her and then land unconscious. She hurled her strongest defensive spell and then went flying backwards to land temporarily stunned.
* * *
Casting the three spells had brought him to his knees.
At the last moment, Jack could not bring himself to kill. The first two curses hurt him as he fought to restrain their lethality. He was empty when the third curse tore out of him and tore him up.
His two ladies lifted him from where he knelt and took him home.
"Say something, Jack"
"That wand must be taken back to the Manor and cast into the abyss from whence it came."
"Yeah, right," said Trixie, checking his pulse.
"Sure," said Narcy, shining a light into his eyes and looking for movement.
"Jack, are you there?"
'Oh, Jack,' they thought. If he did not recover, that Hermione bitch was dead, her family was dead, her friends were dead. Everyone would rue the day that Hermione bitch had not received a fatal curse.
The two witches placed Grandfather Vogel's wand on a bed of charcoal in a circle of stones. They aimed their wands by looking in smoky mirrors as the wand and charcoal were utterly consumed and the rocks turned to slag. Then they brought Jack to his room. Trixie held his head in her lap, and Narcy sponged his brow.
"We did not finish off the Granger," they told him. "We did not think you would want us to."
"Yes, yes," he said, squeezing their hands in gratitude. "I am very proud of you."
"I wanted to poke her in the eye," said Bellatrix.
"How are you?" they asked.
"I'll recover. I should not have tried to use that wand or those curses."
His two ladies felt relief. He would be okay, and he had not stained his soul. They brought him several brandies and then snuggled around him to make certain he slept peacefully.
* * *
There were nine people in the room for the four-way contract on the painkiller potion. Padma, Parvati, an uncle on their father's side, and a nephew on their mother's side were the four co-owners of the Patil Potion and Apothecary Shop. There was a Ministry official from Social Services, one from Contracts and Records, and one to preside and witness. Harry Potter and Jack Higgins represented themselves.
Each of them had checked and double-checked the projections and agreements. A week's supply of the potion would sell for one Galleon. There were at least 200 private individuals who needed and could afford the potion. In addition, the Social Services Department would agree to buy at least 100 units a week with the contract to be renewed each year at the discretion of the Department. The Shop would agree to supply at least 100 units a week for the Social Services Department and agree to let the Department renew for four more years with no increase in price. Harry Potter would immediately pay 20,000 Galleons to Jack Higgins and receive half the profits. The Shop would produce the potion and receive half the profits. For the next seven years, the Shop would send 30 Galleons a month to his ex-wife or to the guardian of Jack Higgins' daughter and place 100 Galleons a month in a trust fund for his daughter. She would inherit the trust fund when she completed school or when she was eighteen, at her preference.
Jack was satisfied that he had severed all ties. There was no reason for his ex-wife or anyone else to pursue him. The money from the rich Potter would give him a good start in his new life. The only person seriously pursuing Narcissa and Bellatrix had been Miss Granger, but she had been neutralized
Jack remained fairly certain the original potion belonged to Snape. He fought down his feelings of guilt by reminding himself that Snape was making millions selling an illicit drug to mundanes. Snape, the fugitive, could not risk selling to the wizard world...just the kindhearted act of supplying Miss Granger had placed him in danger. 'In danger from Granger,' thought Jack. 'That lady's a menace. I did society a favor.'
Although outwardly calm, Padma and Parvati could barely contain their excitement. Their parents and others in the family had examined the projections and concluded this potion would be the Shop's mainstay for the next decade. And the family's attitude toward Harry had changed. It was more than his money; his investment had been one of trust and commitment.
Padma and Parvati were taking the trust and commitment personally. It was more binding than the sex they had been having since Harry was temporarily banned from the store. That Friday evening, Padma had appeared at the grim old place to reassure Harry. She was in his arms, clutching him and crying. She was in his bed, clutching him and moaning. Parvati had appeared the next evening, expecting equal treatment. Harry had been hesitant about having an intimate relationship with both sisters, but Parvati had convinced him it was what they wanted. She had been understanding, gracious, and irresistible.
* * *
"Awk,' went Bellatrix as she jumped back.
The three were exploring more of the Manor's dungeons.
Jack had his wands out in a flash. What could have possibly frightened Bellatrix? He held his first wand ready and used his second to illuminate the storeroom. He could see nothing. That made him more apprehensive.
"There," pointed Bellatrix.
"Yes, right there," said Narcissa.
Jack saw nothing. He gripped his wands tighter. Then he saw it...a small brown furry creature.
"It's a mouse," said Bellatrix.
He must have been giving the two of them an incredulous look because Narcissa confirmed the sighting. "Mouse," said Narcissa.
They were looking at him expectantly. It slowly dawned on him that mice were the province of wizards. He turned manfully to the task at hand. Boy, could that little devil scurry.
Zing. A near miss.
Zing. Almost got him.
The mouse squeaked and jumped.
The two women squeaked and grabbed Jack. "Oh! Don't hurt him! Don't hurt him!"
'Situation equals delicate,' thought Jack.
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56 Reviews | 8.48/10 Average
Fantastic ending--Severus as a wonderful anti-hero subversive deus ex machina sweeping in and offering Hermione a life and livelihood--glad to see that she is a fast thinker, accepting the odds are against her (if she stubbornly sticks to her story) but able to assess what he is offering her--it's doubly delicious the irony of her being now a fugitive (well, soon to be) and that she remains naive to Jack, being her attacker, harbouring fugitives all along, Bellatrix and Narcissa--it's sort of a poetic justice that the know-it-all has been forced to experience some humbling humanity, albeit of a subversive nature--again, a brilliant twist (and for some reason makes me think of Bob Dylan's lyrics to 'Like a Rolling Stone'... Anyway...)I'm tickled pink that Harry and Parvati and Padma have also established a wholesome threesome paralleling Jack, Narcissa, and Bellatrix--also love the final capper per Jack then Harry's section: ‘I’m in for it now,’ he thought.' to each wizard's situation--I suppose we should give our best wishes to each guy, as each will never have a moment's peace satisfying the wishes and whims of the partners, but I suppose that is what will keep life interesting, engaging, and fulfilling for them. Thank you for a fantastic tale!
Response from Fairfield (Author of Crossroads)
Severus had positive thoughts about Hermione when he rescued her. A lapse in the story is not introducing and sustaining this throughout the intermediate chapters. Her flaw is bitterness and intensity, but since these are understandable and her heart is in the right place, her tragedy is only partial. Besides, if she wishes to be with Severus, she will have to abandon normal society.It is true all the wizards have demanding partners, but aside from being careful what one asks for, it might be the best outcome for them once they have adapted.Thank you for all the insightful reviews.
Fantastic twists in the plot--and it is a miracle that the Black sisters did not murder Hermione, but thought of what Jack would have done--and on a side note, I think Jack underestimates Narcissa and Bellatrix and their love and need for him, one that eschews and has transcended the narrow category of 'aristocrat' that seems to constantly trouble him. Yes! Finally, Harry! You see, threesomes can be embraced and work out! Oh ye of little faith--but now he has his own experience to believe and take strength from, instead of the musings and encouragement of an older, more experienced wizard such as Jack. Jack seems to be embracing and enjoying his threesome arrangement with more strength and commitment, in the sense that he is not entertaining the idea of running off and disappearing but rather coming to terms with and believing/wanting this arrangement on a deeper, more sincere level--great chapter! Must read on to see what actually will happen!
Response from Fairfield (Author of Crossroads)
Thank you for the kind review of a climatic chapter where everything comes together. A standard goal is to have the ending be both unexpected and a logical consequence of previous events.The Black sisters exercised great restraint in deference to Jack, especially since they believe their safety depends on eliminating Hermione.Jack is a strange combination of arrogance and self doubt.Harry wins over the Patils with a business deal.
Poor Harry... He has accepted his attraction to them fully and yet is now banished; Jack has accepted his attraction to both and is feeling overwhelmed yet committed to doing what he can for them, on all levels--Narcissa and Bellatrix are unconcerned about how demanding their attentions and expectations of Jack are... But they continue to enjoy and appreciate his efforts and protection and heroic actions on their part... Hermione is on the move and it seems she hasn't developed any tolerance or empathy and is sticking to her guns and moral code in regards to her professional work and agenda--enjoying everyone's dilemmaGreat chapter!
Response from Fairfield (Author of Crossroads)
Yes, everyone is being blindsided. Harry is banished, Hermione discovers Jack and Narcissa are a couple, Jack succumbs to the Black sisters, the Ministry is fooled by Beatrice LaGrange, and the Malfoy manner is raided. The couples (more accurately, triples) are working their way through the problems while Hermione devotes herself to her work.
Intriguing look into the Patil family and all of the pros and cons the parents are weighing and struggling with, the loss of tradition and honour being huge impediments... but maybe there will be a clear break with tradition in a choice that could lead to happiness for both of their daughters with Harry. I have a feeling Hermione has not given up on her notion of capturing Severus Snape, whether that be to turn him in or to have him for her own clandestinely. Perhaps her liason with Jack will help strenthen her and his own resolve one way or another with decisions regarding the truant fugitives in their lives--lovely, informative chapter while still leaving many questions to be answered!
Response from Fairfield (Author of Crossroads)
Glad you liked it. The premise is that romance does not take place in a vacuum, and we have an extended business family, not to mention high caste and pure blood, to whom propriety is important. There are the fiery females and the calmer Mr. Patil who has more depth than one might think.Parvati and Padma with Harry might be more like their parents than they realize.Yes, Hermione is as determined as ever.
Great developments--whether Hermione and Jack's afternoon delight development will benefit her or him more remains to be seen--in particular the aspect that he truly would have roused suspicion by avoiding her and her need to have someone listen to her, be with her, appreciate her, make love with her, etc.--then there are the Black sisters, who need anything to be a decoy in order to keep Bellatrix being safely harboured with Narcissa. Will Jack be able to juggle all of the witches, opposing sides with opposing objectives? Will their be some bargaining going on between Jack and Hermione regarding the fugitives Severus and Bellatrix? Great chapter!
Response from Fairfield (Author of Crossroads)
Thanks. The bargaining is an interesting suggestion full of possibilities. Would Jack help catch Severus to save Bellatrix, or would he try to save both? Would he form an alliance with Severus and Bellatrix? Could either one, or anyone, trust Jack? Would the ruthless Hermione keep the agreement in the first case? Would she be able to thwart his efforts in the seoond? Would her efforts be derailed if she fell in love with Jack? As dramatic background, all of this is a matter of life and death for Severus and Bellatrix and Narcissa. It might become a matter of life or death for Hermione.
Hmmm, Harry does have a dilemma... Twill be difficult unless he chooses both The same goes for Jack, although at this rate, the decision(s) may be made for him, with Bellatrix being the more assertive, although Narcissa has declared herself on some level, allowing an opening of sorts... Love the further exploration of Bellatrix's more human needs, Jack's vulnerability, and Narcissa's verbalisation of what she wants.Lovely contrasts of Harry muddling along, discovering the female sex as it were versus Jack's experience, having been married and divorced, but he is still discovering things about the opposite sex with his two particular witches. Lovely work and great chapter!
Response from Fairfield (Author of Crossroads)
Yes, a chapter in which Harry and Jack are being drawn in deeper - the shop's storeroom where Harry participates in retail that is important to the Patils and becomes more intimate - the castle's storeroom where Jack participates in family history that is important to the Blacks and becomes more intimate.
Hermione is being warned, if she doesn't back down, she will be done away with; Jack offers her polite and considerate company; Severus is very direct--she is confronted with truths. Harry enjoys helping Parvati and Padma out and they all continue to discover further and enjoy each other's company. Harry has tired of his watching, and Jack accepts the responsibilty feeling he has nothing to lose and wishing for some different dynamics in his life, taking a risk whether Narcissa will reciprocate or ignore him, unsure. The inclusion of Bellatrix, the riskiness of harbouring a top Undesireable has placed him in a dilemma, as both Black sisters are found to be needing him, each in her own way. There is a sadness and vulnerability brought out regarding Bellatrix and with that more complex natures revealed of who they were and have been during their lives as sisters--and now there is Jack having to deal with more volatile possibilities--whose side will he choose? The loyalty to the Ministry? Or a very private newfounded loyalty to the Black sisters? Harry, Severus, and jack, each in his own way, are having to be very selective in how much and/or which way he is interacting with his particular witch(s)-great chapter!
Response from Fairfield (Author of Crossroads)
Another good review: this time of a chapter where everyone is becoming entangled. It tries for some contrast - the mild bickering and jealousy of the Patil sisters, the more insistent demands of the Black sisters, the different reactions of Bellatrix and Narcissa when they learn Jack has killed someone dear to them, the companionable visit of Jack versus the hard-edged visit of Severus. Because of the witches, Harry is neglecting professorial duties, Jack ministry wishes, and Severus his survival.
Thoroughly enjoying the unfolding intimacy of trust with Padma and Parvati becoming comfortable enough with Harry to share and show each one's scar; Harry is not scared off, rather commiserates and is accepting--he's lived with physical and emotional/pyscological scars his entire life and so can understand; likewise, an interesting light is shone on Narcissa revealing her physical/traumatic scar to Jack, and he revealing his psychological/traumatic scar to her (hexing/killing her husband). With the Patil sisters and Harry, it draws them closer together; with Jack and Narcissa, the revelations asunder them. Hermione is in a dilemma, conflicted; her physical scar and discomfort impeding her; her resistance against Severus' curative painfully crumbling, giving into it, but is it only to strengthen her resolve and aid her to capture him? She must partake in that which she despises and has vowed against--and then there is Jack, in fluctuation, unhappy and wishing for a fuller companionship and fulfillment when reflecting on Narcissa--looking forward to seeing if meeting Granger draws him one way or another--she seems a bit miffed at him, and yet intrigued on some level--great chapter! Love how the plot is thickening! Also, I've meant to comment on that I love it that you have written the female characters with explicit and metaphorical scars (not just the wizards), and this is being explored, layered on, informing & influencing character's decisions and hesitations--again, wonderful work!
Response from Fairfield (Author of Crossroads)
A good review of a chapter that attempts the depiction of conflicting emotions. There's not much left to say. Their attraction overcomes the shyness and obstacles for Harry, Padma, and Parvati. An unfortunate event shatters Narcissa and Jack. Readers might be disappointed that Hermione decides to use an illicit drug supplied by an outlaw, but I think it is an understandable response to chronic pain. Hermione is both repelled and intrigued by the mysterious, perhaps unknowable, Jack.
Mmm, love Severus and Hermione on the underground, his observations--Sev in quite a predicament, and Hermione being sick, getting cleaned up by him, and all fussy and defensive--that is until the last second when she gets her instrument of power back in her hands, fully aware and with a gleam in her eye--Severus has had a narrow escape in more ways than one!Love also the narrow escape of Jack, Narcissa, and Harry--thoroughly enjoyed them passed out under cardboard in an alley without their wands (having not brought them (nor allowed) to the masked dance), having to rough it, Muggle style--HA! Love the inner thoughts and commentaries--something is brewing--great chapter!
Response from Fairfield (Author of Crossroads)
Two clumsy rescues - complete with unchivalrous thoughts, ingratitude, sarcasm, and betrayal.
Conjures up thoughts and reflections about military maneuvers from the great World Wars, in particular, WWI (although the infamous battle of Stalingrad of WWII flitters through my thoughts), some utterly futile, some more effective, etc. Brilliant, love the detailed movement and strategies explained and developed, and then the fallout and segue into the subversive drug clientele and trafficking, as the wizard goverment & officials turn a decisive blind eye, having other seeming priorities... As with anyone who may have to resort to being involved in procuring the way and assessibilty for self-and society-destructing illicit drugs, it brings out a conflicting melancholic feeling knowing that Severus seems to have no choice but to do so--to be a part of this... Great chapter!
Response from nagandsev (Reviewer)
Ooops, reread the summary--Gettysburg/Civil War flank maneuvers and strategies referenced! Just had the impact of great strategic plans occurring while reading--in my excited state, sorry to not have reread the summary for the significant great war/battle reference!
Response from Fairfield (Author of Crossroads)
Your thinking WW! is not wrong. Glad you enjoyed the strategy. The Longstreet quote is a despairing comment on any high attrition conflict. A subtle element is that, proportionally, the loss of six Arithmancers is equivalent to a conflict killing most of the PhD mathematicians and physicists in the UK. The war has hollowed out and scared society, and the story is about people coping. Thanks for all the commentary.
Highly enjoyed the introduction and development of Jack and his background and broadened livelihood into the story and in particular his interaction with Narcissa--seems they are both going to do well as professors along with developing a mutual relationship of sorts--hmmm, the plot is thickening deeper and richer as each scenario sheds light on the different perspectives of each character--lovely, intriguing, engaging work!
Response from Fairfield (Author of Crossroads)
Thanks. Two lost people intellectualizing their alienation and thereby finding a kindred spirit.
Lovely and engaging inclusion of Padma and Parvati, two rarely written about/underwritten characters in the HP canon, their family business situation, war scars, and the biting reminder of their high-caste pure-blood status having had and currently affecting their life decisions and sacrifices. Love it that Harry has initiated some interest and has enjoyed their company, longing for more--the intertwining of these characters with the catalytic event during the mask dance is so wonderful--it's not a secret that I love your brilliant, unique quality of writing and fine style, both one-shots and multi-chapters--just with the multi-chapter ones, there's more to enjoy!
Response from Fairfield (Author of Crossroads)
The central thought was thst the Patils would be family oriented and business oriented. The impression from canon is that the twins are well mannered but with emotions seething beneath the surface. Yes, they are hemmed in by economic circumstances, war scars, and fami;ly honor. And thank you for all the kind words.
Titillating development between Narcissa and Harry, only to be thwarted by a mysterious saboteur--brilliant! Looking forward to finding out who Narcissa has absconded with, intentionally or unintentionally... Hmmm... Love it that the dance hall is a vortex of intrigue and action in which these different characters' tales are intertwining and springing forth from--brilliant, just brilliant--and of course as seductive and engaging as ever!
Response from Fairfield (Author of Crossroads)
Thank you very much. This chapter attempts scenes that illustrate the attraction and tension between them. She is a brave and intelligent lady whose background and experiences place her in a world different from his. The masked ball appears to be bringing the community together.
Hmmm, one could say a wizard's got to do what a wizard's got to do to survive--Brilliant evolution of trade and commerce by Severus, keenly observing his choices and acting with astuteness and practicality about the ways of the world, who has seemingly been caught between a rock and a hard place to survive with his head above water in matters; I can only cheer him on with accepting all that life is offering him, regarding the ladies at the dance who equally seem to be in need of companionship and/or some social interaction, whether that be merely conversation and dancing on the dance floor and/or dancing from the waist down clandestinely elsewhere. Love the unexpected ending with the attacke and Hermione in the midst in need of his intervention/interaction--great chapter!
Response from Fairfield (Author of Crossroads)
Thanks. Part of the chapter attempts a rational explanation of the wizard economy which canon presents as a collection of artisans and shopkeepers untouced by the industrial revolution with a bloated ministry and a large number of sports teams. The story takes a benign attitude toward pain-killing drugs. Society's prejudices and Severus's fugitive status keep him from offering this benefit to all. Severus's social efforts do seem to be appreciated.
Mmm, love her dilatory contemplations and hesitancy in this detailed, engaging intro, establishing Hermione's seeming lull in life after surviving the war, scarred inside and out... and a disturbing (but excellent, intriguing) cliffie of an ending!
Response from Fairfield (Author of Crossroads)
On a personal note, I have been hoping you would discover 'Cross Roads.' The first chapter depicts a post conflict society through the eyes of a damaged veteran. The story experiments by extending a cliff hanger for five chapters.
I like the sneaky necklace is a wand. This is a wonderful beginning!
Response from Fairfield (Author of Crossroads)
Thanks. If you glanced at the reviews, you know that readers find this story difficult and different. If it helps, the first five chapters introduce the characters, hopefully in an entertaining manner. Good luck.
This was extremely disjointed and hard to follow. Couldn't figure out what was going on from one moment to the next. I am sorry, but I had to give up only 1/3 of the way through.It reminded me of Pulp Fiction, with its unchronological disjointedness, only without the good acting to distract me from the fact that I didn't know what the hell was going on from the beginning of that movie to the end of it! :)Perhaps it's just that I don't appreciate your avant-garded style or what-have-you, but this story was simply too much work to read for my tastes.Thank you for sharing it, and I hope you find other audiences who are more receptive to it. Cheers.
Response from Fairfield (Author of Crossroads)
Does this mean you're not going to list this story as a favorite?
ohhhh Jack is heading into a dark path. He is so creepy! Good job!
Response from Fairfield (Author of Crossroads)
After some hesitation, I decided to take the story to where few fans would want to follow. Even Bellatrix, who trusts him with her life, wonders what Jack is thinking and feeling. Thanks for the reviews.
Response from Fairfield (Author of Crossroads)
After some hesitation, I decided to take the story to where few fans would want to follow. Even Bellatrix, who trusts him with her life, wonders what Jack is thinking and feeling. Thanks for the reviews.
Well, Jack is certainly interesting. I can't believe all the things going on on so many levels.
Response from Fairfield (Author of Crossroads)
I did promise that paths would cross: the resolution depends on all paths crossing. At first, I thought there was no canon character like Jack. Now, I think there could not be a canon character like Jack.
Response from Fairfield (Author of Crossroads)
I did promise that paths would cross: the resolution depends on all paths crossing. At first, I thought there was no canon character like Jack. Now, I think there could not be a canon character like Jack.
AHHH! Hermione had better find severus!!!! ;) Can't wait to find out! Great chapter, by the way!
Response from Fairfield (Author of Crossroads)
Glad you liked the chapter. There was concern about it being a 'guicco piano' about two non-canon characters.Perhaps the story should be more emphatic. Hermione has located Severus twice but failed to capture him. If he is captured, or merely located, he is a dead man since both sides wish to kill him. Both Hermione and Severus know this. At one time, Hermione thought that made her job easier--she need only locate him. Bringing the traitor to justice would be a feather in the cap of the most brilliant witch of the age. The question is whether or not she is having second thoughts about doing the right thing. Of course there is also the question of how the story is going to resolve this little dilemma.
Response from Fairfield (Author of Crossroads)
My reply may have been too emphatic. It was late at night, and I'm currently punching a project through a bureaucracy. At any rate, I did like your review.
Response from baseballbabe122 (Reviewer)
Haha, that's oky. I enjoyed that little insight. :)
Harry first, why does he have to chose one over the other, why can't he have both? Now Jack, can anyone really survive the Blacks, not just Narcissa and Bella? lol. If he plays his cards right he will be ok, I think. Then there is Hermione, please give her, her spirit back. She seems so unhappy and Jack is not the answer. I truly hope she find Severus. And he finds it in his heart to come to trust her. The twins' parents need to allow their daughters to make their own decisions and when they make a mistake let them learn from it and move on. Just be there for them either way.
Response from Fairfield (Author of Crossroads)
Quite a lot to think about, but an author should keep most of it to himself.One thought is that canon-Hermine at school had lots of spirit, but it required the Mountain Troll incident for her spirit to form bonds. Is adult canon-Hermione similar?
Response from Fairfield (Author of Crossroads)
Quite a lot to think about, but an author should keep most of it to himself.One thought is that canon-Hermine at school had lots of spirit, but it required the Mountain Troll incident for her spirit to form bonds. Is adult canon-Hermione similar?
Wow, this story is aptly named. I am impressed at all the twists and turns you are making. I suggest Jack gets killed, Harry marries one of the twins and Severus and Hermione hook up with a happy ending
Response from Fairfield (Author of Crossroads)
Okay, Jack is toast. But not so fast. All the things reviewers want depend on Jack.Thanks for the comments. Not everyone likes this type of story.
Response from Fairfield (Author of Crossroads)
Okay, Jack is toast. But not so fast. All the things reviewers want depend on Jack.Thanks for the comments. Not everyone likes this type of story.
now now girls no fighting over the man I'm sure he would be more than able to take the both of you lol
Response from Fairfield (Author of Crossroads)
Ah, yes, who gets to French him? Glad you were amused.
Response from Fairfield (Author of Crossroads)
Ah, yes, who gets to French him? Glad you were amused.
Jack is certainly the popular fellow. What is Snape up to?
Response from Fairfield (Author of Crossroads)
With the current social conditions, even Harry is popular. Hermione is puzzled that Jack and Harry aren’t doing better for themselves.
Perhaps aristocratic ladies and brainy girls have limited compatible choices.
Severus is hiding from Hermione who would do the right thing and put him in prison.
Response from Fairfield (Author of Crossroads)
With the current social conditions, even Harry is popular. Hermione is puzzled that Jack and Harry aren’t doing better for themselves.
Perhaps aristocratic ladies and brainy girls have limited compatible choices.
Severus is hiding from Hermione who would do the right thing and put him in prison.
Hmmm, I hope Hermione and Jack don't hook up. Something about him raised my neck hairs. Food for thought, at the beginning of the chapter it seemed to me that Hermione is having some growing pains. She seems to be acting like a teenager (wich would be normal in these circomstances) worrying about boys. Very nice, a very 'human' chapter.
Response from Fairfield (Author of Crossroads)
I appreciate your comments since I rewrote the chapter several times trying to give complexity and depth to Hermione, a character with mixed motives.
It would be great if, in Jack, we have a character that is always kind and understanding but is a character that readers recognize as sinister.
Response from Fairfield (Author of Crossroads)
I appreciate your comments since I rewrote the chapter several times trying to give complexity and depth to Hermione, a character with mixed motives.
It would be great if, in Jack, we have a character that is always kind and understanding but is a character that readers recognize as sinister.