The Last Magicmeter
Chapter 6 of 8
nataHermione understands Snape’s final results and tries to act on her suspicions to their consequences.
Reviewed"Tonks, what is so urgent?" Arthur Weasley looked up from his breakfast to greet the newcomer.
"Here, have a cup of tea to calm down, dear." Molly Weasley looked with alarm at Tonks' hair, which was threatening to burst orange through her usual bubble-gum pink.
"No, Molly, thanks. I think I've got it!" Tonks rushed into the kitchen at Grimmauld Place, tripped over a chair, and her hair finally gave in to her internal struggle and flamed bright orange as she lost her balance. "Oh, bollocks!" Tonks exclaimed, rising from the floor and replacing the chair. "I think I know what they did to The Burrow."
"Really?"
"Yes! It's a simple Portkey Charm!" Tonks was beaming and self-consciously proud of her discovery.
"A Portus?"
"Yes," Tonks confirmed.
"Interesting." Mr. Weasley rubbed his chin and frowned.
"Well, it makes sense, Arthur." Mrs. Weasley looked less troubled than her husband. "We should have thought about it earlier. Kingsley said right in the beginning that the charm was in an uncomfortable pain range. Travelling by Portkey is certainly uncomfortable. If the Death Eaters did not catch anyone during their attack, they would want their prey to fly to them as soon as we returned home."
"Actually, darling, that's not what is worrying me. We expected the uncomfortable charm to turn into something nastier when triggered. And while travelling to Death Eaters' hands is nastier than the journey itself, I have a nudging feeling that there might be more to the issue than meets the eye."
"Tonks," Mr. Weasley continued, "do you think you would detect the additional charm placed on our house if the Death Eaters never blocked the magical signal?"
"Yes, if the charm was harmful. No, if it were a Portkey Charm as it turned out to be that only causes discomfort. I wouldn't mention it. Perhaps, I wouldn't even notice. I might suppose that you transfigured cushions into kitchen chairs or something like that. You are right, Arthur. They could have made it less apparent, and we wouldn't have noticed."
"And their trap could have worked. Hm," Mr. Weasley hummed.
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Headmistress McGonagall was grading the seventh-year essays on dangers of blood clotting during human transfiguration, late on a Friday night. She would keep her N.E.W.T.s level classes along with her other duties until the new Professor of Transfiguration got settled.
She looked at her watch as if she was expecting someone and sighed. After a while, she straightened the pile of marked essays, got up, walked out of her office, down the stairway, past the gargoyles and descended to the dungeons. She knocked on a hidden doorframe and entered as soon as she was admitted.
"Good evening, Professor. It's past curfew. I know. I apologise. I lost track of time." Hermione nervously bit her lower lip.
"Good evening, Miss Granger. Don't worry. I'm not going to deduct house points from Gryffindor. We agreed that you might work longer over the weekends, and I'm keeping my side of the bargain." Minerva McGonagall winced.
"Thank you, Professor."
"However," the professor raised one eyebrow and clasped her hands in front of her robes, "I am concerned that you choose to work this late every allowed evening. I've been waiting for your signal longer than usual tonight. I understand that you are fighting our war here, but you are straining yourself, Hermione. If you don't rest sufficiently, I will be forced to remove this privilege from you."
"No, Professor, please, I feel I've almost solved it. Please, I just need a bit more time." Hermione's eyes framed by dark circles welled up with tears. She lifted her slightly shaking hand and quickly wiped an escaped drop.
Professor McGonagall calmly approached her and asked, "What is giving you such a hard time?"
Hermione weakly smiled, sat down next to the Headmistress and began to explain. "To sum it up, Professor Snape tried various modifications of magicmeters to ensure that they would be able to measure probability of death of a certain person over a distance. The only modification that worked was altering material of the pointer. The problem is that the metals do not work predictably according to their magical properties. So he tried all metals, and he listed them with respect to their performance in the blood loss tests." At this point, Hermione shuddered, thinking of all Dumbledore's willing injuries, but continued, "This is the table. I understand it is the metal performance in Distance Probability tests, but there is something vaguely familiar about it. I just can't grasp it. And this name underneath. Mendeleyev. He is not in any reference book I looked into. It must be someone Professor Snape knows personally who has some kind of information about this table. I cannot get any further although I feel the solution is somewhere in my mind."
Hermione let her hands hopelessly fall into her lap and leaned deeper into the transfigured armchair. "I just can't reach for it."
"I'm sorry to hear that. You could have said something earlier." Professor McGonagall was considerate. "Mendeleyev was a Muggle chemist. We don't teach chemistry at Hogwarts, so you wouldn't find him in the reference books in our library. He ordered the elements with respect to their mass and..."
"And properties! I remember!" Hermione screamed and jumped up. The professor looked displeased by her behaviour, but she was interrupted again before she could retort. "I apologise for interrupting, Professor, but I'm so excited. I've read about it before I received the letter from Hogwarts."
Professor McGonagall nodded.
"And Professor Snape's experiments show," Hermione excitedly continued, "that a magicmeter is able to measure probability of death from greater distances if the pointer is made from metals with heavier nuclei."
Professor McGonagall smiled warmly. "With more protons, actually. According to Mendeleyev's table."
"Then," Hermione paused for a moment and thought, "if the last experiment with gold detected even a minor blood loss over seventy-three miles, then according to this table we need a mercury pointer for increased distance. But mercury is liquid." Hermione's spirit faded.
"I see." Professor McGonagall uncharacteristically grinned. "That's why Severus asked me to transfigure his vial of mercury into a solid form. I thought he needed a different consistency to stabilise a new potion." She filled in the last piece of the puzzle.
Hermione promptly returned to eagerness. "Did you make it?"
"Yes. I gave it to him."
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Hermione toyed with a shiny, dark, silvery piece of metal and blankly looked at her parchment, her quill forgotten.
"What do you have there, Hermione?" Ginny asked her over a Potions textbook.
"What? Sorry, Ginny, I didn't hear you. I'm working," Hermione apologised.
"You are not. I've been watching you. You are playing with that thing. What is it?"
"Oh, this!" Hermione lifted her hand. "I'm not doing my homework, but rather I'm thinking about my project."
"Well? You haven't answered my question," Ginny prompted her again. "What is that thing?"
Hermione sneaked her hand under the table, took her wand and murmured, "Muffliato," under her breath before she continued, "This is Snape's solution to Distant Probability tracking! It's a piece of mercury, and according to Professor Snape's theory it should measure the probability of death over great distances."
"But shouldn't mercury be liquid?" Ginny was surprised.
"Sure. At room temperature. Professor McGonagall transfigured it to solid," Hermione replied matter-of-factly. After a few days, she was used to the idea of holding solid mercury.
Ginny, however, was perplexed.
"Why are you looking like that? It's not as if she was changing one metal to another. She doesn't have the Philosopher's Stone. She just changed the consistency. It is never done because no one needs it, but it can be done," Hermione explained.
"If solid quicksilver is so normal to you, what's bothering you so much?" Ginny asked.
"Professor McGonagall gave Professor Snape this piece of solid mercury days before Professor Dumbledore's death. So he had time to construct a magicmeter with this pointer, but he never did it. Although there are usually only a few days between his experiments, I have to wonder why he chose to have a longer break when he was so close to final success. What kept him from finishing this?" Hermione shook her head.
"Why do you think he never made the modification?" Ginny continued to probe.
"We cannot find it. It's not among his other experimental magicmeters, nor anywhere else." Hermione shrugged. "Plus he said he could be of no further help and stopped replying to my Patronus messages. That's what bothers me even more, I guess."
"But, Hermione, that does not mean that the magicmeter doesn't exist. Who knows what Snape is thinking when he refuses cooperation? In fact, who knows what Snape is thinking anytime? You are concentrating too much on what might have stopped him, whereas you should also ask why the last magicmeter isn't in his laboratory," Ginny pointed out and held Hermione's sight. At first, she was mildly annoyed and irritated, but then her eyes widened in apprehension and understanding.
"Thank you, Ginny! You are brilliant!"
Hermione joyfully hugged her friend, tossed her schoolwork into her bag and rushed out of the Gryffindor common room. Ginny just shook her head and smiled. Few people ever praised her for criticism.
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For the next two days, Hermione spent every free minute in the laboratory. She begged the Headmistress to allow her to stay in late at night, but Professor McGonagall forced her back to her dormitory at curfew on each school day.
On Friday she was nonetheless finished.
"Congratulations, Miss Granger, you have successfully completed your project," Professor McGonagall complimented her student with pride.
"Thank you, Professor." Hermione was beaming. "Shall we try it?"
"Of course." The Headmistress smiled, and both women walked out of the school.
Hermione carefully carried a magicmeter tuned to measure general magic and fitted with a mercury pointer that enabled the device to register all magic in the distance. Hermione hoped with all her will that the instrument could make a miracle and help Harry find Voldemort's Horcruxes, without Dumbledore's knowledge and skills.
"This will do." Minerva McGonagall stopped in the middle of a meadow and turned to Hermione. "Let's see how it works."
Hermione tapped the small magicmeter with her wand, and an opalescent chart appeared. She began to turn slowly, and the line of the reading jumped up and down as she moved around. When she turned towards Hogwarts, the line shot up so high that it disappeared in the darkness of the night.
"So much magic," Hermione said in awe and continued to finish her turn.
"Wonderful, Miss Granger," Professor McGonagall exclaimed. "I sincerely hope that your magicmeter will aid Mr. Potter in the task he started with Professor Dumbledore. Are you sure you won't tell me what he needs this skill for?" she tried.
"Sorry, Professor. That is up to Harry to decide," Hermione declined.
"I understand. We are finished here then." The Headmistress began to return to the castle when Hermione caught up.
"Professor?"
"Yes, Miss Granger?"
"Ginny, I mean Ginny Weasley, suggested that if we cannot find Professor Snape's last magicmeter with the mercury pointer, he might not have been stopped from constructing it, but rather finished it and hid it out of Hogwarts."
"I thought about such a scenario too, but it's not viable." The Professor paused to organise her thoughts and proceeded. "He has not left the castle since I gave him the mercury piece; the wards would now alert me of his comings and goings. Unless he carried it with him into the battle, he couldn't have taken it out. I'm sorry, Hermione, but I don't see it happening."
"But can we just quickly check, please? Perhaps he somehow managed," Hermione pleaded. "We could now just retune the magicmeter to track your transfiguration spell that solidified the mercury rather than the general magic and see if it shows us the direction."
"That could work," Professor McGonagall accepted, "but it will take too much time at the moment. We will try it on Sunday. No, Hermione, certainly not now, and tomorrow you should take a break and enjoy your Hogsmeade visit."
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The next day, when the students passed Mr. Filch on their way to the only entirely wizarding village in Britain, Hermione Granger sneaked out a magicmeter in her robes. She briefly stopped at Honeyduke's, let herself be seen in Zonko's, had a quick butterbeer at the Three Broomsticks and hurried to find a secluded place to try to track Snape's magicmeter that might have measured Dumbledore's probability of death.
She tapped the magicmeter with her wand and worked for a while to tune it to the magical trace of solid mercury. She pointed the magicmeter towards Hogwarts, but her device did not give a reading. With mixed feelings of anxiety and satisfaction she began to turn slowly and carefully watched the results chart.
The reading jumped high when she faced southwards.
"It exists!" she squeaked. "And he took it out!"
She slipped her hand into her pocket and took out a vial of potion.
He said, take one a week, so this could as well be the one.
Hermione drank the potion, looked at the horizon, broke plenty of school rules and Disapparated south. At the hill she found the course of the signal again, looked at the respective horizon and Apparated.
Hogwarts towers soon vanished from sight, but the magicmeter showed that the other spell that solidified mercury was still further. Hermione cast a Disillusionment Charm on herself and tried her best to suppress the noise of Apparating. She always paused just for a few moments to find her path and let the magicmeter lead her on.
Just after she Apparated across a vast valley, her magicmeter showed her next course directly where she had come from. A bit puzzled, but largely relieved, she looked into the valley.
Finally! The Distant Probability magicmeter must be somewhere down there.
She would know soon.
Hermione selected a small loch surrounded by a few trees and Apparated to its bank to find out which way she should continue.
As she hit the ground, her body was immediately ejected back to the air by a set ward spell, and she was falling in a wide arc into the water.
She screamed, "Protego!" just in time for a red curse to bounce back from her shield.
She dived deep into the loch, composed her powers and emerged ready to fight whatever trouble she got herself into. But the dark wizard on the shore stood there calmly, his hands peaceful by his sides. From what she knew about him, this was not a reassuring sight as he was fast enough to best her in any duel. Even if his wand was not yet drawn.
But it was.
Hermione swallowed. She expected to find the hiding place of the magicmeter, not of its owner. He looked paler than she remembered him, and his frown was more menacing in the open sunshine than in the dimness of his dungeons.
"What did you think you were doing, Miss Granger?" he asked so quietly that Hermione wasn't sure whether the chills running down her spine were from his voice or the cold water.
"I'm looking for..."
"Did you expect you could Apparate back and forth within my wards and I wouldn't notice?"
"I wasn't... I didn't mean..." Hermione was trembling.
"I'm a convicted murderer and a known Death Eater. Haven't you had enough experience with Death Eaters to warn you not to dawdle here?"
"NO!" Hermione blazed. "Let me finish! I'm looking for your last magicmeter, not you. You weren't supposed to be at the same place. It is dangerous. Voldemort could have found what it shows!"
Snape looked at his former student in silence. Then he hissed through his teeth, "Don't mention that name. Get out of the water and dry yourself. There is tea in the cottage," he said, then turned and walked away.
Author's Notes: The idea of the Portkey Charm placed on a house was inspired by notsosaintly's story Soothing Hands on Ashwinder. Thanks a lot for that wonderful story, notsosaintly! Please review. Reviews are what keeps the writer friends with the Muse.
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28 Reviews | 6.5/10 Average
It was an intense chapter. So much anguish in the aftermath. Wonderful writing.
Response from nata (Author of Cleared of the Murder)
Oh, an unanswered review. Oops! Thank you for your compliment.
Response from nata (Author of Cleared of the Murder)
Oh, an unanswered review. Oops! Thank you for your compliment.
I really enjoyed reading this story. I especially loved the epilogue. You write a deliciously snarky Snape, and for that I thank you!
Response from nata (Author of Cleared of the Murder)
Thank you very much. I'm delighted to hear that you liked my take on Snape. He is a charmer the way he is, isn't he?
excellent story. i think you handled the rape spot on. congrats on featured story, it's well deserved. thanks for sharing your vision and talent.
Response from nata (Author of Cleared of the Murder)
Thank you for the wonderful review. I appreciate it very much.
This should be at with the Epilogue, as I have read the whole story and enjoyed it ... but I started to reread the first chapter when it occured to me that in your opening line you have Mundungus Fletcher at the Order meeting. Granted, I don't think it's nailed down tight in canon as to how long he was to stay, but the last we knew of Fletcher in HBP, he was in Azkaban and Harry wasn't happy with him.
Response from nata (Author of Cleared of the Murder)
Hm, that did not occur to me. As far as I was able to check (HP Lexicon), he was sent to Azkaban for impersonating an Inferius during an attempted burglary. He could have been released within months for such a minor crime. Theoretically, if the Ministry did not accuse him of spreading panic and lock him for good on their policy that they need to arrest someone, he could have been free by the first meeting in this story without Harry knowing - hence, without mention in canon.There. An explanation. But only as an afterthought. In fact, I missed that. Thank you for your comment, I will think about a different character that could serve the purpose.
As I mentioned on Ashwinder allready - I like the ways the dialogues are led, so I have to rate this story also here.Congratulations to the second closing and I am looking very very much forward to the dragon (nudge nudge - when wil you finish them ?!?!?!?)
Response from nata (Author of Cleared of the Murder)
Thank you for all those stars! The dragons are on their way - see my lj for more updates.
Thank you -- that's much better!
Response from nata (Author of Cleared of the Murder)
I'm very happy that it has done the job for you.
Nicely done. I love the Vacuum reference, too. :-)
Response from nata (Author of Cleared of the Murder)
Thank you. 'Walk Through the Fire' is a captivating story, but that potion definitely deserves a working antidote. Even though they might never find it in Wonderful's plot plan, they have a good chance in this one.
I love this story. Absolutely love it. While I don't fully understand the cube graph things or the magicmeters, I get the concept behind them and I think they're very clever. I think you handled Hermione's rape in a very mature way, and I'm glad that you didn't just brush it off like some writers do, that you allowed Hermione to have those after-feelings and crazy emotions. I hope you update this soon and can't wait to read more!
Response from nata (Author of Cleared of the Murder)
What a very lovely message to find early in the morning! Thank you for making me smile. I'm very happy that you liked the story. The epilogue has now been sent to my beta.
You developed some really intriguing ideas. Have you given any thought to what might happen next? I'd be very interested to see it, if you ever write it.
Response from nata (Author of Cleared of the Murder)
Thank you. I've just sent an epilogue to my beta and a sequel is well on its way. However, I will start posting it only once it is completed. I kind of like this universe, so there definitely will be more.
Response from firefly124 (Reviewer)
I'm very glad to hear it! I understand not wanting to post until done - there's always the possibility something you do in a later chapter will make you want to tweak something in chapter 1, after all.
Response from nata (Author of Cleared of the Murder)
It does not usually happen to me. I tend to plan the story beforehand to a considerable detail - plotwise, not method-wise. My hessitation is rather due to the fact that I often have long hiatuses between intensive writing sessions, and I don't want my readers to suffer the wait. *sigh*
I like ths story so far, its looking good.
Response from nata (Author of Cleared of the Murder)
Thank you very much. I'm posting the next chapter today.
Interesting thoughts on the conditins Snape has set and the Patronus messages. I wonder why none of them can see at least the possibility that his concern is for it to fall into Voldemort's hands. I look forward to reading more.
Response from nata (Author of Cleared of the Murder)
They are generally suspitious about anything Snape does in these conditions. They had trusted him, most of them reluctantly, and he marched right up to the Astronomy Tower and shattered their trust in the worst possible way. They view his actions as dubious - to put it mildly. Thanks for reviewing each chapter. It feels wonderful!
Response from firefly124 (Reviewer)
Oh, I totally understand their suspicions and sense of betrayal. I just want to knock their heads together for missing it. Glad you're enjoying the reviews!
Oh, I just love Mr. Granger's misinterpretation of the magicmeter's readings. Nice touch!
Response from nata (Author of Cleared of the Murder)
;-) Thanks! I'm happy that you interpreted the magic of love and the owl otherwise.
It is intense indeed. I think you have rendered her response very well.
Response from nata (Author of Cleared of the Murder)
Thank you very much. I tried my best.
I like how you've balanced the possibilities here. Snape could realistically still be on either side.
Response from nata (Author of Cleared of the Murder)
We won't know until HP7, will we? Perhaps his true loyalty will remain a mistery even afterwards. I, however, believe that he might get a chance to be redeemed in canon.
Response from firefly124 (Reviewer)
That's what I'm hoping, too.
I find your magicmeter idea very intriguing, especially the way it maps out Albus' magic for the days leading up to his death. Onward to chapter 2!
Response from nata (Author of Cleared of the Murder)
Thank you! I'm glad you like it!
This ain't half bad, I'm baffled as to why nobody reviews!
Response from nata (Author of Cleared of the Murder)
Thank you so much for being so generous and leave me four reviews in a day. You were wonderful, you really made my day. Reviews are possitively addictive, and a writer can never have enough.
That magicmeter sounds interesting!
Response from nata (Author of Cleared of the Murder)
Thank you! It's also almost canon. Almost. Except that Jo does not like science. I do.
Poor Hermione! I can understand her reaction to Ron, though.
Response from nata (Author of Cleared of the Murder)
I agree. I still feel guilty for putting her through such horrors, but it was necessary to separate her from Ron and Harry were quickly and abruptly.
Promising start!
Response from nata (Author of Cleared of the Murder)
Thank you very much! I hope you will like the rest of the story too.
Interesting ideas. The letter from Hermione's dad at the end particularly intrigues me.
Response from nata (Author of Cleared of the Murder)
Thank you for your review. There certainly is a reason for the way those letters are worded. I hope you will enjoy revelation behind them in chapter 7.
I can't believe that nobody's reviewed this story yet. You've done a good job so far and I'm looking forward to the next chapter.
One small thing, though—in this chapter you have Ron saying "Potter's friends would be more valuable to them alive" in a conversation with Harry and Hermione. It seems a bit odd to have him saying this, especially since the remark seems to be directed towards Harry and doesn't appear to be a quote.
Otherwise, though, good work so far. Keep it up!Response from nata (Author of Cleared of the Murder)
Thank you VERY much for your review. In fact, it is the second, but my first review on this site was lost during the server breakdown on Monday.The way I picture Ron in that scene is that he is sitting a bit apart from the girls and Harry, deep in thought. He tries to contemplate what had happened and he still does not understand why the DEs did not harm Hermione, but rather attempted to capture her. Therefore, being lost in thoughts about Death Eaters, Ron says rather 'Potter's friends' then 'us' or 'your friends'.
Response from Pennfana (Reviewer)
Ah, I see. It still seems a bit odd, but I understand your reasoning now.
Fast-paced chapter... very good. I enjoyed the argument as they dissected Snape's motives; Harry was sceptical and blinkered and Hermione typically open and objective. The cube idea is a very good one, although, I'm wondering about the two variables on one axis? Did you have time versus spell strength as part of the magicmeter function? Were the cubes discussed by Tonks, displaying the same data as the 'graph' generated by Minerva's magicmeter?The way I read it, the magicmeter slope was time versus spell strength; it also generated a sort of ballistics analysis of the spell being cast (am I way off?).The cube discussed by Tonks, reminded me of the spirometry graphs you can get, where the quadrants relate to a particular lung function/dysfunction--upper left quadrant may indicate emphysema, for example, and lower left, asthma (just an illustration, as I don't know exactly how the chart works), and the placement within that quadrant suggest a severity of the observed condition. I extrapolated from that, to think that the placement of the light within the cube indicated the type and strength of the spell at the time of the test, and conveying the efficacy of the spell, i.e. how effective that particular spell would have been, dependant upon it's location within the cube.I did struggle to see how Tonks could have deduced from the results that Dumbledore could have been killed by any charm, even if it was a Healng Charm, but I liked the idea and thought that it was a lovely irony.Either way, I enjoyed the chapter; the structure matched the content incredibly well, and I was caught up in it. Wonderful.
Response from nata (Author of Cleared of the Murder)
The magical charts. Yes. An enigma. The magicmeter measures magical residues (what stays around after magic has it an object, imagine it as vibration, or a comet tail) in time. Magical residues can represent magic around a person, something like a personal scent, or as you say the spell strength. That is Minerva's chart. She sets one chart for magical residues of Dumbledore's corpse and one for a specific spell, the Killing Curse.Tonks uses more sophisticated device. Where McGonagall has to tune her magicmeter for every specific spell she wants to test, Tonks has a third dimension in her results, marking if the spell was good or bad. The axis then show time, spell strength and intent/goodness. The spirometry analogy you mention might apply to a certain extent. With this, one can also more or less diagnose the spell.Tonks also creates a death probability chart, and we do not see the device she uses for those measurements. I expect that it is based on changes in individual's magical signature, or residues in time, but I'm not certain it can be measured directly with a magicmeter as I envision it. Good point,
Response from nata (Author of Cleared of the Murder)
. Maybe it is a way of recalculating the values given by a magicmeter. I'll have to think about that. In any case, Tonks had known that by the time Dumbledore lay crumpled on the Astronomy Tower, he was so weakened that he was basically dead all by himself - probability of his death has been more or less 95-100% since the moment he began to desire water from the Inferi infested lake.Thank you very much for your reviews.nata
Response from nata (Author of Cleared of the Murder)
The magical charts. Yes. An enigma. The magicmeter measures magical residues (what stays around after magic has it an object, imagine it as vibration, or a comet tail) in time. Magical residues can represent magic around a person, something like a personal scent, or as you say the spell strength. That is Minerva's chart. She sets one chart for magical residues of Dumbledore's corpse and one for a specific spell, the Killing Curse.Tonks uses more sophisticated device. Where McGonagall has to tune her magicmeter for every specific spell she wants to test, Tonks has a third dimension in her results, marking if the spell was good or bad. The axis then show time, spell strength and intent/goodness. The spirometry analogy you mention might apply to a certain extent. With this, one can also more or less diagnose the spell.Tonks also creates a death probability chart, and we do not see the device she uses for those measurements. I expect that it is based on changes in individual's magical signature, or residues in time, but I'm not certain it can be measured directly with a magicmeter as I envision it. Good point,
Response from nata (Author of Cleared of the Murder)
. Maybe it is a way of recalculating the values given by a magicmeter. I'll have to think about that. In any case, Tonks had known that by the time Dumbledore lay crumpled on the Astronomy Tower, he was so weakened that he was basically dead all by himself - probability of his death has been more or less 95-100% since the moment he began to desire water from the Inferi infested lake.Thank you very much for your reviews.nata
Excellent start, and the magicmeter and associated data is a remarkable idea: magical forensic evidence. The concept opens up a whole new area of fanfiction. I admit that I smirked at Diggle's cynicism about trying to think happy thoughts when dodging curses, and I appreciate Tonk's observation about perspective being the key.I hope that you delve into the theory behind Minerva's evidence, as the scientist in me was sitting on the edge of the seat, begging for more--really appreciate the depth of thought that went into that scene. I'm also very happy to see someone wondering about why Dumbledore was hurled from the Tower--I had seen it as some ploy on JKR's part as to his survival; alas, no!Minerva's needed and desperate stoicism was lovely to read! You wrote her as being human and not some convenient character--as you defined all the characters. It's good to see that the characters actually feel.I'm waffling now, so I'll stop.
Response from nata (Author of Cleared of the Murder)
Oh, no, please don't stop! It is so wonderful to read and read into your review. Thank you very much for it!Magical forensics now has its own original story. This year I have been trying to get it published (in Czech). Unsuccessful so far. Well, it is rather weird and I'm not that good an author, so it is no wonder. It deals with concepts from here - what signatures magic leaves, what physical principles are involved in spells, how that can affect molecular processes in a cell... That sounds rather like a lecture, doesn't it? I tried to convey it in a story of an immortal wizard having his heart transplanted into a non-magical girl. The reviewers so far like the idea, dislike my language and my characterisation. So, it is very nice to find your review here praise my take on characters.Thank you,
Response from nata (Author of Cleared of the Murder)
,nata
Response from sweetflag (Reviewer)
Lecture away... I love the idea. I hinted at the suggestion of magical forensics in another fanfic, but I shied away from having to think, so I left it there. The knowledge that you've done an original story involving those principles makes me very curious. Is it avaialble to read? Hang on... it is in Czech. That will cause problems... lol. Not that good an author? No. There has to be another reason. I'm not fawning, but I find your style of writing to be fascinating, but I admit that I'm no professional critic or good author myself. I find it difficult to write the characters in HP fanfics because I'm only borrowing them, and I like them to be as close to how they are presented in the books so that my stories are more fitting for that environment. It's hard, and I much prefer original characters as the reader will have no preconceived ideas and expectations about them. The fact that characterisation has been frowned upon in your original piece is quite a surprise.As for getting it published, I wish you all the best with that and remind you that Charlotte Bronte had little success at first :), neither did JKR, if memory serves. Maybe you could get a second pair of eyes to read through and suggest a more reader-friendly phrase or two? I just had a flash of a magic-noir... a detective drama akin to the Maltese falcon... lol. I'll read the next chapters as soon as... the family beckons, and I have to read stories... Winnie the Pooh :D
Response from nata (Author of Cleared of the Murder)
Oh, no, please don't stop! It is so wonderful to read and read into your review. Thank you very much for it!Magical forensics now has its own original story. This year I have been trying to get it published (in Czech). Unsuccessful so far. Well, it is rather weird and I'm not that good an author, so it is no wonder. It deals with concepts from here - what signatures magic leaves, what physical principles are involved in spells, how that can affect molecular processes in a cell... That sounds rather like a lecture, doesn't it? I tried to convey it in a story of an immortal wizard having his heart transplanted into a non-magical girl. The reviewers so far like the idea, dislike my language and my characterisation. So, it is very nice to find your review here praise my take on characters.Thank you,
Response from nata (Author of Cleared of the Murder)
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Response from sweetflag (Reviewer)
Lecture away... I love the idea. I hinted at the suggestion of magical forensics in another fanfic, but I shied away from having to think, so I left it there. The knowledge that you've done an original story involving those principles makes me very curious. Is it avaialble to read? Hang on... it is in Czech. That will cause problems... lol. Not that good an author? No. There has to be another reason. I'm not fawning, but I find your style of writing to be fascinating, but I admit that I'm no professional critic or good author myself. I find it difficult to write the characters in HP fanfics because I'm only borrowing them, and I like them to be as close to how they are presented in the books so that my stories are more fitting for that environment. It's hard, and I much prefer original characters as the reader will have no preconceived ideas and expectations about them. The fact that characterisation has been frowned upon in your original piece is quite a surprise.As for getting it published, I wish you all the best with that and remind you that Charlotte Bronte had little success at first :), neither did JKR, if memory serves. Maybe you could get a second pair of eyes to read through and suggest a more reader-friendly phrase or two? I just had a flash of a magic-noir... a detective drama akin to the Maltese falcon... lol. I'll read the next chapters as soon as... the family beckons, and I have to read stories... Winnie the Pooh :D
I've really enjoyed this story very much. Particularly the magic-meter bits (Wonder why so few fics speculate on the science of magic? It is such a logical topic for Hermione to be speculating about) and the dialogue between Severus and Hermione. I would have liked for it to be longer, but can also see why this could be a logical place to stop. One thing though. Hermione's ordeal. Was that just a plot-point to make her return to Hogwarts and seperate her from her friends? If that is the case, it seems a rather harsh one. All in all I feel perhaps the aftereffects could have been addressed more, considerating how awful what she went through is....
Response from nata (Author of Cleared of the Murder)
Thank you very much. I believe that the reason why science of magic is rare in fanfiction is the fact that the writer must know quite a bit about it. Here, I used bits of chemistry and engineering, but it is nothing compared to amazing science dialogues in ubiquirk's Ladder. Wonderful, wonderful scientific discussions there.Hermione's rape was there purely for the purpose of quickly separating her from Ron and giving her a reason to fully concentrate on something else then direct Horcrux hunt. She shouln't also grieve about her failed relationship with Ron (if I took that course), while I wanted to keep it HBP compliant. I'm sorry it had to be done. It's a terrible thing to go through. She was very much ashamed (not even telling her parents), wanted to avoid any humans she could (hiding away in Snape's lab), focused on a task that could consume her mind and keep it off the memories (research). That's what I would have done. I think, having not had the experience.
Is it really over? I want more. It feels like there should be more to it.
Response from nata (Author of Cleared of the Murder)
Yes, this is the end. All aspects that I intended to deal with in this story have been closed. However, I'm considering an epilogue. Several people at Ashwinder also noted that I ended this too quickly. Since readers are very important for every writer, I take such suggestions to my heart. And although I already have an almost finished sequel, an epilogue is definitely an option too.