Patronus Messaging
Chapter 5 of 8
nataThe Order considers a question of trust and reaches a dangerous and dubious conclusion.
Reviewed"Welcome back, Miss Granger." Professor McGonagall warmly hugged an ash-covered Hermione as soon as she stepped out of the fireplace in the Headmistress's office.
"Good morning, Professor. Thank you for allowing me to come ahead of other students. I appreciate it very much." Hermione returned her greeting.
"You are welcome." Professor McGonagall smiled. "Why don't you go unpack in your dormitory and come back later. I will show you the laboratory then. For now, I have a very urgent order from St. Mungo's that I have to deal with."
"An order from the hospital?" Hermione asked curiously.
"Yes. A potion order. Last year Professor Snape developed what he called a Life Thread Potion. It is a draught that is administered to patients on their deathbed. It opens a channel in their suffering through which the Healers can give the cure directly to the source of the problem rather than deal with the pain and other effects of the problem. It is very important for patients close to death because in them the cause of their suffering inflates the effects so quickly that by the time the Healers eliminate the effects, the patients often already die. It has already saved several people in emergency in the past months.
"Why, you were given this potion as well! You were too exhausted to process the Pepper-up and the Blood-Replenishing Potions at the same time.
"Oh, I'm sorry, Hermione," Professor McGonagall stopped herself when she noticed Hermione turn green. "I didn't mean to cause you discomfort."
"It's all right, Professor." Hermione took a few deep breaths. "It is a very important potion. When should I return to give you enough time to brew it?"
"No, I will not brew the potion. We still have a small stock left, and the Healer is just momentarily coming to retrieve it. In any case, we haven't found the recipe yet, so we couldn't brew it ourselves. I'm afraid Professor Snape might not have written it down," Professor McGonagall replied.
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Hermione sat in a comfortable armchair in Snape's laboratory. She was carefully studying his experiment protocols and lab notes. She flipped a page, and a small, opaque pink cube jumped from the next page. By this time, she was used to his three-dimensional results charts materializing above the parchment, but it had startled her a few times earlier.
The notes read:
Silver pointer: 20 feet undetected. 10 feet change in probability of death detected only when tester cut himself at 1300. No change earlier when blood loss less than ¼ pint.
Before Hermione could contemplate what Snape meant and whether his "tester" relieved himself of a quarter of a pint of blood willingly, she jumped as the armchair suddenly stiffened beneath her, lifted her up and straightened her back.
She sighed and with a flick of her wand renewed the transfiguration spell. She was confined to his laboratory if she wanted to read his protocols; the wards would not allow any of his possessions to leave the designated area. He must have spent his time here too in the same way. How could Snape voluntarily sit on such uncomfortable chairs also in the privacy of his own laboratory? No wonder he was so sour.
But he was no doubt brilliant. He was apparently trying to modify the magicmeter in such a way that it would detect the health and condition of a person of interest in the distance. Hermione could clearly see how such a device would ease the insecurity of the families of those that disappeared in the war time. It would let them know whether there was still hope for their loved ones.
There was no doubt a parallel with Mrs. Weasley's famous clock. But where Mrs. Weasley's clock detected a chance of an unfortunate encounter or even an assumption that her family, as blood traitors, might be targeted by Death Eaters, Snape's modified magicmeter would precisely and accurately inform her of the acute and immediate physical well-being of her family members.
Not only family members, Hermione thought! Warriors as well. The magicmeters, if detecting the death probability over large distances, could report of any mission, or rather of any warriors on a mission. Tonks wouldn't have to worry about Lupin among werewolves if she had a magicmeter at her disposal. She could check from a distance how he had actually been.
In a full circle, Hermione was back to the usefulness of the device for family integrity.
Snape already tried to change several materials of different parts of the magicmeter and their combinations that could detect the death probability from the distance, and Hermione flipped quickly through the proceeding pages. She noticed that he was unsuccessful for a very long time, and she appreciated his endurance in the face of repeated failures. He got his first successful attempt when he replaced a metal used to construct a pointer. Then he used random metals with magical properties to increase the distance and sensitivity. She was so engrossed in following his logic that she almost skipped a nearly blank page in Snape's notebook with annoyance. There were no notes, but a cauldron jumped up from the page instead of a cube chart.
A cauldron!
In Snape's science notes!
But, of course! Snape and deception were one. Of course, it would be where no one would look. In between his very dull and completely non-magical essays on metal properties.
She felt so happy that her Patronus jumped from her wand almost of its own accord.
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Severus Snape was just taking off his mask and collapsing wearily into an armchair when an overexcited otter ran into his room. He watched it circle him a while and frowned when it didn't spontaneously disappear. People were practising to conjure Patronuses these days everywhere. With the Dementors increased breeding, he couldn't blame them. He didn't know this Patronus, but apparently it was not someone's practice, but it carried a message too determined to ignore. He frowned and took the message.
'Found the Life Thread! Need password!'
How fitting, he sneered, for Granger to roam through his personal belongings. Just what was she doing in his private lab reading his Distant Probability experiments in Hogwarts before the school started?
He thought for a moment, considered his options and then conjured a reply.
'Granger. You are forbidden to copy the recipe, let anyone else read or hear it, or be present while you brew it. The Headmistress exclusively is to handle the orders from the hospital or infirmary. One dose at a time, only for immediate use. You may give a dose a week to Potter and Weasley and take one yourself.'
The Life Thread Potion was a cure as well as a weapon. The Dark Lord must never know of all its properties or have a way to test it. He was free of one master, he wanted to get rid of the other too. The potion could save lives that were close to ceasing from both directions in time. It opened a channel to the human core through which additional cure could enter. But it also kept a channel of life active if a healthy person was unexpectedly expected to die. It was exactly what the Dark Lord would want. If a person took the Life Thread and was hit by a full Killing Curse, he would stay alive long enough for the curse to wear off, just like any hex. It could keep Voldemort's life on indefinitely, longer than Flamel's. Snape was not sure if staying alive on a death bed with an incurable disease or being too old to function would be a life, but the Dark Lord was willing to opt for less when it came to staying alive.
In a too short while, the annoying otter was back.
'Fully accept your conditions. Send the password, sir. Please!'
Snape smirked menacingly and sent his Patronus straight back to Hogwarts with hope that he would have a few days of rest until she figured out his password and attacked him with more demands. She, of all people, wouldn't have expected it.
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Hermione was eagerly poking her wand at the image of the pinkish cauldron and trying any revealing charm she could think of. Nothing worked. Or actually, everything worked the same. From a simple probe with a tip of her wand to the most complicated revealing charm, everything triggered a request for a password.
She didn't have to wait long, and a Patronus swished past her.
'You have it. Don't ask again.'
What?
I have it?
What is he playing at? She was agitated.
Hermione tried to calm down and think like Snape. How does one think like Snape?
She pulled out a piece of parchment and started to list things she knew about him. Leave out superstitions, filter out assumptions and list only facts. She soon figured out that she could not list much. Double spy, Death Eater, Head of Slytherin House, Potion master, half-blood made it to the top of her list. Then, of course, there was his discovery of a very important life-saving potion and attempts to track the wellbeing of another person.
She discarded those though because the other facts on her list cried out 'deceit', and she wasn't sure how his two discoveries could aid Lord Voldemort. Snape was secretive about the Life Thread Potion, and she could imagine something dark done with the tracking.
If cunning and deception were his main attributes, what kind of a password would he choose? One that people were unlikely to guess, but one that had a meaning to him and was easy to remember.
But if it was hard to deduce, how could she guess it? Did he want her to guess his important password? She doubted it. She tried to recall what his Patronuses exactly said. The last one said that she had the password. That she had it. If she already had it, the first Patronus must have brought it. A riddle then. She frowned, leaned deeper into the armchair, pulled her knees up, rested her chin on them and thought. What password? What password.
Hermione widened her eyes in surprised realisation, poked the image cauldron with her wand and whispered, "Granger."
The image disappeared, and the page illuminated with shiny letters of a recipe for the Life Thread Potion.
Her name! For all the books in the world, Snape's most secret password had been her name! But why? Was he surreptitiously in love with her? Hermione shuddered and quickly rejected the thought. Surely, he wasn't. Probably, Potter would have been too obvious a choice. Snape very likely noticed her enough to remember her, and disliked her enough to make her name hard to deduce. Very clever. Very Snape.
Hermione started to gather the necessary ingredients to prepare the potion. Her hands were shaking with anxiety. Such an important potion! And she was to brew it by herself!
Halfway through the list, she paused. The ingredient read: 3 drops of dragon blood (willingly given for enhanced effect).
Which dragon would ever give up his blood willingly?
She sent another Patronus for help.
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Severus Snape had just dozed off when the otter arrived again.
'Where can I get willingly given dragon blood?'
Ah, she had solved it. Snape smiled to himself that his former student was smart enough to figure out the logic of his messages, and that she actually remembered his message so well. But he needed to sleep more than he wanted to contemplate on Granger's achievement at the moment.
'Never tickle a dragon. Use the blood in the storage room. Tomorrow. I remember having asked you to refrain from further communication.'
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"Gentlemen, several issues surfaced at my meeting with Miss Granger today that I wished to discuss with you," Minerva McGonagall addressed the quickly assembled Arthur Weasley, Kingsley Shacklebolt, Dedalus Diggle and Mad-Eye Moody. "First, Miss Granger says that she found the recipe for the Life Thread Potion in Severus's laboratory."
The men got excited and started to murmur appreciatively, but McGonagall dismissed them with an impatient wave of her hand.
"Moreover, she claims that she can brew it because Severus has been tutoring her."
"What?"
"He cannot dare to come near Hogwarts!"
"Of course not," McGonagall silenced her colleagues. "But this brings us to the second and third point. Miss Granger says she communicates with him through Patronus Messaging. So, second, the Life Thread must be tested as it might not be the same as before with his distance tutoring in his current situation. And third, we haven't yet considered that Patronus Messaging might be breached. Is it still safe to use it for our internal communication?"
"What is your opinion, gentlemen? How should we approach these issues?" McGonagall sat down to wait for suggestions.
"First, the recipe is not to be trusted. Hence, second, Miss Granger is to be prohibited to brew the potion. And third, the Patronus Messaging must be considered a method freely available to Voldemort now. Stupid of us to overlook it for almost three months," Mad-Eye Moody recited and clapped his wooden foot for emphasis.
"While your points are a fair representation of the worst case scenario, Alastor, I wouldn't dismiss it so quickly," Diggle objected. "The Life Thread is an important potion, especially at war. It saved my cousin and niece several weeks ago, and I think we should consider the options in more detail."
"I agree, Dedalus," Mr. Weasley took the word. "Hermione is a very responsible and gifted young lady and could very likely perform her task by herself. We should, however, supervise her while she brews the potion to protect her from further accidents."
"She wouldn't allow it, Arthur," McGonagall countered. "She says Severus set her rules for handling the potion, and she fully intends to follow them."
"Alastor, can you see through warded walls?" Shacklebolt asked thoughtfully.
"It depends on the type of wards. I cannot see through a wall warded against sight penetration. What did you have in mind?" Moody was curious.
"I thought that we could have watched Miss Granger through the wall to ensure her safety and perhaps to copy the recipe too."
"Weren't you a Slytherin, Kingsley?" Professor McGonagall asked, very disturbed.
"Yes. Why?"
"If Miss Granger does not voluntarily want to share her knowledge, I'm fairly certain that she wouldn't appreciate being spied on." The Professor pierced the Auror with a glare that almost matched the intensity of Moody's magical eye.
"Oh. Yes. Of course. Sorry," Shacklebolt babbled. "Then it all comes down to trust, I guess. Whether we trust Dumbledore's murderer or not." Shacklebolt was purposely rude and watched McGonagall take in a sharp breath with satisfaction. He chose his words carefully to hurt her for her small victory as much as he could while remaining professional.
"Absolutely not, Kingsley!" Mr. Weasley failed to acknowledge the intense exchange, keeping his focus on Hermione's welfare. "We will thoroughly ward Hermione, so that a miscarried potion wouldn't hurt her. Further, we will have her report to us at regular intervals, given the potion's time schedule, to make sure she is all right. And we will acutely test the final product for performance before allowing patients to use it. The potion is important, and we need it profoundly, but there is no use rushing into the unknown without preparation!"
"My words precisely." Moody was content.
"I agree as well. Dedalus? Kingsley?" Minerva prompted the others. After giving their consent, she continued, "And what about safety of Patronus Messaging?"
"Definitely breached. I must insist on this point," Moody accentuated. "Even if we accept that Snape might not have revealed the communication channel earlier, such blind faith cannot be elucidated anymore. We have blatantly ignored this issue."
"On the contrary, Alastor," Mr. Weasley disagreed. "You yourself insisted many months ago that we experiment with intercepting messages addressed to someone else."
"Yes, I'm aware of it." Moody frowned. "We learned to breach our own system, and we recklessly taught it to Snape too."
"But this training also taught us to protect the messages from being revealed to an unauthorized person," Mr. Weasley said.
"True. But it all depends on the skill of a wizard. And You-Know-Who is pretty damn skilled and possesses unmatched power."
"Certainly," McGonagall shuddered, "no magic is infallible."
"I personally suggest that we continue using Patronus Messaging, but maximize our specificity in direction. We should, however, limit the extent and sensitivity of Order messages transmitted through Patronuses," Diggle concluded.
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"Professor?"
"Yes, Miss Granger? Please, come in," Professor McGonagall welcomed Hermione into her office.
"I have brought you the sample of the Life Thread for testing." Hermione played with the vial nervously, but did not hand it to her Professor.
"What is it, Miss Granger?" McGonagall rose from her chair, sensing Hermione's hesitation, and clasped her hands in front of her.
"Professor Snape does not agree with the extent of testing that you requested," Hermione admitted shyly. "He will not allow me to hand you more than one tester dose. All others must be validated emergency cases for patients' use only."
Professor McGonagall looked strictly at her student. "Miss Granger, let me remind you that Severus Snape is in no position to place requests and that his intensions are highly dubious in all cases."
"Yes, Professor, but..."
"Hence, I would suppose that a woman of your intelligence would realize that the Life Thread Potion is a product of the Headmaster's murderer, and that it cannot be granted safe without profound evidence."
"I understand." Hermione dropped her shoulders and looked at her toes.
"Then you might want to provide me with additional testing vials. Immediately."
"I can't, Professor. I'm sorry."
"We've just been through this, Miss Granger, and you agreed with my reasoning. Don't try my patience."
"Sorry, Professor, but I'm under the impression that Professor Snape does not wish for all attributes of the potion to be known."
"I've noticed that much. With his history of actions, we cannot afford this kind of secrecy for security reasons."
"I think that security is Professor Snape's reason for secrecy here, Professor."
"Security?" The earnestness of Hermione's voice made Professor McGonagall try to view the issue from a different perspective. "His or ours?"
"I don't know. It is just my perception. He vehemently refuses to discuss the properties of the potion. It is a question of trust again. Professor Dumbledore approved the use of the Potion for medical purposes. It has worked reliably for almost two years now. If the Potion I brewed has the same medical properties, looks and diagnostics, we should not insist on knowing the full extent of its power, but rather trust Professor Snape in this matter."
"I hope you understand my hesitation in trusting Severus Snape. It might be exceptionally dangerous."
"I do, Professor. But in this case, the importance of the Life Thread Potion might be balanced by our insecurity of what else this new batch might do."
Minerva McGonagall did not reply straight away, but a vertical line formed between her eyebrows as she scrutinised pros and cons of Hermione's ... er Severus's conditions.
"Very well, Hermione," the Headmistress admitted in the end and took the only test vial from Hermione's hand.
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28 Reviews | 6.5/10 Average
It was an intense chapter. So much anguish in the aftermath. Wonderful writing.
Response from nata (Author of Cleared of the Murder)
Oh, an unanswered review. Oops! Thank you for your compliment.
Response from nata (Author of Cleared of the Murder)
Oh, an unanswered review. Oops! Thank you for your compliment.
I really enjoyed reading this story. I especially loved the epilogue. You write a deliciously snarky Snape, and for that I thank you!
Response from nata (Author of Cleared of the Murder)
Thank you very much. I'm delighted to hear that you liked my take on Snape. He is a charmer the way he is, isn't he?
excellent story. i think you handled the rape spot on. congrats on featured story, it's well deserved. thanks for sharing your vision and talent.
Response from nata (Author of Cleared of the Murder)
Thank you for the wonderful review. I appreciate it very much.
This should be at with the Epilogue, as I have read the whole story and enjoyed it ... but I started to reread the first chapter when it occured to me that in your opening line you have Mundungus Fletcher at the Order meeting. Granted, I don't think it's nailed down tight in canon as to how long he was to stay, but the last we knew of Fletcher in HBP, he was in Azkaban and Harry wasn't happy with him.
Response from nata (Author of Cleared of the Murder)
Hm, that did not occur to me. As far as I was able to check (HP Lexicon), he was sent to Azkaban for impersonating an Inferius during an attempted burglary. He could have been released within months for such a minor crime. Theoretically, if the Ministry did not accuse him of spreading panic and lock him for good on their policy that they need to arrest someone, he could have been free by the first meeting in this story without Harry knowing - hence, without mention in canon.There. An explanation. But only as an afterthought. In fact, I missed that. Thank you for your comment, I will think about a different character that could serve the purpose.
As I mentioned on Ashwinder allready - I like the ways the dialogues are led, so I have to rate this story also here.Congratulations to the second closing and I am looking very very much forward to the dragon (nudge nudge - when wil you finish them ?!?!?!?)
Response from nata (Author of Cleared of the Murder)
Thank you for all those stars! The dragons are on their way - see my lj for more updates.
Thank you -- that's much better!
Response from nata (Author of Cleared of the Murder)
I'm very happy that it has done the job for you.
Nicely done. I love the Vacuum reference, too. :-)
Response from nata (Author of Cleared of the Murder)
Thank you. 'Walk Through the Fire' is a captivating story, but that potion definitely deserves a working antidote. Even though they might never find it in Wonderful's plot plan, they have a good chance in this one.
I love this story. Absolutely love it. While I don't fully understand the cube graph things or the magicmeters, I get the concept behind them and I think they're very clever. I think you handled Hermione's rape in a very mature way, and I'm glad that you didn't just brush it off like some writers do, that you allowed Hermione to have those after-feelings and crazy emotions. I hope you update this soon and can't wait to read more!
Response from nata (Author of Cleared of the Murder)
What a very lovely message to find early in the morning! Thank you for making me smile. I'm very happy that you liked the story. The epilogue has now been sent to my beta.
You developed some really intriguing ideas. Have you given any thought to what might happen next? I'd be very interested to see it, if you ever write it.
Response from nata (Author of Cleared of the Murder)
Thank you. I've just sent an epilogue to my beta and a sequel is well on its way. However, I will start posting it only once it is completed. I kind of like this universe, so there definitely will be more.
Response from firefly124 (Reviewer)
I'm very glad to hear it! I understand not wanting to post until done - there's always the possibility something you do in a later chapter will make you want to tweak something in chapter 1, after all.
Response from nata (Author of Cleared of the Murder)
It does not usually happen to me. I tend to plan the story beforehand to a considerable detail - plotwise, not method-wise. My hessitation is rather due to the fact that I often have long hiatuses between intensive writing sessions, and I don't want my readers to suffer the wait. *sigh*
I like ths story so far, its looking good.
Response from nata (Author of Cleared of the Murder)
Thank you very much. I'm posting the next chapter today.
Interesting thoughts on the conditins Snape has set and the Patronus messages. I wonder why none of them can see at least the possibility that his concern is for it to fall into Voldemort's hands. I look forward to reading more.
Response from nata (Author of Cleared of the Murder)
They are generally suspitious about anything Snape does in these conditions. They had trusted him, most of them reluctantly, and he marched right up to the Astronomy Tower and shattered their trust in the worst possible way. They view his actions as dubious - to put it mildly. Thanks for reviewing each chapter. It feels wonderful!
Response from firefly124 (Reviewer)
Oh, I totally understand their suspicions and sense of betrayal. I just want to knock their heads together for missing it. Glad you're enjoying the reviews!
Oh, I just love Mr. Granger's misinterpretation of the magicmeter's readings. Nice touch!
Response from nata (Author of Cleared of the Murder)
;-) Thanks! I'm happy that you interpreted the magic of love and the owl otherwise.
It is intense indeed. I think you have rendered her response very well.
Response from nata (Author of Cleared of the Murder)
Thank you very much. I tried my best.
I like how you've balanced the possibilities here. Snape could realistically still be on either side.
Response from nata (Author of Cleared of the Murder)
We won't know until HP7, will we? Perhaps his true loyalty will remain a mistery even afterwards. I, however, believe that he might get a chance to be redeemed in canon.
Response from firefly124 (Reviewer)
That's what I'm hoping, too.
I find your magicmeter idea very intriguing, especially the way it maps out Albus' magic for the days leading up to his death. Onward to chapter 2!
Response from nata (Author of Cleared of the Murder)
Thank you! I'm glad you like it!
This ain't half bad, I'm baffled as to why nobody reviews!
Response from nata (Author of Cleared of the Murder)
Thank you so much for being so generous and leave me four reviews in a day. You were wonderful, you really made my day. Reviews are possitively addictive, and a writer can never have enough.
That magicmeter sounds interesting!
Response from nata (Author of Cleared of the Murder)
Thank you! It's also almost canon. Almost. Except that Jo does not like science. I do.
Poor Hermione! I can understand her reaction to Ron, though.
Response from nata (Author of Cleared of the Murder)
I agree. I still feel guilty for putting her through such horrors, but it was necessary to separate her from Ron and Harry were quickly and abruptly.
Promising start!
Response from nata (Author of Cleared of the Murder)
Thank you very much! I hope you will like the rest of the story too.
Interesting ideas. The letter from Hermione's dad at the end particularly intrigues me.
Response from nata (Author of Cleared of the Murder)
Thank you for your review. There certainly is a reason for the way those letters are worded. I hope you will enjoy revelation behind them in chapter 7.
I can't believe that nobody's reviewed this story yet. You've done a good job so far and I'm looking forward to the next chapter.
One small thing, though—in this chapter you have Ron saying "Potter's friends would be more valuable to them alive" in a conversation with Harry and Hermione. It seems a bit odd to have him saying this, especially since the remark seems to be directed towards Harry and doesn't appear to be a quote.
Otherwise, though, good work so far. Keep it up!Response from nata (Author of Cleared of the Murder)
Thank you VERY much for your review. In fact, it is the second, but my first review on this site was lost during the server breakdown on Monday.The way I picture Ron in that scene is that he is sitting a bit apart from the girls and Harry, deep in thought. He tries to contemplate what had happened and he still does not understand why the DEs did not harm Hermione, but rather attempted to capture her. Therefore, being lost in thoughts about Death Eaters, Ron says rather 'Potter's friends' then 'us' or 'your friends'.
Response from Pennfana (Reviewer)
Ah, I see. It still seems a bit odd, but I understand your reasoning now.
Fast-paced chapter... very good. I enjoyed the argument as they dissected Snape's motives; Harry was sceptical and blinkered and Hermione typically open and objective. The cube idea is a very good one, although, I'm wondering about the two variables on one axis? Did you have time versus spell strength as part of the magicmeter function? Were the cubes discussed by Tonks, displaying the same data as the 'graph' generated by Minerva's magicmeter?The way I read it, the magicmeter slope was time versus spell strength; it also generated a sort of ballistics analysis of the spell being cast (am I way off?).The cube discussed by Tonks, reminded me of the spirometry graphs you can get, where the quadrants relate to a particular lung function/dysfunction--upper left quadrant may indicate emphysema, for example, and lower left, asthma (just an illustration, as I don't know exactly how the chart works), and the placement within that quadrant suggest a severity of the observed condition. I extrapolated from that, to think that the placement of the light within the cube indicated the type and strength of the spell at the time of the test, and conveying the efficacy of the spell, i.e. how effective that particular spell would have been, dependant upon it's location within the cube.I did struggle to see how Tonks could have deduced from the results that Dumbledore could have been killed by any charm, even if it was a Healng Charm, but I liked the idea and thought that it was a lovely irony.Either way, I enjoyed the chapter; the structure matched the content incredibly well, and I was caught up in it. Wonderful.
Response from nata (Author of Cleared of the Murder)
The magical charts. Yes. An enigma. The magicmeter measures magical residues (what stays around after magic has it an object, imagine it as vibration, or a comet tail) in time. Magical residues can represent magic around a person, something like a personal scent, or as you say the spell strength. That is Minerva's chart. She sets one chart for magical residues of Dumbledore's corpse and one for a specific spell, the Killing Curse.Tonks uses more sophisticated device. Where McGonagall has to tune her magicmeter for every specific spell she wants to test, Tonks has a third dimension in her results, marking if the spell was good or bad. The axis then show time, spell strength and intent/goodness. The spirometry analogy you mention might apply to a certain extent. With this, one can also more or less diagnose the spell.Tonks also creates a death probability chart, and we do not see the device she uses for those measurements. I expect that it is based on changes in individual's magical signature, or residues in time, but I'm not certain it can be measured directly with a magicmeter as I envision it. Good point,
Response from nata (Author of Cleared of the Murder)
. Maybe it is a way of recalculating the values given by a magicmeter. I'll have to think about that. In any case, Tonks had known that by the time Dumbledore lay crumpled on the Astronomy Tower, he was so weakened that he was basically dead all by himself - probability of his death has been more or less 95-100% since the moment he began to desire water from the Inferi infested lake.Thank you very much for your reviews.nata
Response from nata (Author of Cleared of the Murder)
The magical charts. Yes. An enigma. The magicmeter measures magical residues (what stays around after magic has it an object, imagine it as vibration, or a comet tail) in time. Magical residues can represent magic around a person, something like a personal scent, or as you say the spell strength. That is Minerva's chart. She sets one chart for magical residues of Dumbledore's corpse and one for a specific spell, the Killing Curse.Tonks uses more sophisticated device. Where McGonagall has to tune her magicmeter for every specific spell she wants to test, Tonks has a third dimension in her results, marking if the spell was good or bad. The axis then show time, spell strength and intent/goodness. The spirometry analogy you mention might apply to a certain extent. With this, one can also more or less diagnose the spell.Tonks also creates a death probability chart, and we do not see the device she uses for those measurements. I expect that it is based on changes in individual's magical signature, or residues in time, but I'm not certain it can be measured directly with a magicmeter as I envision it. Good point,
Response from nata (Author of Cleared of the Murder)
. Maybe it is a way of recalculating the values given by a magicmeter. I'll have to think about that. In any case, Tonks had known that by the time Dumbledore lay crumpled on the Astronomy Tower, he was so weakened that he was basically dead all by himself - probability of his death has been more or less 95-100% since the moment he began to desire water from the Inferi infested lake.Thank you very much for your reviews.nata
Excellent start, and the magicmeter and associated data is a remarkable idea: magical forensic evidence. The concept opens up a whole new area of fanfiction. I admit that I smirked at Diggle's cynicism about trying to think happy thoughts when dodging curses, and I appreciate Tonk's observation about perspective being the key.I hope that you delve into the theory behind Minerva's evidence, as the scientist in me was sitting on the edge of the seat, begging for more--really appreciate the depth of thought that went into that scene. I'm also very happy to see someone wondering about why Dumbledore was hurled from the Tower--I had seen it as some ploy on JKR's part as to his survival; alas, no!Minerva's needed and desperate stoicism was lovely to read! You wrote her as being human and not some convenient character--as you defined all the characters. It's good to see that the characters actually feel.I'm waffling now, so I'll stop.
Response from nata (Author of Cleared of the Murder)
Oh, no, please don't stop! It is so wonderful to read and read into your review. Thank you very much for it!Magical forensics now has its own original story. This year I have been trying to get it published (in Czech). Unsuccessful so far. Well, it is rather weird and I'm not that good an author, so it is no wonder. It deals with concepts from here - what signatures magic leaves, what physical principles are involved in spells, how that can affect molecular processes in a cell... That sounds rather like a lecture, doesn't it? I tried to convey it in a story of an immortal wizard having his heart transplanted into a non-magical girl. The reviewers so far like the idea, dislike my language and my characterisation. So, it is very nice to find your review here praise my take on characters.Thank you,
Response from nata (Author of Cleared of the Murder)
,nata
Response from sweetflag (Reviewer)
Lecture away... I love the idea. I hinted at the suggestion of magical forensics in another fanfic, but I shied away from having to think, so I left it there. The knowledge that you've done an original story involving those principles makes me very curious. Is it avaialble to read? Hang on... it is in Czech. That will cause problems... lol. Not that good an author? No. There has to be another reason. I'm not fawning, but I find your style of writing to be fascinating, but I admit that I'm no professional critic or good author myself. I find it difficult to write the characters in HP fanfics because I'm only borrowing them, and I like them to be as close to how they are presented in the books so that my stories are more fitting for that environment. It's hard, and I much prefer original characters as the reader will have no preconceived ideas and expectations about them. The fact that characterisation has been frowned upon in your original piece is quite a surprise.As for getting it published, I wish you all the best with that and remind you that Charlotte Bronte had little success at first :), neither did JKR, if memory serves. Maybe you could get a second pair of eyes to read through and suggest a more reader-friendly phrase or two? I just had a flash of a magic-noir... a detective drama akin to the Maltese falcon... lol. I'll read the next chapters as soon as... the family beckons, and I have to read stories... Winnie the Pooh :D
Response from nata (Author of Cleared of the Murder)
Oh, no, please don't stop! It is so wonderful to read and read into your review. Thank you very much for it!Magical forensics now has its own original story. This year I have been trying to get it published (in Czech). Unsuccessful so far. Well, it is rather weird and I'm not that good an author, so it is no wonder. It deals with concepts from here - what signatures magic leaves, what physical principles are involved in spells, how that can affect molecular processes in a cell... That sounds rather like a lecture, doesn't it? I tried to convey it in a story of an immortal wizard having his heart transplanted into a non-magical girl. The reviewers so far like the idea, dislike my language and my characterisation. So, it is very nice to find your review here praise my take on characters.Thank you,
Response from nata (Author of Cleared of the Murder)
,nata
Response from sweetflag (Reviewer)
Lecture away... I love the idea. I hinted at the suggestion of magical forensics in another fanfic, but I shied away from having to think, so I left it there. The knowledge that you've done an original story involving those principles makes me very curious. Is it avaialble to read? Hang on... it is in Czech. That will cause problems... lol. Not that good an author? No. There has to be another reason. I'm not fawning, but I find your style of writing to be fascinating, but I admit that I'm no professional critic or good author myself. I find it difficult to write the characters in HP fanfics because I'm only borrowing them, and I like them to be as close to how they are presented in the books so that my stories are more fitting for that environment. It's hard, and I much prefer original characters as the reader will have no preconceived ideas and expectations about them. The fact that characterisation has been frowned upon in your original piece is quite a surprise.As for getting it published, I wish you all the best with that and remind you that Charlotte Bronte had little success at first :), neither did JKR, if memory serves. Maybe you could get a second pair of eyes to read through and suggest a more reader-friendly phrase or two? I just had a flash of a magic-noir... a detective drama akin to the Maltese falcon... lol. I'll read the next chapters as soon as... the family beckons, and I have to read stories... Winnie the Pooh :D
I've really enjoyed this story very much. Particularly the magic-meter bits (Wonder why so few fics speculate on the science of magic? It is such a logical topic for Hermione to be speculating about) and the dialogue between Severus and Hermione. I would have liked for it to be longer, but can also see why this could be a logical place to stop. One thing though. Hermione's ordeal. Was that just a plot-point to make her return to Hogwarts and seperate her from her friends? If that is the case, it seems a rather harsh one. All in all I feel perhaps the aftereffects could have been addressed more, considerating how awful what she went through is....
Response from nata (Author of Cleared of the Murder)
Thank you very much. I believe that the reason why science of magic is rare in fanfiction is the fact that the writer must know quite a bit about it. Here, I used bits of chemistry and engineering, but it is nothing compared to amazing science dialogues in ubiquirk's Ladder. Wonderful, wonderful scientific discussions there.Hermione's rape was there purely for the purpose of quickly separating her from Ron and giving her a reason to fully concentrate on something else then direct Horcrux hunt. She shouln't also grieve about her failed relationship with Ron (if I took that course), while I wanted to keep it HBP compliant. I'm sorry it had to be done. It's a terrible thing to go through. She was very much ashamed (not even telling her parents), wanted to avoid any humans she could (hiding away in Snape's lab), focused on a task that could consume her mind and keep it off the memories (research). That's what I would have done. I think, having not had the experience.
Is it really over? I want more. It feels like there should be more to it.
Response from nata (Author of Cleared of the Murder)
Yes, this is the end. All aspects that I intended to deal with in this story have been closed. However, I'm considering an epilogue. Several people at Ashwinder also noted that I ended this too quickly. Since readers are very important for every writer, I take such suggestions to my heart. And although I already have an almost finished sequel, an epilogue is definitely an option too.