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What Women Want
luvsev105 Reviews | 7.74/10 (105 Ratings, 0 Likes, 41 Favorites )
Severus has a new ability.
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I am a 20-something-year-old who admits to not knowing or having everything figured out, beta, foodie, bibliophile, and dabble in art. Most days I may be found in the kitchen indulging in the culinary arts.
I adore a multitude of pairings in the fandom, though I am partial to: SS/HG, DM/HP, NT/HG, PP/MB, SS/HG/LM, Snupin, and LL/HG.
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Well, Hermione handled that bit of news rather well. But then, Hermione's rather level-headed and Severus is hardly the joking type. And I can definitely see why Severus would find his new ability feeling a bit like a curse, as the intrusiveness rather goes both ways... I can just imagine poor Severus running into, say, Dolores Umbridge right about now and being subjected to the sort of thoughts running around in that witch's head... UGH!!!
Response from luvsev (Author of What Women Want)
I can't really imagine Hermione being the type to react without all of the facts first -- we see that much in canon, and I tried to stay true to the information we have been given. The intrusion factor is yet another reason why his ability is frustrating him so. On one hand, he's able to help some--not all, and on the other, he feels as though he's prying, and he has no control over that. After all I've put Sev though, Umbridge would be way too much for him, though she would probably reveal a lot of the things she's done--no doubt damning things. I do think it would be interesting for Severus to encounter her once he has his ability under control. I can only imagine how he'd respond.
She took that well. I think I'd be mortified.
Response from luvsev (Author of What Women Want)
Indeed she did. I'm saving the mortification for a later chapter. *grins evilly*
oooh a cliffie! i hope that Hermoine will forgive him....after a suitable angst filled week....tee hee!
Response from luvsev (Author of What Women Want)
Sorry about leaving a cliffhanger, but you won't have long to wait. The next chapter is in the queue. As to whether or not Hermione forgives him, you'll see. I will promise a happy ending.
very entertaining little story. :)another slight oversight:‘See, that’s what you get for trying to escape.’ Severus laughed as he helped her back onto the bed. Are you going to stay put now, or do I have to tie you to the bed?’ you need the open quote before "Are".
Response from luvsev (Author of What Women Want)
I'm glad you like my little fic, dear. I went ahead and fixed my small mistake. Thanks for pointing it out.
a nice start. i spotted a little booboo you might want to fix:The next day as he was sitting in the Great Hall; there was more noise than usual.since you have as here, that should be a comma, not a semicolon. :)
Response from luvsev (Author of What Women Want)
If I recall correctly, I originally had a comma in it's place. I think it was a requested change, but I can't be certain. But I will go ahead and change it back. Thanks.