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Afternoon Delight

1: One-shot Story

Afternoon Delight

kimbee73

34 Reviews   |   34 Ratings, 0 Likes, 0 Favorites )

Humor Potter Place's Anything Goes Challenge 288 Words 1 Chapter Complete
Hermione Granger Luna Lovegood Ronald Weasley

Hermione finds Ron in bed with someone she never would have expected.

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lily luna potter

 pointless,to tell you frankly.
Better luck next time!

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pyjamapants

This had me chuckling out loud. It perfectly follows the typical model of Hermione finding Ron in bed with Lavender. Ah, brilliant.

10/10

snitchette

That's an original idea. Very good

10/10

debjunk

Lol.  Great punchline. And this was the best line of them all: The Crumple-Horned Snorkack made you do it, right? Hah hah!

10/10

debjunk

Lol.  Great punchline. And this was the best line of them all: The Crumple-Horned Snorkack made you do it, right? Hah hah!

10/10

Arabella Bloodgood

LOL I bet she has a surprise for him as well. Brilliant, bravo dear. 

9/10

phoenix

ROTFL I love the twist on this one. What a wonderfully sneaky way to surprise Hermione. The twins definitely rubbed off on Ron. :)

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Elise_Wanderer

Oh, what a great surprise!  And I assume there was cake.A very good twist on the prompt!

10/10

Arabella Bloodgood

Where they naked or did they have the covers pulled up under their chins?  Because I can't see her getting mad over them laying there in their clothes probably not doing anything.  Unless he was on top or bottom for that matter.  Oh my, I just love a story that makes me think.  Thank you.  Very well done.

10/10

Moreteadk

Hee! I think this Hermione is the jealous sort, totally disregarding the lack of nudity. They were probably just sitting there next to each other too, not doing anything.Cute. :D

10/10

snitchette

Very good and very unexpected. I absolutely didn't that one coming. Really excellent.

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CharmedForce

Words cannot express what I would do to my husband if he should *ever* feel that is an appropriate way to trick me into a surprise.I think I am going to go smack him so in case he ever does think that. LOL.But it is funny!

9/10

FlittterKat

Too funny, trust Ron to surprise Hermione this way. *Wonders if Luna will overlook being called loony* I would still hex him into next week for it, lol.

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chloeshellie

short, sweet, and very amusing:)

10/10

andromeda_moon

Oh my, you had me there!  Very funny, well done :-)

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hgelman

Cute - I got a good laugh out of it!

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elsolel

I love it!  What a bizzare way to surprise someone on her birthday.  I like that you took a prompt that was almost destined to break them up and made it not do that. 

Response from kimbee73 (Author of Afternoon Delight)

I didn't think they needed to break up. Glad you enjoyed it.

10/10

carley9

Very unexpected!  Very cute story :)

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justjen

That was HYSTERICAL!! Sad to say, I can picture that sort of scenerio taking place with my husband. He get odd ideas every so often when he tries to be sneaky.

Response from kimbee73 (Author of Afternoon Delight)

I'm glad you liked it. I always like to know people are laughing.

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klschmidt

PRECIOUS!!  Wonderful surprise!  :-) 

Response from kimbee73 (Author of Afternoon Delight)

I'm glad you liked my surprise ending.Thanks for the review!

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WriterMerrin

*gigglesnort*  This story is like Luna: short, sweet, a little odd, and definitely unexpected.  Nice one!

Response from kimbee73 (Author of Afternoon Delight)

Thank you, I'm glad you enjoyed it!

10/10

beaweasley2

 Oh this is really funny!

Response from kimbee73 (Author of Afternoon Delight)

I'm glad you enjoyed it!

9/10

Shadow

Brilliant! I wonder if Hermione can forgive him for surprizing her like that...

Response from kimbee73 (Author of Afternoon Delight)

Hopefully she can forgive both of them for tricking her like that. Thanks for the review.

10/10

HermioneWeasley1972

ROFLMAO I did NOT see that coming.  Way to go!

Response from kimbee73 (Author of Afternoon Delight)

Thanks...I am glad you enjoyed it!

10/10

kittylefish

tee hee. very clever and funny.

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