Beautifully written. Even though it tore me up a bit, but it explains nicely why such a huge gap was between them. Well done!

Well, I was catching up with reading and reviewing. I am not a regular LESS shipper, I have to say. But it has Snape in it and was written by you, so I read it anyway.And it is lovely, dear!I always wondered why she would cut him off so entirely for simply insulting her. It seems logical that she was hurt on another level. And your snapshots are picking that up wonderfully.And it's even going further.*sigh* Interesting thing is: I don't know whether to feel more or less sorry for him. (Sorry for her for the first time, btw.) It's devasting to love someone that doesn't love you back. But isn't it even more frustrating to know you really could have had that person and messed up in your effort to impress her?! Or does it make one feel better to know it was reciprocated? Or should he be frustrated for partly ruining her life as well? *sighs again* Do your stories have a tendency to raise new questions for me, or what?! And then:Perhaps a lifetime.Brillant.*sniff*

 Saw this rec at TNL.  I just loved this fic.  This is the ship that brought me to fan fiction, so I’m always looking at it.  I’ve wanted to stop, because it seems like the majority of Snape and Lily stories are one sided angst, which I personally don’t find romantic and quite depressing.  Then there are the AU’s where Snape makes all the right choices and I find Snape to be so OOC.  Sure it might be a happy ending, but with this ship I’m not looking for a happy ending, but a back story that gives canon more meaning, which your story does. I do see your story as canon compliant.  I think Snape had more memories and motivation than what was in canon.

Thanks again for writing this, because there is only a handful of this type of Lily and Snape stories.  I hope I will find more.

This was one of my favorite lines:

“He wasn't certain that all of the tears were hers, either, but he would never admit that to anyone, not even himself.”

Oh, so poignant and evocative! You have a lovely style.

Kittylefish,  This is really brilliant, I loved each snippet and how you moved the story forward. It's easy to feel the emotions they shared and the hurts. Very well done.

Wowzas. This really is a great beginning fic from you! I think you have a wonderful grasp for the Snape-psychology and the way he forms and handles relationships. I would LOVE to see more from you soon!

Also, rec, which I hope people follow: http://community.livejournal.com/the_new_library/29398.html

I gave it a 9/10 only because it's short and it's not SS/HG, which I'm now thoroughly convinced you could do amazingly! :-D

Author's Response: i'm so glad you liked my story, Angel! i really appreciate the positive feedback; it means a lot coming from you. :D i'm glad you think i could do ss/hg well, since it is on the agenda. (honestly, this story started the way it did because i was terrified of putting dialog in these characters' mouths, but i guess i got over that, didn't i?) and thanks so much for the rec!

So sad! I wish I could leave you something more coherent, but that's all I'm able to come up with right now. Beautiful imagery, and I hope you write more soon. :-)

OMGosh, excellent story, Love it, well done..Poor Severus...Very good story, keep em coming, you have talent!

Painful, sad and very well done.  Congrats on your first fic! It's very, very moving.Cheers!GG

Oh. My. God! Why didn't you tell me you could write like this? It's not that I am dispassionately reading and thinking, "Yes, excellent writing, mmhmm, very good story..." No! Ok, that, too, but it's the emotion-- hon, if you can draw emotion out of someone like you did with this, you can write!

My mind's a bit jumbled, so let's see... My first thoughts were, that I was glad when you moved onto teenaged Sev and Lily. The childhood scenes were sweet, and in retrospect, I think you need them for the whole arc of the story. But their teen encounters were perfect, felt authentic, and here's why: To paraphrase you, he pulled her bum towards him without understanding what he was doing. YES! When you're that age and experimenting, you don't know why, you just do. Second, same section, her reaction. Who doesn't recall the first time you felt a boy's erection? Holy crap! Push them away! This was just two perfect details.

Skipping ahead to her coming to him: Unfortunately, not only is it true, IMO, that she chose James because of the safety and stability, but you don't just tell that, you show it when he freaks out and yells at her. That, m'dear, is called writing, and you'll hear this over and over: Show, don't tell. You did just that. Not to mention, that reaction was classic Severus Snape. Hurt? Hurt them back, hurt them more.

So excellent. I truly look forward to reading more from you.  ~~~~ Lulabelle72

Author's Response: thank you so much, lulabelle! these words mean so much, especially coming from you. i am so glad that you felt that it rang true, and i really appreciate the specific feedback about things you liked. :D i haven't really written much lately, but i really enjoyed writing this story, so i'm hoping i'll get another idea soon!

Wow...Firs of all, this is your first fic? Congratulations on an amazing piece of work and let me beg you to write more!!!Now, the review, You have actually written the first ss/le story I have ever enjoyed. Not only because I sail the good ship grangersnape but also because I simply did not like Lily in canon. I don't think that Jo really gave us a good side to Lily and she also gave us absolutely NOTHING good about James. Therefore, I have tended to dislike lily and james.But your story made me think. It provided so much more emotional background for lily and her relationship with severus than jo ever gave us. Very believable.And also very sad.Good think severus finds his hermione later on in life LOL!Excellent story!

This is beautiful... and so sad...

That was so heartbreakingly beautiful. What a great first story, I can't wait to read more from you!

Awesome!  Can't say anything else....I'll have to read the rest of your stories at a later date. Thank you for such beautiful writing...

I don't usually go in for Snape and Lily, but I liked this so much.  What a terrific first fic!  You made the emotions very believable.  It's too bad Snape has to wait so long to meet Hermione!  :-)