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In The Vortex
Jenwryn5 Reviews | 5 Ratings, 0 Likes, 0 Favorites )
What can I say? About how crazily impossible it all gets in life sometimes. About how it hurts when someone you love is hurting and you can't do a thing about it...
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i saw your name over here in the original poetery and have been meaning to read this for a while. i'm glad i finally did; it's very eloquent.
That was. . . great. It was deep, and dark, but in a good, thoughtful way.
Terrific.
~Katie
Absolutely beautiful. I know so well what you write of. The man I love is in an abusive marriage that he hasn't the strength to leave. I feel his pain yet cannot share it. You have hit a cord. Irishredlass
Response from Jenwryn (Author of In The Vortex)
Firstly, thank you so much for your kind review. And secondly... it's really awful to feel other people's pain: I hope that the man you love finds the strength to leave. *hugs*
The lines
Purple halos hide behind your Irises and the moon is your Smile. You are so
seem a bit awkward in their pacing and cut-offs?
I like the second verse, and the bit about the black hound and the dog star in the third verse.
Response from Jenwryn (Author of In The Vortex)
You know what? Reading them there in the review, I have to agree with you that they do seem a bit awkward!