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Sonnets: Dreaming
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"And so, I see thee only in my dreams,/ Who I wish were yet in my waking life."
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Pennfana
Member Since 2005 | 38 Stories | Favorited by 15 | 134 Reviews Written | 358 Review Responses
I always feel extremely strange when I'm writing these things, having never really been all that good at talking about myself. In any case, here are the basics: I'm a 41-year-old Canadian who started reading the Harry Potter books about twenty years (!) ago just to see what all the fuss was about. I wrote my first fanfic about a year later, and I've been semi-active in the fandom ever since. I am very musical; I play the bagpipes, I've played the violin since I was about nine years old and I sing with two choirs (a community choir I've been singing with since 1997 and a church choir I've been singing with since late 2008). Writing is also one of my many obsessions, and (much to my relief) the monstrous case of writer's block which grabbed me for a couple of years seems to be gradually letting go. Even so, should I submit any chaptered fics here, it's reasonable to assume that the updates will be pretty far apart even if they're actually finished before I start posting. It's not intentional; I'm just, at times, a little forgetful.
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I also like John Donne. I think you've done a fine job with both sonnets. I hate being nosey, but I wonder whatever happened with this friend. Things the same? Changed?
Response from Pennfana (Author of Sonnets: Dreaming)
Er, you could say things have changed twice. Shortly after I posted these in 2007, he and I resumed our friendship. We'd meet at least once a week, and our conversations would last for hours. I admit that it was somewhat naïve of me to overlook the fact that he'd never remember to call me or drop in when he said he would; his memory is notoriously short, and he always seemed to be glad to hear from me when I phoned. Eventually, though, he just stopped answering the phone (I tried for about two months after our last conversation—he has a job that keeps him fairly busy at unpredictable times, so it wasn't unusual for him to be unreachable), and of course he never called me. We haven't spoken in over a year. So no happy ending there, I'm afraid—at least not in the traditional meaning of the phrase. I do suspect, though, that I got off fairly easy, and though I don't really miss him that badly anymore, I remember him fondly and hope he's doing well.By the way, thanks for the review, and I'm sorry it took me so long to respond. My old laptop finally gave up the ghost (I'd managed to resurrect it several times, but this time it's likely dead for good), and it took awhile for its replacement to come in.
Truly exquisite -- not only through your strict obedience to the proper sonnet form, but also in the way you maintained the meter throughout (which is not as easy as it sometimes might appear and a point by which one can often distinguish a novice poet from an experienced one). Having more than once suffered from unrequited and/or unreciprocated love from both sides -- although more often as the lover than the beloved -- I sympathize very much with the sentiments that you've expressed, but most of all with the last two lines. In my opinion and in my experience, it is at least marginally better (and in all honesty, more often than not far more than just marginally) to let those people go who cannot return your affections or whose affections you cannot return instead of trying to be satisfied with crumbs or trying to satisfy that other person with them. You're absolutely right...how can it not hurt? However, I know (and I suspect you do too) that it would hurt far more in the long run to hang onto this person and try to be content with whatever he is able to give you when that is not what you want -- and especially if being around him only makes you hunger all the more for what you cannot have. If it's any comfort, I think it's possible that you're not the only one who's hurting -- if the man to whom you refer cares about you at all (and the length and depth of your acquaintance suggests that this is the case), then I imagine that he probably feels at least some pain or guilt as a result of not being able to return your feelings. If he truly is avoiding you, it's not impossible that this is part of the reason why even though it's a passive and not very courageous way of dealing with the situation.
Response from Pennfana (Author of Sonnets: Dreaming)
Thank you for your review and for your kind words, though it's not quite a comfort to think that I'm not the only one who's hurting. After all, who likes to think that they've hurt someone they care for? But that is consistent with his personality; he's been known to simply avoid unpleasant situations before. What puzzles me, though, is that when we do speak (we've spoken a couple of times since these poems were posted), he's always saying that he'll call or he'll drop in for a visit—and he's the one who comes up with the idea, not me—but then he never actually does it. He's also said, and I quote, "Don't be a stranger. You know where to find me," and told me that I was welcome to visit him anytime. It's like he wants me to keep on showing up in his life, but he's reluctant to show up in mine. It's more than a little exasperating, and I'm getting to be too old for things like this.
In any case, thanks again for reviewing—and for speaking so kindly of the way I chose to express my frustration with a situation that I think is very deeply messed-up.
I saw this under the original title and my intense sonnet addiction compelled me to read it; I was greatly rewarded. It is good to see another sonnet writer on here. Your command of the elizabethan tongue is just lovely. I think this has inspired me to write another sonnet. Keep going, and I hope your relationship turns out okay!
Response from Pennfana (Author of Sonnets: Dreaming)
Thank you for your review, and I'm sorry that I've taken so long to respond. (The fact that there are reviews for "Dreaming" was a bit of a pleasant surprise—over the years I've noticed that my poetry doesn't seem to attract many readers.) The sonnet form is a particular favourite of mine, though I experiment with others, and my use of Elizabethan English came more or less by accident. I was an English major in university, and by sheer luck of the draw, most of the courses I had time for centred around the English Renaissance.
As for the relationship, such as it is...well, I meant what I said in the notes. I love him, but if he's willing to give up the friendship just because he's figured out that I have feelings for him that I've carefully kept out of our interactions, then I can certainly do without him. Whatever happens, I know I'll be OK eventually.
Anyway, thanks for reviewing. I've read one or two of your sonnets as well, though I'm not sure I reviewed, and I found them to be well-written. It's nice to know that I may have managed to help to inspire someone else, however small my influence might have been.