Falling Hard
Battle of Lissa2 Reviews | 8.5/10 (2 Ratings, 0 Likes, 0 Favorites )
There is something to be said for major age differences in relationships.
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Battle of Lissa
Member Since 2007 | 12 Stories | Favorited by 141 | 65 Reviews Written | 765 Review Responses
Student at California State University of Los Angeles. Currently studying Law and Society Sociology and Criminology while hovering in graduation limbo.
I enjoy writing simple poetry about love, life, and betrayal; either about myself or those closest to me.
Notice! December 2, 2010:
This site is amazing. The numerous reviews and reads I have received here has been beyond humbling. However as I have gotten older, RL has taken main priority to reading and writing fanfic. Any tiny fraction of personal time I am able to indulge myself has been spent in the fandom, but I must admit it had been dwindling more and more. I will NEVER abandon anything I have begun, and attempt to finish my WIPs every day. However, like many authors, I have made the mistake of submitting my work to more archives than I am capable of maintaining with the care that is due them. If I am able and time willing, I might continue to update my fics here, but my main priority lies elsewhere. MODERATED ARCHIVES ARE A BLESSING AND NECESSARY FOR QUALITY FIC. I stand by that. Unfortunately submitting my fics to various moderated archives means more time necessary to edit the various mistakes each individual archives will find in my work. My fics will continue to be updated at Ashwinder and Potter Place Archives, anywhere else will have to take a back seat. This is my problem and I take full responsibility. Thank you for reading, reccing, voting, and reviewing my fics on The Petulant Poetess!
Reviews for Falling Hard
"As you stroke my back, do you laugh?"
"How easy I fell for you, heavy on my back and hips I lay."
I like this, there's an allusion to being stabbed in the back and/or betrayed... or at least that's my take on it. Your poem also evokes (again, imho) the feeling of falling in love while also suspecting/knowing that the person in question is untrustworthy. Terrible feeling to fall in love first and realize the potentiality for pain after the fact.
Response from Battle of Lissa (Author of Falling Hard)
This is about falling in love with someone who seems so perfect... almost too perfect so you begin to doubt.Thank you for the review!
Interesting reversal of the young-old dilemma.Good ideas in "no control over the capacity of my experience" and "private game with a timer on my heart."Wished some of the lines scanned better.Inspired me to a paraphrase which I will try to send to you.
Response from Battle of Lissa (Author of Falling Hard)
Thank you for the review. I'm glad that you liked my poem and that it inspired you enough to write a paraphrase. I recieved your email and I really enjoyed it. Thank you for spending the time to write that and send it to me.