Chains

Devin Aiden Teague

1 Review | 8.0/10 (1 Rating, 0 Likes, 2 Favorites )

Poetry/Prose Poetry: Free Form 55 Words 1 Chapter Complete

what can i say? It came from nowhere.

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Chapter 1: chains

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8/10

dominatrix

Ah ... nice. Perhaps I am reading my own desires into this, but that's what poetry is for. Now for a little friendly critique: The 7th and 9th lines would flow better with the "beat" (pardon the terminology) if you eliminated one syllable. "Scenery out-of-place" and "Somehow it's alright" would fit nicely, I think. ;)

Response from Devin Aiden Teague (Author of Chains)

thank you.....perhaps you a right......^_^

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