What You Owe
Mugglegirl09088 Reviews | 3.75/10 (8 Ratings, 0 Likes, 2 Favorites )
Lucius returns home after escaping Azkaban with orders from the Dark Lord. Will he be able to follow them?
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Mugglegirl0908
Member Since 2005 | 4 Stories | Favorited by 5 | 12 Reviews Written | 18 Review Responses
Hello! I am 24 years old and a recent college graduate. I have a couple one-shots posted here and on my LJ. I don't write all that often, but I read a lot. :)
Reviews for What You Owe
Man, actually makes you feel sorry for Narcissa. Nicely done.
Chilling, though excellently written and all-too credible tale. I do think there are hints in HP that Lucius is devoted to his family--and yet at the same time that he wouldn't hesitate to sacrifice them. And, of course, it's all-too plausible the Dark Lord would ask Lucius this. I really bought into all Narcissa's shifting feelings and thoughts here. It's a great character piece for her.
Great fic! Sad, but very good!
Response from Mugglegirl0908 (Author of What You Owe)
Thanks, Christy! I know it was sad, but there just didn't seem to be another way for this to end. I'm glad you liked it, though!
Very nicely done. I think the whole thing was very in character for all parties, including the Dark Lord's decree that Lucius kill Narcissa for her traitorous behavior. And a nice job showing us what she might have thought while facing the inevitable.
Response from Mugglegirl0908 (Author of What You Owe)
Thank you! I tried very hard to carefully weigh every word and really think about what the characters would do in this situation. I'm glad you enjoyed! Thank you for reviewing.
I thought this was really well written 
and a great insight into their relationship. I love stories centred around Narcissa, she's one of my favourite characters, and you portrayed her really well. You gave the character lots of depth and motivation!
Response from Mugglegirl0908 (Author of What You Owe)
Wow! Thank you for the wonderful review. I'm so sorry it's taken me this long to respond. I'm so glad you enjoyed the story, and thank you for the thoughtful review.
You know, I think it was worthy of the win considering the ones that did win. *shakes head*Very good tale, love.
Response from Mugglegirl0908 (Author of What You Owe)
Hehe! Thank you, Sun. Maybe next time, eh? I'm still quite proud of this. :)
Very interesting story. I liked it, but I'm curious... Since the Avada Kedavra is pretty much supposed to be instantaneous (I'm assuming, since every time we've heard about it from JKR everyone hit by it just drops down dead immediately) would Narcissa even have had time to have any thoughts at all? Just curious.
Response from Mugglegirl0908 (Author of What You Owe)
Well, I used a device often used that I guess you'd call "slowing time down" for lack of better phrasing. That part was like any scene in lit or on TV or in a movie where the person dying has their life "flash before their eyes" right before death. It was described for a while, but it took place in a split second.
Thanks for reviewing! :)
Response from Satai Delenn (Reviewer)
Ah, I see. That makes sense. Thank you.
A lovely story. Pity Narcissa didn't get away.
Response from Mugglegirl0908 (Author of What You Owe)
Thank you! I tried to think of how I could have her escape that was realistic and in character, but I was struggling with it, and decided this was a more realistic ending. I'm glad you enjoyed it!