Ashen
Chapter 7 of 8
NyxxConcerning Severus Snape in love...
ReviewedAshen
Sweet the juice of tender fruit
So fresh upon your lips.
Alive with joy and innocence
That darkness can't resist.
Spying from a corner
Amid the shadows of your kind,
A beauty grew within the desert
With nimble limbs and mind.
Her image wavers before you,
She is no more than a dream.
Reaching out to touch her
She ripples like a stream.
Deserve this feast, you starving man
She does not, to you, belong.
Your darkness mustn't taint her,
Though her purity is strong.
Stolen- was that longed for kiss
From her moist and swollen lips.
Defiling a sacred creature
By the thrusting of your hips.
Desperate- now to keep this gift,
Though it be sacrilege.
You would deceive to keep her,
For without, you cease to live.
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17 Reviews | 5.88/10 Average
WOW...Nyxx! I am so, so impressed by your capacity for poetry and internal rhyme. What can I say, I don't have any words to adequately describe your talent...I truly felt your words. What style of poetry do you follow? I noticed the 2, 4 line ending rhyme but somehow all four lines in each stanza(?) seem to sound with one another...is it the length of each line or each word's syllables? I only dabble in rhyming poetry where each ending line rhymes with the next (aabb) but your poetry is so much more...How do you do it? Anyway kudos to you!
Response from Nyxx (Author of Smattering)
Yay! Thank you soo much =) I'm so deliriously happy that you enjoyed them! *warm fuzzy* As for styles, I don't really follow any one in particular, other than my usual 4 line stanzas, and I only recently attempted anything out of the ordinary. The Origin of Life and Awe are both experiments in 5 line stanzas, which I'm still not quite comfortable with just yet. Emily Dickinson has made a great impact on me too, and The Gardener was influenced by her poem "She sweeps with many colored brooms". I'm glad you like that I focus on rhyming lines 2 & 4, because many people don't like that aspect. I've tried to make them more structured after receiving complaints, but it puts so many limits on expression that I gave up! So, I guess the trick to writing- is not to listen when people say to need to squeeze yourself into accepted poetry formats- just write what comes easiest to you. Thanks again for your great review
Response from Nyxx (Author of Smattering)
! I'd love to see your poems, if you ever decide to post any of them, so message me if you do!
Perfect
I really enjoy your poetry. Good work.
Response from Nyxx (Author of Smattering)
Thank you for all the reviews! =) I didn't expect many would see them... with such a sexy Potions Master to the left of the screen, and I'm so grateful that you paid my poems attention! *huuugs SW69!!!* 
Beautiful imagery, though spawned from such a sad time in your life.
When I read this, I immediately thought of Snape, and then I looked at the summary. Good one.
Ah, what a turn of events, eh? What goes around comes around. Very intense.
Response from Nyxx (Author of Smattering)
Irony or karma. I never could decide. Thanks for reviewing for me s.w. 
This is very sweet.
Lovely
A bit dark, but over all astounding. This poem would go great in a Death Eater Fic if you chose to write one. Amazing job.
Well done, the first and the last prong (is that the right word?) were a little non-flowwy, but other then that, it was amazing.
Another amazing Poem. It describes how my life used to be. Great job even for a new writer.
This would be a good poem for someone to read at Snape's funeral. You have really grasped the nature of the world.
This is so cute. I love it completely.
I could see this as being a description of Snape if he never died at the end. Well done.
Another really great Poem. Is this your own work, if so, you have a really amazing Talent.
Wow, this was really good. Who are the character's you are trying to portray?
This is great. I like that you've paid tribute to her. Lovely wording.
Response from Nyxx (Author of Smattering)
Thank you! =)