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To Make an End
JackieJLH20 Reviews | 4.9/10 (20 Ratings, 0 Likes, 1 Favorite )
At first she didn't quite believe her eyes. Severus Snape here, on her doorstep, was so far outside the realm of anything she'd ever believed possible that she couldn't fully comprehend what she was seeing for a few seconds.
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I've had this story bookmarked for quite some time; I've no idea how long. Tonight I felt like reading and started at the bottom of my list. I'm very glad I did because this story is excellent. I was drawn in and fully engaged before I knew it, and the story read very quickly. You penned a fascinating alternate universe. Very compelling. Thank you.
That was fantastic. The alternative time line with Voldemort's victory and Snape & Petunia making a family had me hooked. I was sad that this family unit would cease to exist.
Also liked the wee peak into Hermione & Bill's life, which would also disappear.
Nicely wrapped up, with the return to the canon story line, but it's left with the question hanging - what will happen if Hermione does the research into Time turners?
Good one!
Oh dear. Severus and Petunia meant well, but doomed everyone. Yipes.
Absolutely brilliant. It totally had me fooled that it was AU ended up completely canon. Very clever twist. :)
I like all the changes from canon. Makes it very interesting! :)
I like that Petunia is trying to care for Harry. :)
At first, I thought the story was interesting. But when you got the PoA arc and had him die without the world ever knowing the truth, I knew that it was going to get bad. (I didn't have this thought with the resurrected horcrux in the CoS arc because I thought the adults might be able to deal with him before he caused too much harm.)
However, by the time I got to the last chapter, I was emotionally overwhelmed. Harry and Snape had a good life, with a loving family, but Dumbledore decided to play God to ensure that things went his way (i.e. make it so that he is never questioned and that he's one running the show). Never-mind that he could have done something before Voldie won (besides just trying to find Harry). After all, he was suppose to be this powerful wizard, yet he decided to not do anything proactive in the war because he choose to make a spoken possibly [the prophecy] into truth.
Of course, the brief glimpse of Hermione home life got to me as well. Having her husband say that no matter what universe they lived in, they will still love each other and have their family, made me sad and frustrated. I felt that way because I knew that Dumbledore (and Hermione) changed the reality they lived in into canon reality, meaning that those two end up married to other people and their child was doomed into non-existence.
TL;DR - I started reading this because I thought it was interesting and by the end of it I was sad and frustrated over the possibilities snatched away because of Dumbledore's meddling. This basically means that you wrote a good story because you got me invested in what was going on with only 3 chapter.
I should have realized that there would be time-turners involved. You left a few things open, like whether Bill and Hermione will find each other after all. All in all, the whole thing is quite fascinating.
His Patronus is a squirrel? Whoa...
I love the correspondence between them. I love the way he gives her what hints he can about raising a young wizard.
Perhaps he needed to see the deaths from Harry's eyes. Maybe that's something that gave him closure.
What an amazing story, and you wrapped it up so neatly at the end, placing everything(?) back where it should be. I'd be interested to read about whether or not Hermione's Time Turner experiments in this timeline go anywhere... Great job, as usual!
Oh my, how things are changing! Harry in Slytherin, a young Tom Riddle hanging about (I take it that in this timeline, Lucius' attempt with the diary was successful), and now Sirius Black killed without Peter Pettigrew's betrayal revealed! I loved the exchange of letter between Petunia and Severus, especially the one where she says, There's a turtle stuck to my
kitchen ceiling...
And now we have a changed Patronus. I must quickly away to the next chapter!
I think it's amazing how u showed one difference created a completely different timeline...I think we all have wondered why nobody told Petunia in person...
What a great first chapter! I love this alternate look at what could have happened, and look forward to seeing how this one change at the beginning will affect the Dursleys, Harry, and even Severus himself. Minerva's remark about Albus understanding if he'd ever had a sister was a nice tip of the hat to his still-undisclosed past, and a great catalyst for his change of heart. Unfortunately, I have to go to work, so I can't immediately go to the next chapter, but I'll be back later today to read the rest of this!
Absolutely brilliant. This fic is going straight onto my favourites list; thank you for sharing it.
wow, that was a case of strike first and ask questions later. Poor Sirius dead, oh my. Now on to the next chapter
a promising beginning, nice to see Petunia behave like a normal woman. Vernon is his usual not very nice self. Looking forward to follow your story, like it j
Oooh, this was GOOD! I loved the alternate universe - funny how everything was changed just by Severus giving Petunia the bad news. And the time-turner changing everything to how it should have been. Amazingly well thought out!
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Oh, well done. I was totally captivated throughout.
That's a very compelling "what if". That was a powerful moment when Minerva told Albus that he would understand if he ever had a sister, and another such moment when Petunia pointed out that Harry's situation was caused by the Wizarding world and then dumped back on Muggles when the Wizards didn't want to deal with it.
fantastic!
thanks for sharing
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