The Innocence of Snow
moiramountain9 Reviews | 8.56/10 (9 Ratings, 0 Likes, 0 Favorites )
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moiramountain
Member Since 2008 | 10 Stories | Favorited by 33 | 329 Reviews Written | 307 Review Responses
A Celtic heart residing in Denver in the shadow of the Rocky Mountains,I've been posting fictions for about a year now and have met some wonderful new friends, including an outstanding beta.
Professionally I'm the Operations Director of a modern dance ensemble, and personally the proud mother of two wonderful daughters.
Those of you who read my works know my passion for the beauty and power of language -- it is my goal to lure the reader into the story -- invoking powerful images, and waking the magic of the tale in their hearts. Much like a potion, I hope to bewitch and ensnare. I VERY MUCH appreicate reviews and critiques. Very helpful to see what my readers are thinking. Currently working on an epic piece and am so happy that so many of you are becoming immersed in it, and are also saying you like my shorter pieces as well. It's an honor to be in the company of some incredible writers - and readers as well !! 
Reviews for The Innocence of Snow
Such beauty in your writing. I can really see and feel this piece, if that makes sense. Just lovely, every moment.
Response from moiramountain (Author of The Innocence of Snow)
Wow - you've been reading madly today! I'm giddy with delight to find all of your lovely comments. Thank you so much - this was last year's Solstice gift to my wonderful beta. This was rather like a little snow globe of an idea that just kept after me until I shook the globe and let the snow fall!
That seems a bit sad. I wish someone would force him out of his misery.
Response from moiramountain (Author of The Innocence of Snow)
Indeed... Who knows, perhaps some brave witch will be cheeky enough to shape her own essence of snow and send it skipping in his direction.... someone who not only loves him but LIKES him !!! We hope so, don't we? *smiles*
I swear, woman! You write some of the most beautiful prose I've ever read. It's as lyrical and finely crafted as a much loved violin.I liked your use of the repeated phrase to link the phases of his life, and the sorrows he carried. Perhaps I'm wrong, but in the last paragraph I sense the beginnings of hope. Perhaps he could learn to laugh again – if he cared to, if he wanted. Perhaps his friend with the bright tartan ribbons would be glad if he did.Thank you for writing this lovely piece.Beth
Response from moiramountain (Author of The Innocence of Snow)
Your lovely review is a wonderful gift for me, just as I intended this small piece to be a gift for my beta Kelly and all the many wonderful friends I've made on this site. I wanted to write a Severus piece for the Solstice but neither too fluffy nor too angsty - I'm glad you think I found a good balance. And yes, I would like to think that there is hope - and that his friend will someday see him laugh. Happy Christmas and THANK YOU for my lovely Solstice Stars !!!!
This was good.
Response from moiramountain (Author of The Innocence of Snow)
Thank you !! Glad you enjoyed it, and do have a very Merry Christmas. Maybe throw a few snowballs?
cute :)
Response from moiramountain (Author of The Innocence of Snow)
Thank you !! Happy holidays !! ;)
As I read this, I can see it. The stones and the snowballs as they flit and trip along. Very well said.
Response from moiramountain (Author of The Innocence of Snow)
I'm pleased I could paint a winter scene for you that you enjoyed !! May your holidays be filled with blessings !!
Love the repetitive theme linking the phases of his life together. :)
Response from moiramountain (Author of The Innocence of Snow)
Life is all about repeating certain themes isn't it... but sometimes we need to break the cycle. I'm in hopes that Severus will break some of his and find new patterns that will give him a renewed peace. Happy Christmas !! And thank you for my present of shiny stars !!!
" IF " a very big word indeed.
Anonymous
Truly a truly wonderful piece. Sad, heartbreaking in parts, light and gay in between, and just perfect for our common favourite characters.
Author's Response: Thank you my dear! It's wonderful to see you again!! This was a holiday treat for a mutual friend - who shares our same fascination with these two incredible characters. I'm delighted you enjoyed this "winter's tale" !!