Beautiful
karelia8 Reviews | 8 Ratings, 0 Likes, 2 Favorites )
The future looked bright. Perhaps it was her blonde hair, he thought.
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karelia
Member Since 2005 | 83 Stories | Favorited by 232 | 666 Reviews Written | 2,343 Review Responses
Dabbling in writing, in music, enjoying knitting on reasonably cool days. Petulant admin. Beta for some. Alpha for some. Cheese-maker for many. Locavore with a passion.
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Brilliant - no adverbs challenge - omg! And another one of your stories - no adjectives allowed and strict word limits - really admire and love how these sweet snapshots of their progressive relationship fills in the time-line of their relationship. Love it that Lucius is smitten by Narcissa from the very beginning: her grace and beauty striking him, the turning point in her life with her father insisting she consider her future, and the romantic proposal in the carriage - Lucius, you smoothy!
Response from karelia (Author of Beautiful)
*laughs* Thank you! I love challenges like that, though I'll admit the 'no adverb' one was seriously hard.
The perfect mood for the season. I know that the prompt statedit should be no more than 500 words but I'd love to read more. That was way too short.
Response from karelia (Author of Beautiful)
I write these short ones as a kind of stress relief while I'm in the middle of longer ones that have me tear my hair out... I'm sorry. LOL.Thank you for your lovely review! And Happy Holidays!
How this was lovely and the progression so sweet. I loved his impression of her as a first year.
Response from karelia (Author of Beautiful)
Thank you!
Karelia, long time no loveliesss (I'm not hissing, just emphasising the plural-s).Beautiful, indeed. I find that line about the bright-looking future and the blonde hair moving and I love L's silent Scourgify. Devilish little prompt produced two lovely LuNas within 2 days. Way to go!
Response from karelia (Author of Beautiful)
Slythkid! I'm so sorry for the lack of loveliessss! I'z been writing, and yes, there is Malfoys in it. That's my excuse. ;)Thanks for another lovely review! <3
It's always good to know that there's a human being behind all that evil. Loved it :)
Response from karelia (Author of Beautiful)
Heh. Thank you!
It's harder than you think to avoid adverbs. The 'ly' ones are easy to ditch; it's all the other sneaky ones! Lovely job! :)
Response from karelia (Author of Beautiful)
Oh, gods, yes, it's a lot harder to avoid those than it is to avoid adjectives. LOL. But I spent enough time griping about them, so I figured it's only fair to make myself write something without them. :P
How sweet!
Response from karelia (Author of Beautiful)
I hope it's natural sweet rather than artificial. :P
wow! i don't know what an adverb is, but this is pretty damn good
Response from karelia (Author of Beautiful)
's okay, love. We'll have a grammar lesson soon. <3