Yeep. Not a good mistake to make... yet for some reason I sympathized with Lily, a good woman torn between two men. Her crime was in not making up her mind, and then that horrible, horrible mistake.

0/10

orm irian

OUCH!

That's all I can say...

0/10

moiramountain

She deserves neither of them as a lover.... or even a freind.

10/10

snitchette

OMG!!! I absolutely did NOT expected that. Poor Sev! That must be a terrible slap (for lack of a better word) to his ego.

10/10

morgaine_dulac

That #¤% &P%¤!!! (insert foul words here) How could she!! Never liked her. Hmpf! 20 points to your House for writing this, though.

Response from smurfgirlz (Author of The Mistake)

Thank you for the review :) I feel the same about Lily, especially after writing this! Hufflepuff thanks you for the points! :)

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Elizabeth

I would like to have know what she was thinking when she realized her mistake. Did she feel like dirt? I hope so. That's horrible. Poor Severus. He deserved so much more than Lily, he just didn't know it.That was beautiful, it really shows their relationship as I thought it would have been.

Response from smurfgirlz (Author of The Mistake)

Thank you for the review! :) Yes, this pretty much sums up the relationship as I see it, only without seeing Severus forgiving Lily for her mistake and taking his anger out on James (which kinda makes me feel a bit sorry for James but oh well).As far as what she was thinking... I think that should totally be the readers conclusion :) I would hope she would feel like dirt, but at the same time I honestly can picture her feeling bad, but thinking that it's what he deserved for chosing the path in life that he chose. Just like when she refused to forgive him for calling her a mudblood after being humilated in front of the whole school. Anyway, thank you again for the review :) I'm glad you enjoyed it!

0/10

sunny33

How could she?

Response from smurfgirlz (Author of The Mistake)

I wish I knew! This was something that just bit at my ankles till I wrote it. Then I realized it pretty much sums up the way I view Lily Evans Potter, and as much as I hated writing Severus through that I picture him not hating her for it, but hating James for it.I'll leave it up to us to hate her for it!

9/10

MlleGigi

Poor Severus... Lily, it seems, is doing two of the worst things someone can do -- cheating on one partner (James) and calling a partner by the wrong name (Severus). And she's supposed to be a noble, chivalrous Gryffindor??? Yeah, right...

Response from smurfgirlz (Author of The Mistake)

Thank you so much for the review :)I hated doing that to Severus, but I just couldn't get it out of my head that Lily would do something like that. ><

10/10

Crystal Quill

Poor Severus! Even if he was better than James in bed, her heart was already committed to him. What a dreadful way of realising that he had lost Lily forever.

0/10

EverMystique

First, I have to say... I love your screen name. LOL.

Poor Severus. Bad enough Lily chose James, but to enjoy such sex with the right guy, and call out the wrong name... torturous.

Well written and engaging.

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