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Still Tweaking
WriterMerrin11 Reviews | 7.0/10 (11 Ratings, 0 Likes, 0 Favorites )
In this sequel to "Tweaking," there are no commas, but Lily finally gets her kiss. (This will make more sense if you've read "Tweaking.")
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Loved this and Tweaking as well! It makes me wonder how they were able to manage being together in Advanced Potions during their 6th & 7th years, when they had their breakup at the end of their 5th years.
Response from WriterMerrin (Author of Still Tweaking)
Thanks. It must have been really hard on them, especially with Slughorn constantly playing them against each other... Wow, that sounds like another good plot if I can stand writing the angst...
oh, did I get this right? they brew a potion, it went wrong? But at least the effect was there. All placebo. All you need is love, not potions.
Response from WriterMerrin (Author of Still Tweaking)
Hey, thanks for trying! Lily and Severus definitely brewed it right (see "Tweaking"). This was one of their experimental attempts that resulted in his note on the elixer that ended up in his textbook. I'm sure that the kiss was all love.
Response from salvamea (Reviewer)
ok, should have looked up "tweaking", right. but he or she mentioned, that the colour and the odour of the brewed thing was not as expected. so I thought it must have gone wrong. and tweaking can definitely come from the butterflies in her/his stomac produced by their hormones.
Response from WriterMerrin (Author of Still Tweaking)
I hadn't thought of that! I never realized there were so many ways to use the word "Tweaking" until I wrote this set.
Awwwwww how sweet. You made me forgot about those horrible commas fo a moment. Thank you so much.
Response from WriterMerrin (Author of Still Tweaking)
Thank you so much! No punctuation can assail the woman safe in Sev's arms.
Lovely piece. I admit that I haven't read 'Tweaking'... yet, but I will do. The lack of comma was masterful :)
Oh cute little one shot. They got the results seh wanted and he got a bit too. Too bad he didn't know that it worked jsut fine!
Response from WriterMerrin (Author of Still Tweaking)
Well, Lily's young man is just a perfectionist. He can't help it that he thinks the process deserves more experimentation. Thank you very much for the review.
"Your kisses are all the euphoria I need… for now."This is too funny! Will there be a three-quel? Perhaps with wintergreen? My personal favorite? And maybe Severus joining Lily?I am amazed at the "comma-less" writing I've read. It is not an easy thing to do! Beth
Response from WriterMerrin (Author of Still Tweaking)
Oh, wow. I hadn't thought about it. My intention always was to write a sequel to give them the kiss, but beyond that, I don't know. I've got two WiPs I'm trying to work on, but thanks for the lovely reviews!
Nawww that was sweet. I'd love to tweak Severus' nose too!
Response from WriterMerrin (Author of Still Tweaking)
Wouldn't we all ;) Perhaps the potion was just a good excuse to do what she's wanted to do all along. Thanks!
Heck, I'd say the potion worked just fine. She did get her kiss! and felt the warm euphoria being in his arms... what was the potions supposed to do? LOL
Response from WriterMerrin (Author of Still Tweaking)
Good point. Sev just needs to get used to the idea that his girlfriend likes to play with his nose. Thank you very much.
Cute and commaless! :)
Response from WriterMerrin (Author of Still Tweaking)
LOL! Yep. That was harder than I expected in the beginning, and I'm much obliged to Litc for rescuing the readers from my awkward attempts to avoid introductory phrases.
Cute. :)
Response from WriterMerrin (Author of Still Tweaking)
Thanks. I'd always meant to write a sequel.
"Your kisses are all the euphoria I need..."Phew! Pure romance.
Response from WriterMerrin (Author of Still Tweaking)
Yay! Thank you. I am smiling really big! I imagine his heart was just full of her then.