this was a beutiful story.. hertbreaking though..
love the fact that it was written from severus POV. Nice!

whoa, that last line was a car wreck!  Not that I mean you did a bad job.  No, it was very sweet and good, but it was a big smash! into the gentle affection of the scene.

ummm....heartbreaking? but beautiful. well done

How sad! It's hard to see love develop too late.

MRS. WEASLEY....ewwwwww, yucky!  I read tho "tbc..." so there is still hope!  “Hush, little nuisance. Sleep.” is probably one of the sweetest lines I have ever heard come out of his mouth!  Don't keep us in suspense for to long!

I was totally sucked into this budding romance between Severus and Hermione, when out of the blue WHAM! the last line just blew me away.  Arrrrrgh!But I'm going to follow this story to its conclusion (you did say you were trying to make it right, after all).  This is really a great beginning and lays a firm foundation for coming chapters (while you make it right, after all).Beth

 no no no no! She married the whiny prat?

This really is terribly moving - well done.  You've conveyed a lot in a short piece of work and nothing is over-stated.

Hey, I was surprised to find you here.  That was very lovely until that last line.  :(  Can you kill off Ron?  He's a jealous prat anyway.  Maybe a fatal illness, or horrible accident at work. 

very sweet and tender.  yes, the last bit was unexpected, but not off-putting for me.  i look forward to seeing where you take this.  : )

I loved it, until the very last sentence; what a cruel thing to do, adding Ron in a Hermione/Severus punishing Umbrigde story. I was looking forward to read about a trial where Umbrigde got her punishment (I am so happy you are doing something about it, the old toad shoul be roasted above an open fire, wood provided by every magical creature who should have front seats to her torture...), but due to severe allergy against the Ron/Hermione pairing I will be rather careful about following your story. Just the thougth of getting a scene where Hermione shows such lack of jugdement that she let any part of Ron's skin get in contact with hers, makes my stommack twist and turn and angry, painfull boils are popping up everywhere.....:-) I will probably take a peak whan you update, but most likeley won't read well enough to review until you, hopefully, begging on my knees, promising chocolate etc etc, makes Ron  dissapear from Hermiones life for good, never ever comming back ever...:-))

Oh wow. What a heartbreak:(I loved it:)Warm regards,Fizzabella

That's was really lovely...up until the last two words. Surely Ron's out somewhere having an affair or getting himself killed. No? Drats! Don't suppose you would consider it?

Oh bum, and just when I thought there was promise. Very nicely done though.

Such a touching scene and I love the “Hush, little nuisance. Sleep.” line it harks back to his usual persona but it is tender. Aww.Then the last line...Oh so very cruel.Is there any more? Please...Cheers.

It's unfair. Severus is always the broken hearted one. Please tell him to come see me. I'll take good care of him