The World Comes Crashing Down
Chapter 3 of 7
beaweasley2Sometimes your life simply turns upside
down when you least expect it to. Hermione thought her life was all mapped out and going according to plan. Nevertheless, one night at the opera and a mysterious romantic dream may have changed things for her forever.
I want to give a great big thank you hug to MadBrilliant for combing through this to point out my numerous errors and help me make this presentable for reading. You're the best, thank you!
The World Comes Crashing Down
When Hermione entered Diagon Alley to go to the Apparation site, she collided into a woman who was apparently going to try and enter the shop. Stepping back as she regained her balance, she realized the woman was Lavender Brown. "Oh my, hi!" she said, regaining her composure. "Lavender, hello."
Lavender looked just as surprised to see her. "Hermione, hi!" She looked nervously at the door behind Hermione as if trying to see inside.
"The shop is closed. George had to...close up early," Hermione said. "Is there something you wanted or are you here to see George?"
Lavender looked at her, nervously, and shook her head. "No, it's all right. I wasn't looking for George."
"Do you know Verity?" Hermione asked.
"No. Well, yes, but only by acquaintance," Lavender said, sighing and turning to face Hermione. "I was looking for Ron."
Hermione didn't miss the disappointment on the girl's face. It wasn't a casual disappointment, but a regretful, really wanted to see him kind, she had seen on Lavender's face many times in their sixth year when Ron was ditching her. "Ron apparently had to take Megan, Hannah and Susan's friend, home." Lavender shot her a quick look full of daggers and incredulity before schooling her expression into a feigned indifference that wasn't really all that believable. Having to say it out loud, it sounded rather odd to her, as well, and Hermione suddenly felt a sick sensation in her stomach and a momentary distrust in Ron.
"Who's Megan?" Lavender asked, sounding a little more incensed than would be expected.
"I just met her, briefly," Hermione said, distracted by thoughts of concern and wonder, although she did clearly recognize Lavender's reactions. "I don't know her last name. Pardon me, but I need to get home. I'll tell Ron you were here inquiring after him."
"No, don't bother; I'll stop by tomorrow," Lavender was saying as Hermione walked away.
She Apparated in the middle of the street, disregarding the klaxon anti-Apparation warnings that were in place on the shop fronts, arriving in front of Grimmauld Place. Hermione slipped inside, quietly crossed the hall, careful not to wake Mrs. Black in her frame, and hurried silently up the stairs. She didn't know why she'd came here first, but couldn't turn back now. She pushed open Ron's door and stood in shock the moment she did, watching the scene before her.
Ron was kneeling in front of Megan who was teetering on the edge of the bed, her hands behind her as he pushed his penis into her. Ron pulled her hips closer, penetrating her while he knelt, apparently grasping her bottom for easier access to enter her. Megan leaned back, thrusting her hips to meet each of his thrusts, her legs clasped around his back. His pale, freckled buttocks were squeezing and flexing with each forward thrust as he held her close to him, obviously in order to drive more deeply into her, making Megan gasp in pleasure, grasping onto him, as if to encourage him to push even harder. Hermione was amazed at the control, speed, and rhythm of the sex she was watching in mute shock from the doorway.
Megan suddenly lunged forward and wrapped her arms around Ron's neck, and he scrambled to his feet, holding her up in his arms as he lifted and guided Megan on his penis. Hermione was amazed that Ron was strong enough to comfortably support her, although Megan was likewise lifting and pulling herself on Ron as she clung to his neck. In a swift move, Ron climbed up on the bed, still inside Megan, and dropped her shoulders on the bed, kneeling under her, with both her legs still around his hips as he leaned forward so that his whole body pressed against her chest, and their bodies rocked together as he penetrated her roughly.
It was clearly obvious that Megan, who was completely oblivious to Hermione, was thoroughly enjoying being fucked by her fiancé and was about to reach her climax. "Pardon me for interrupting, but we have dinner reservations, Ronald," Hermione said coldly. "So, when you're through..."
"Oh, fuck!" Ron said as Megan screamed.
"Exactly," Hermione said calmly, although she could feel her raw energy begin to build in anger, and there was a ringing in her ears. "How much longer will you be?" she asked, fuming, as the lights began to flicker and the bed frame was began to rattle, but not from either Ron or Megan, who'd gone quite still.
"Hermione?!" Ron exclaimed as he desperately tried to untangle himself from Megan, who was grasping onto him as if for dear life.
"Because if you aren't through, Ronald, I'd be more than happy to wait until you are finished," she sneered, shaking in anger. Behind her the doors in the hallway were rattling while in the room the wardrobe doors were shaking, and the bed frame looked as if it was about to buckle and the mirror on the wall was shivering.
"Megan, let me go," Ron uttered, frightened. "Hermione, no, please, calm down!"
"Miss, you is..." Kreacher said from the doorway behind her.
Ron shouted at the elf, "Get Harry and Ginny, quick," as the wardrobe door and bedposts began to splinter and the mirror began to crack.
"How could you?! You sodding wanker!" Hermione yelled at him. "We were supposed to be getting married!"
"Supposed to? What? Megan, let go," Ron said, trying to push away.
Megan was white with fear. "NO! She'll kill me! Look at her!"
"You get out...now!" Hermione snarled at Megan. The wardrobe door shattered, and two of the bedposts and the mirror cracked. Megan finally let go of Ron, scrambling to the far side of the room as the canopy fell. Hermione turned all her focus on Ron. "You...you...how could you?" She raised her wand and shrieked, "Oppugno!" as a flock of small golden birds shot into the room, half diving for Ron and the other half for Megan, diving, pecking, and clawing at the pair.
"Gerremoffme!" Ron growled, swatting at the birds. "Her...ouch...mione!"
Megan was faring no better at trying to protect herself from flying wood splinters and attacking birds.
"I can explain!" Ron shouted.
"There is no explaining!" Hermione yelled back, and the mirror exploded into a thousand pieces, the edges of the frame impacting with the ceiling, floor, and two walls simultaneously. "I saw what I saw, and you cannot tell me it wasn't what I think it is!" She turned, adding another "Oppugno!" as she did so and stood in the hall, tears streaming down her face. She could hear Harry calling out as he started running up the stairs, and she felt another wave of anger. Three doors blew off their hinges as Hermione spun on the spot and Apparated to the entryway.
"Hermione?!" Ginny exclaimed when Hermione appeared.
"Tell your mother we are through!" she snapped as she ran from the house into the street, Ginny following closely on her heels. Hermione Apparated home, unconcerned if anyone, Muggle or not, saw her.
As soon as the squeezing sensation of Apparation ended, Hermione found herself standing in a mess. The pink boxes in her pockets had enlarged, spilling out and were falling on the floor, many of the boxes having been split open. Hundreds of truffles and chocolates were falling at her feet and coated her clothes, having burst open when she'd Disapparated, creating a huge mess. Well, I was going to get rid of them anyway. Hermione summoned the waste bin and began tossing the mess into it. After all the pink and most of the chocolate had been deposited, she removed her soiled clothes, tossing them aside to deal with later, and summoned a cleaning rag and pail to clean the floor.
Once on her hands and knees, sopping up the mess of the liquid centers, cursing Ron as she worked, she finally felt her raw energy ebb. Stupid, cheating sack of dragon dung! How dare he! How could he? I thought he loved me! Two weeks! We were to be married in two weeks, and he's banging that Megan in his bed...and he's probably shagging Lavender as well, if I read her right! She could have cleaned the floor magically, but her mum had installed the idea that nothing beat good ol' elbow grease when it came to the hardwood floors, and the scrubbing was actually calming. Besides, it didn't take long and gave her ample time to curse and defame Ron to her heart's content.
Not that she felt anywhere near content. He never fucked me like that. The only position we ever did was head-to-head, him on top! Excitement for him is when I'd top him, but he still flipped me over to top me! He stood up with her! Still shagging and toppled...the frenzy in his... Geesh! She finally wrung out the rag for the last time and sat back on her heels. I should have murdered the wanker! I should have blasted his bollocks off!
Hermione covered her face with her hands and began to cry. The smell of the potion mixed with the chocolate scent only made her cry harder. I can blame the truffles for Ron shagging Megan, but Lavender? That look on her face could only mean one thing...he's shagging her, too. Still! Hermione practically curled into a fetal position and cried harder.
After the tears seemed to slow down and her knees started to throb, she rose and went to the sink to wash her hands.
A soft knock on her door made her cringe. No, not tonight. "Go away! Leave me be!"she yelled at the door, hurried to her room, and slammed the door closed. Seeing her wedding gown hanging on the wardrobe doors only made her start crying hot, angry tears all over again. Well, if that wanker can...so can I! Hermione pulled open her doors and scanned the dresses inside. I don't want to be in a wizard's...anywhere! Not tonight. She would go out, find a nice respectful bloke, shag like she'd seen Ron shagging Megan, and probably had with Lavender, and forget him.
She pulled out a black cocktail dress she had bought on a shopping trip with her mum and threw it on the bed. After a quick shower, she dried and fixed her hair. She chose her black lace thong and uplifting demi bra, slipped on the dress, magically altering the neckline and making the modest slit on the hem much higher, then put on her black pumps. Checking that her appearance was good enough, she selected her favorite perfume...the one Ron disliked, and left.
She Apparated near a pub she remembered going to with her father near Manchester University. The dark wood and warm atmosphere was familiar enough for her to feel comfortable, and Hermione walked casually inside, choosing a seat at the center of the bar. Ordering a Wall-Banger, she scanned the patrons slyly, contemplating her choices.
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Severus had no idea why he felt compelled to go play darts. It wasn't that he was bad at darts, being a wizard his aim was quite true, but he usually didn't feel like being out around Muggles unless it was the middle of the week when the pubs were less crowded. However, on a Thursday the likelihood the pubs would be crowded was fairly high. Nevertheless, he'd felt drawn to go. At least he didn't need the Polyjuice Potion if he were slipping into the Muggle world. The simple Glamour and Unrecognizable Charms he'd cast would suffice.
He'd dressed in a casual shirt, black of course, and black wool trousers, then had Apparated just down the street from a pub he'd been in a few times in Manchester. With the right Avoidance, light Repelling Charms, and his Glamour in place, Severus had slipped into the pub, relatively unnoticed.
To his surprise, he saw Hermione Granger sitting on a barstool, sipping a peach-colored drink through a straw and slyly watching a few Muggles play pool. She was not dressed as he might have expected. The short dress, which had a scooping neckline front and back, fit her curves seductively, if not a bit too snuggly, and the slit in the hem showed off her strong, shapely legs. It was also apparent that she hadn't bothered with stockings, but her skin looked silky-smooth regardless. A momentary thought crossed his mind that she might not have bothered with knickers either. She was obviously alone; one tiny purse lay on the bar in front of her. Interesting. It wasn't difficult to slip into her mind and see what had brought her here. The scene with Mr. Weasley and Miss Jones flashed quickly before she shoved the memory away, forcing her thoughts on watching the young men in the pub as she sized each one up as a potential sex partner. So far, she hadn't seen him.
Severus took a seat in the pub where he could watch her but not be easily seen from her position at the bar. A waitress in a thin white shirt and black miniskirt came up to him to take his order, and he requested his usual single malt scotch. It was easy enough from his advantage point to magically dissuade any male who approached Hermione to simply buy a drink and return to his previous activity.
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Her second drink and, although she knew that she was attracting attention, none of the men in the place had approached her. A few had walked up to the bar next to her chair, said hello, then ordered drinks and walked away. There were several guys looking her way, some even seemed curious or interested, but no one approached to meet her.
It was disconcerting.
By the time she finished her third drink, Hermione knew the quest for great animalistic sex was fruitless. Heck, at this point she'd accept any kind of sex, as long as she got to have an orgasm. She ordered her fourth drink, ignoring the raised eyebrow of the man beside her and the sympathetic smirk of the bartender.
As she sipped on her fifth drink, she realized she was snockered. She sighed and tried to rise off her stool, only to lose her balance and stumble, finding herself assisted to her feet by strong masculine hands. She looked up at him and was surprised to see a man who very closely resembled Severus Snape. I must really be drunk if I'm seeing him...think he is him. But the resemblance is really uncanny. "Take me home," she said softly as his arm went around her waist to support her.
His look of shock on his face was quickly suppressed into a small smile. He nodded, handed her her purse and guided her from the pub.
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"Kiss me," she purred when he'd pulled her into the alley with him so they could Apparate.
He should have said she was too inebriated. He should have simply taken her home, but he wasn't certain he could get into her home, and he wasn't about to take her to his. There were a thousand of should haves that went through his mind as his lips touched hers. Hermione kissed him back, sensually responding to him, making all coherent thought vanish from his mind.
Her arms gripped him so tightly as she pressed her body against his, forming a perfect fit to his lean frame. He crushed her against the wall of the alley and savored her soft lips. Her hands slid over him, and he did the same, feeling her breasts though the fabric, hoping that the bra she wore was lace. Her hand slid around his back, slowly working its way down as it explored, as her other hand slid into his hair, crushing his lips against hers, and she opened her mouth to allow him access. He was lost in her.
She ground her body into him, her groin rubbing on his stiff penis, and he shoved back, the friction between them nearly enough to drive him wild. He had to have her. He knew already what she wanted: sex. Wild, animalistic sex in various positions. She wants to have an orgasm. Merlin's balls, I can give her orgasms, as many as she wants. He didn't care any longer that his great aunt's house, which she had recently left to him upon her death, still looked like a matronly collect-o-holic lived in the premises and grossly reminded him of Umbridge's office. He was not taking Hermione to his father's house. Not for my first...no, second time with her. But I'm going to have sex with her against the wall of the alley either. He wanted to undress her, to see her body under him, and feel her skin.
"Will you come home with me?" he said slowly, forcing his voice to remain even.
"Yes, anywhere," she groaned in his ear, her hand sliding down to grab his bum. "Anything you want. Just please, I need you."
"Oh, Merlin, girl, you'll undo me," he said and Apparated her to his home.
As soon as they arrived, he lifted her up and carried her upstairs to the master bedroom. He knew the way, so lights were unnecessary, but Hermione had snuggled against him, her mouth teasing the side of his neck just under his ear, making him stumble and bang into the wall twice. He set her on her feet and lit a glow globe so that the soft light illuminated only her, diffusing the sickening decorations of the room.
He took his time undressing her, even though her hands were eagerly tearing at his clothes. He allowed her to kiss him as they undressed, until he had to kneel to remove the tiny bit of lace she was wearing as knickers. He could smell her excitement, and he knew that no matter how much she pleaded, he was going to savor her, take as much time as she'd allow him, and enjoy every minute. He gazed at her body, gently caressing her, amazed at how truly lovely she was. He picked her up again and laid her gently on the large canopy bed, continuously exploring her body. Her round breast fit perfectly in his hand. Her stomach had just a slight roundness and her skin felt as silky as a baby's with a satiny softness that was all feminine. Her pubic hair was natural, but not bushy, and her legs were smooth. Hermione moaned under his touch, and he smiled at her reaction. As his fingers stroked her folds, she undulated, trying to make him press harder, to make his finger enter her, so he complied. He leaned down to kiss her breast, suckling her nipple.
He felt her shudder, her moans growing louder, and he watched the expression on her face with a sense of awe. One. He lowered his body, trailing his mouth on her, still manipulating her, and watched as she started to reach climax again. He suckled her nipple as the tremors started and she made soft mewing noises, rolling her head from side to side. Two. Her hands reached up to touch him, and he moved lower, trailing a path of soft nips and tiny licks as he worked his way to her wet core. He tasted her, cleaning her up with his tongue and savoring her taste as his finger worked inside her. When his tongue touched her clitoris, she nearly lifted her hips off the bed, grinding her groin to his face. He took his time, teasing and sucking on her swollen flesh, keeping her straining for her release, and not letting her peak until he was through enjoying her.
Suddenly, she cried out in ecstasy, bucking wildly, and he had to pin her down, as he finished off her third orgasm.
Feeling smug, he rose, kneeling between her splayed legs, watching her face as he pulled her hips to meet his, and slid into her heat. She was divine, hot, wet, tight, still throbbing slightly and clenching down on him as he entered her. He leaned forward and began to move, keeping his movements as long and slow as he could. He caressed her with his hands and watched her face. Her warm amber-brown eyes stared back, watching him as she tried to stroke him in return. He smiled. She was trying to be as giving a partner as she could, and it amused him. She was inexperienced, although not a virgin, but still so naïve. He leaned down even more and flicked her nipple with his tongue, his thrusts grinding against her, stimulating her clitoris with each inward plunge.
As she began to gasp, moaning again as her body reacted, he wrapped his arms around her and pulled her up onto his lap. With the aid of magic, he rolled back, keeping himself inside her as he cradled her on his lap, his knees still bent under her, allowing her to slide on his legs as she topped him. Her hands roamed over him now, tracing his pecks and abdomen, fingering his chest hairs as she rode him. He leaned up as much as he could to kiss her and pulled her with him as he lay back down on the bed. She seemed to love this, topping him, and controlling their coupling. He only had to guide her hips, direct the tempo, and press up into her each time she lowered herself on him. He watched as she neared orgasm again and reached down to touch her, to help her over the edge. She came, gasping and crying, collapsing on top of him, and he felt his own body tense. He rolled her over, thrusting into her as his own climax peaked, shuddering against her as wave after wave rolled through him, and he felt himself empty into her in hot spurts.
As his orgasm ebbed, he braced himself over her, watching her face with a sense of smug satisfaction and accomplishment. He'd given her the multiple orgasms and positions she'd desired, and she actually looked sated. He collapsed, lying on top of her body, slightly shaky and sweaty, before rolling off to stretch out by her side, pulling her to lie against his chest, cradled in his arms. Her curly hair tickled his face, but it smelled like her, like a meadow in the warm sunshine. I wish I could stay like this forever with her. Waking her up each morning with a kiss to initiate sex every day. Being able to come to bed with her every night. But he doubted she would want the same. Still, if Weasley is cheating on her, possibly... He kissed her head and realized she'd fallen asleep. Within minutes he was asleep as well, holding her tenderly.
Severus woke up the next morning with an arm across his chest and a leg tangled in the sheets with his. He smiled and blew the strand of curly hair away from his face. Levitating her slightly, he maneuvered out from under Hermione so he could lie on his side and watch her sleep. He squinted when the light from the window grew brighter, and he remembered how much she'd had to drink the night before. He rose reluctantly to go brew her a Hangover Potion.
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Hermione woke up with the bright light of the sun streaming in through the window. Her mouth was dry, her head pounded, and she felt sick. She tried to sit up and suddenly realized she was not in her own bed. The pink sheets and cabbage rose print quilt matched perfectly the pink and cabbage rose print bed hangings, all the drapes, the tablecloths on the bedside tables, and even the chair in the room. Lace doilies graced every flat surface except the bed. China plates of frolicking kittens hung on the walls suspended by silk ribbons. Even the carpet on the floor was pink with a rose trellis design. It was as if she'd woken up in Dolores Umbridge's bedroom.
Hermione began to panic, trying to remember whom she'd met last night as the events from the previous evening came crashing down on her. She thought that she'd been with Severus Snape's doppelganger, not someone related, obviously, to Umbridge. Hermione groaned as she scrambled from the bed, slipped into her dress and shoes, scrounging around for her knickers, and all while her head throbbed horribly. Giving up, she ran from the house, totally convinced Dolores Umbridge lived there, and Apparated home. Given her state of mind and her hangover, Hermione was quite pleased to make it home unsplinched.
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Author's Notes:
I decided to introduce another Prince family member, posthumously of course, and will explain this better later.
Now for the prompt countdown:
Prompt #1. Hermione and Ron are married.(Nope, only engaged.) What would she do if she came home unexpectedly and found him in bed with another woman? I think I did a fairly good job answering that one.
Prompt #100. There are people who believe that Ron and Lavender did the nasty during sixth year. What if Lavender got pregnant during their canoodling and after the Final Battle Lavender informs him that he's the father of her child Okay, bet you never saw that coming. Well, Hermione didn't! Nevertheless, I planted the suspicion anyway!
The other prompts I'm working through or haven't finished yet are:
#63Hermione likes to experiment with potions and has offered to help George when he reopens his new shop. However, so does Ron, and they are having problem in their relationship. A mishap in the workroom produces disastrous results of the Wonder Witch Love Potion, effecting George, Ron, Hermione and Ginny. What truths are discovered, who falls for whom, and why is Hermione pinning away for Snape if he is dead? (No incest and must still fit in plausibly with DH)
#70. Fred & (Not Fred, sorry, he's dead.) George Weasley's newest invention (screwed up by Ron) has interesting/horrific/comedic side effects. What happens? If you haven't guessed by now, I'll be making it clearer later on. Who is affected? Neville/Hannah Abbott, Ron/Megan Jones, George/Susan Bones, Lee/Angelina, Ginny/Harry and Hermione/Severus duh!
#35. Firenze has thrown his lot in with the wizards and witches, becoming an outcast. What does he feel? How does he cope? Does he have any new friends?
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Latest 25 Reviews for Wonder Witch Love Potion 69
166 Reviews | 5.88/10 Average
What a fun story!! You followed your prompts so well! I love your writing style!! Thanks for sharing!
Response from beaweasley2 (Author of Wonder Witch Love Potion 69)
Thank you very much. I was a fun challenge, I'm glad you enjoyed the story. Thank you for reading and for the review.
Cute story, but I'd have loved if you had continued it on more. More with the Ron love triangle, more with the werewolf clinic, more of everything really. But i loved what you shared, so thank you!
Response from beaweasley2 (Author of Wonder Witch Love Potion 69)
LOl, more on the triangle bits - that would take it's own story to fully explore. I do have a werewolf clinic story started on my computer, but it's on hold for now. However, I'm utterly delighted that you enjoyed this story, as short as it is. Thank you for reading and for the review.
Way to go Severus. It's nice that he could learn something about how to deal with women. And nice manuevering to get Lucius to pony up the funds. :) I wonder if Hermione will ever find out what he has done?
Response from beaweasley2 (Author of Wonder Witch Love Potion 69)
Yes, I wanted a 'war over' 'drop the pretenses' Severus. It's nice to see he's capable of being nice. It was fun to type the Severus Lucius conversation. I'm glad you liked it. Thank you for the review.
Response from beaweasley2 (Author of Wonder Witch Love Potion 69)
Yes, I wanted a 'war over' 'drop the pretenses' Severus. It's nice to see he's capable of being nice. It was fun to type the Severus Lucius conversation. I'm glad you liked it. Thank you for the review.
Nice to see that over with. Interesting how Ron has managed to get himself in the most hot water of anyone. LOL I don't feel the least big sorry for him though. :D
Response from beaweasley2 (Author of Wonder Witch Love Potion 69)
LOL Yep, only Ron is sunk in much! BUt he did bring it on himslef. Thank you for the review.
Response from beaweasley2 (Author of Wonder Witch Love Potion 69)
LOL Yep, only Ron is sunk in much! BUt he did bring it on himslef. Thank you for the review.
Poor Hermione. Well, now that she's speaking to Severus, perhaps they can pool their knowledge to figure out what she's done. Though that may change things between them to realize that it was a potion causing them to see the truth. And I love him laughing at the end when she compared the house to Umbridge's
Response from beaweasley2 (Author of Wonder Witch Love Potion 69)
Yes, between them they should figure out what happened. How they react - well, you'll see. That's part of the fun. Somehow, I think having their bedroom compared to Umbridge's badroom would make anyone laugh. Thank you for the review.
Response from beaweasley2 (Author of Wonder Witch Love Potion 69)
Yes, between them they should figure out what happened. How they react - well, you'll see. That's part of the fun. Somehow, I think having their bedroom compared to Umbridge's badroom would make anyone laugh. Thank you for the review.
Thank you very much for a nice satisfying story. I really enjoyed how everything unfolded and it was nice to see Severus taking credit for what he did for Hermione and that she accepted it graciously.
Response from beaweasley2 (Author of Wonder Witch Love Potion 69)
Thank you. What a lovely compliment. I'm gld you enjoyed it. I wanted a happy 'eveyone wins' story. (Okay, Ron didn't but he wasn't destined to) Thank you for the sweet reviews.
Response from beaweasley2 (Author of Wonder Witch Love Potion 69)
Thank you. What a lovely compliment. I'm gld you enjoyed it. I wanted a happy 'eveyone wins' story. (Okay, Ron didn't but he wasn't destined to) Thank you for the sweet reviews.
Too bad that Hermione didn't stick around, but because of the potion, I'm sure she will meet up with her mysterious lover again. :D
Response from beaweasley2 (Author of Wonder Witch Love Potion 69)
Actually, I think she was afraid that Dolores Umbridge would walk in the door - regardless of how great her nephew/son/brother - whoever that guy was *snicker* was in bed. But yes, the potions will draw them together again. Thank you for the review.
Response from beaweasley2 (Author of Wonder Witch Love Potion 69)
Actually, I think she was afraid that Dolores Umbridge would walk in the door - regardless of how great her nephew/son/brother - whoever that guy was *snicker* was in bed. But yes, the potions will draw them together again. Thank you for the review.
Poor Hermione. She really shouldn't have brewed potions she didn't know what they did. And putting them anywhere near Ron... Well, I'm not entirely surprised that he messed that one up. Great job in working so many of the prompts into a compelling story.
Response from beaweasley2 (Author of Wonder Witch Love Potion 69)
Hermione brewed them for a reason, and it was Ginny who boxed them all up and placed them in the room with Ron. So, it's not really Hermione's fault at all. Of course Ron woudl mess it up! He's Ron. Thank you for the review.
Response from beaweasley2 (Author of Wonder Witch Love Potion 69)
Hermione brewed them for a reason, and it was Ginny who boxed them all up and placed them in the room with Ron. So, it's not really Hermione's fault at all. Of course Ron woudl mess it up! He's Ron. Thank you for the review.
I really like how this started. Poor Hermione brewing potions she doens't know what they are for. LOL And I really do look forward to seeing how you pull all those prompts together. :) There is a lot of potential there.
Response from beaweasley2 (Author of Wonder Witch Love Potion 69)
Thanks. Hermione was brewing them not to use, but to prove a point - that they could be brewed. what they did was irrelevant. I hope you like how I pull all of the prompts together, it was really fun to do so. Thanks for the review.
Response from beaweasley2 (Author of Wonder Witch Love Potion 69)
Thanks. Hermione was brewing them not to use, but to prove a point - that they could be brewed. what they did was irrelevant. I hope you like how I pull all of the prompts together, it was really fun to do so. Thanks for the review.
I loved it!! You deserve hugs, chocolate, and a new kitten too... or perhaps a Severus of your very own, for writing such a great story. :) -
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Response from beaweasley2 (Author of Wonder Witch Love Potion 69)
Thank you very much. I'm realy delighted that you liked it. Thank you for the kind reviews and pretty flowers.
Response from luvsev (Reviewer)
You are welcome. The way I see it, you deserve many kudos for writing such a wonderful story. I have read many good ones in my time, but this has to rank among the best. I am excited to find out who you are so I can read more of your work.
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Response from beaweasley2 (Author of Wonder Witch Love Potion 69)
Response from beaweasley2 (Author of Wonder Witch Love Potion 69)
Thank you very much. I'm realy delighted that you liked it. Thank you for the kind reviews and pretty flowers.
Response from luvsev (Reviewer)
You are welcome. The way I see it, you deserve many kudos for writing such a wonderful story. I have read many good ones in my time, but this has to rank among the best. I am excited to find out who you are so I can read more of your work.
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Response from beaweasley2 (Author of Wonder Witch Love Potion 69)
That was nice of Severus to ask Lucius for the funds for Hermione's project. A damn good chapter as always! -
Response from beaweasley2 (Author of Wonder Witch Love Potion 69)
Response from beaweasley2 (Author of Wonder Witch Love Potion 69)
Wll he didn't have enough of his own funds to buy it... so he went to someone who did. Thank you for the compliment. I appreciate it.
Response from beaweasley2 (Author of Wonder Witch Love Potion 69)
Response from beaweasley2 (Author of Wonder Witch Love Potion 69)
Wll he didn't have enough of his own funds to buy it... so he went to someone who did. Thank you for the compliment. I appreciate it.
I know that I have said it before, but Ron is such a git. And how sweet is Sev! I love how he is with Hermione in this chapter. Good job!!!
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Response from beaweasley2 (Author of Wonder Witch Love Potion 69)
Response from beaweasley2 (Author of Wonder Witch Love Potion 69)
LOL Well, yes in this story I think I typed out the very worst in him. I"m glad Severus is too sappy for you. I wanted to bring out his 'caring' side and yet still have some canon Snape in him. I was afraid I'd failed. Thanks for the review and my flower. I love those!
Response from beaweasley2 (Author of Wonder Witch Love Potion 69)
Response from beaweasley2 (Author of Wonder Witch Love Potion 69)
LOL Well, yes in this story I think I typed out the very worst in him. I"m glad Severus is too sappy for you. I wanted to bring out his 'caring' side and yet still have some canon Snape in him. I was afraid I'd failed. Thanks for the review and my flower. I love those!
I am glad that Ron and Hermione broke up; she belongs with Sev. Lovely chapter as always! :) -
Response from beaweasley2 (Author of Wonder Witch Love Potion 69)
Response from beaweasley2 (Author of Wonder Witch Love Potion 69)
Oh, Like I was going to leave them together - you should know me better than that... oh wait. Ok. After the reveal, you'll know who I am and then you'll know I'd never do that to you!Thanks for the flower!
Response from beaweasley2 (Author of Wonder Witch Love Potion 69)
Response from beaweasley2 (Author of Wonder Witch Love Potion 69)
Oh, Like I was going to leave them together - you should know me better than that... oh wait. Ok. After the reveal, you'll know who I am and then you'll know I'd never do that to you!Thanks for the flower!
It sucks that Ron cheated on Hermione, but I honestly did not put it past him. He can be such a git sometimes.
Response from beaweasley2 (Author of Wonder Witch Love Potion 69)
Inall fairness, ti was a love potion... of course I have no excuse for his affair with Lavender. BUt yes, git he is and git is how I see him to.
Response from beaweasley2 (Author of Wonder Witch Love Potion 69)
Inall fairness, ti was a love potion... of course I have no excuse for his affair with Lavender. BUt yes, git he is and git is how I see him to.
I loved the incident of Ron mixing the potions that Hermione did not intend for him to use--it spells disaster already, and I am looking forward to the outcome.
Response from beaweasley2 (Author of Wonder Witch Love Potion 69)
Oh it doesn't bode well at all! Of, course he assumed, didn't he? and got it all mixed up! Thank you for the review.
Response from beaweasley2 (Author of Wonder Witch Love Potion 69)
Oh it doesn't bode well at all! Of, course he assumed, didn't he? and got it all mixed up! Thank you for the review.
Good story so far; am looking forward to seeing the outcome of what is a brilliant story.
Response from beaweasley2 (Author of Wonder Witch Love Potion 69)
Wow, thanks. I really hope you like the rest of it.
Response from beaweasley2 (Author of Wonder Witch Love Potion 69)
Wow, thanks. I really hope you like the rest of it.
Lovely hot chapter! I just adore how you wrote Severus.
Response from beaweasley2 (Author of Wonder Witch Love Potion 69)
Thank you very much. I'm glad you enjoyed this one. Hope you like the rest. Thanks for the review.
Response from beaweasley2 (Author of Wonder Witch Love Potion 69)
Thank you very much. I'm glad you enjoyed this one. Hope you like the rest. Thanks for the review.
I really enjoyed the story! It's obvious you spent a lot of time working out the details and carefully crafting it. I think I would suggest that next time you don't list the exact prompts you use until the last chapter. It was a a bit of a spoiler to read the author's note.
Response from beaweasley2 (Author of Wonder Witch Love Potion 69)
Thanks. I'm glad you liked it. I t was fun to weave all of this together. I thought that all the stories had the Prompts in the first chapter? So I just added my comments as I went along. Mostly the comments fit the chapter. I'm sorry if anything was spoiled for you.
Response from beaweasley2 (Author of Wonder Witch Love Potion 69)
Thanks. I'm glad you liked it. I t was fun to weave all of this together. I thought that all the stories had the Prompts in the first chapter? So I just added my comments as I went along. Mostly the comments fit the chapter. I'm sorry if anything was spoiled for you.
Oh, see, this is how Slytherins really work. It isn't about being publicly acknowledged for actions... it's about being acknowledged by the right people. The Malfoys can have whatever reason they want to donate this, but when Hermione finds out, she will realize Severus also had something to do with it. Nicely done!
Response from beaweasley2 (Author of Wonder Witch Love Potion 69)
I just thought it would be how Lucius would handle it. Teehehe Yep. but then he might want her to know.Thanks for the review.
Response from beaweasley2 (Author of Wonder Witch Love Potion 69)
I just thought it would be how Lucius would handle it. Teehehe Yep. but then he might want her to know.Thanks for the review.
I am so glad that at least one couple, Angeline & Lee, were naturally connected. Everyone seems to be taking it well, though I would think Ron would be more upset. After all, he cheated with Lavender years ago, and Megan only happened because of the potions. It wasn't like he was going out there looking every weekend to cheat.
Response from beaweasley2 (Author of Wonder Witch Love Potion 69)
No, not everyone was matched because of the potion. Ron is still reeling from the mess he's dug himself into. Guilt. BUt he's not protraid very well in this one, a bit of a randy lad and all. Thanks for the review.
Response from beaweasley2 (Author of Wonder Witch Love Potion 69)
No, not everyone was matched because of the potion. Ron is still reeling from the mess he's dug himself into. Guilt. BUt he's not protraid very well in this one, a bit of a randy lad and all. Thanks for the review.
*sniggers*I love that the room looks liek Dolores Umbridge's home. It adds teh perfect amount of humor and balances the darker issues in the chapter, mainly the experimental potion and Ron's cheating.
Response from beaweasley2 (Author of Wonder Witch Love Potion 69)
Ever get one of those catalogues for linnens? It's what I used - described the room from that! And having it look like It was Unbridge's, lol, just to have Hermione have the "oh, my gods, what did I do' morning have a even more hysterical aspect. I'm glad it balanced the darker aspects of the stroy for you. Thank you vey mcu for the reviews. I apperciate them.
Response from beaweasley2 (Author of Wonder Witch Love Potion 69)
Ever get one of those catalogues for linnens? It's what I used - described the room from that! And having it look like It was Unbridge's, lol, just to have Hermione have the "oh, my gods, what did I do' morning have a even more hysterical aspect. I'm glad it balanced the darker aspects of the stroy for you. Thank you vey mcu for the reviews. I apperciate them.
Smooth, Hermione. I'm sure Severus will think wonderful things when he goes back up to an empty room. And Lavender is such a whore! Gah... I dislike her.
Response from beaweasley2 (Author of Wonder Witch Love Potion 69)
Well, considering the surroundings, she might have over reacted! But the room is hideous! Poor, Lavender... Won, Won isn't being nice.
Response from beaweasley2 (Author of Wonder Witch Love Potion 69)
Well, considering the surroundings, she might have over reacted! But the room is hideous! Poor, Lavender... Won, Won isn't being nice.
Oh, this is a fabulous start. A bit too heavy on ingredients and processes for me, but it is obvious you spent a lot of time on it. The quality is amazing!
Response from beaweasley2 (Author of Wonder Witch Love Potion 69)
Thank you. I know I made quite a list, but they're all for specific things. I'm glad you liked the chapter anyway. Thank you for the review.
Response from beaweasley2 (Author of Wonder Witch Love Potion 69)
Thank you. I know I made quite a list, but they're all for specific things. I'm glad you liked the chapter anyway. Thank you for the review.
Oh no... Ron and Megan left together? This is where prompt #1 takes effect, isn't it?Great chapter... I love how much of an idiot Ron is. :)
Response from beaweasley2 (Author of Wonder Witch Love Potion 69)
Yes, he left with Megan. and yes... it is. I don't really paint Ron in the best light in this story. I hope you like what comes...Thank you for the review.
Response from beaweasley2 (Author of Wonder Witch Love Potion 69)
Yes, he left with Megan. and yes... it is. I don't really paint Ron in the best light in this story. I hope you like what comes...Thank you for the review.
I like the story; it's intriguing. However, there are a few grammatical & syntactical errors. Perhaps most noteworthy is "conflictions of policy" in paragraph 5. Would "policy conflicts" or at least "conflicts of policy" not be better? Confliction isn't a real word, despite it occasionally creeping erroneously into techno-speak. [Admittedly, there is an archaic 15th c. usage of confliction, but it is inappropriate here.]
But nitpicking aside, I am anxious to finish the story. Chapter 1 is off to a good start.
Response from beaweasley2 (Author of Wonder Witch Love Potion 69)
Hummm. Thank you, I think.
Response from snapekat51 (Reviewer)
Well, yes, I really do like the story. Sorry if you don't like my pointing out the "confliction" issue. I simply love language, and its correct usage. I'm a dying breed, I guess, or so I've been told.
Response from beaweasley2 (Author of Wonder Witch Love Potion 69)
No it's just I have a great beta and well, I thought you didn't like the chapter... that's all.
Response from snapekat51 (Reviewer)
I understand. Even though the first and last sentences of my review were complimentary, it's human nature to see only the negative. By the way, of the thousands of stories I have read, on ALL the archives, I have NEVER found one that was error-free! In my own non-fanfic writing, I sometimes make mistakes. If I don't catch them all, imagine how unforgiving I am of myself!
Response from beaweasley2 (Author of Wonder Witch Love Potion 69)
Hummm. Thank you, I think.
Response from snapekat51 (Reviewer)
Well, yes, I really do like the story. Sorry if you don't like my pointing out the "confliction" issue. I simply love language, and its correct usage. I'm a dying breed, I guess, or so I've been told.
Response from beaweasley2 (Author of Wonder Witch Love Potion 69)
No it's just I have a great beta and well, I thought you didn't like the chapter... that's all.
Response from snapekat51 (Reviewer)
I understand. Even though the first and last sentences of my review were complimentary, it's human nature to see only the negative. By the way, of the thousands of stories I have read, on ALL the archives, I have NEVER found one that was error-free! In my own non-fanfic writing, I sometimes make mistakes. If I don't catch them all, imagine how unforgiving I am of myself!