The Petulant Poetess
  • Stories
  • Browse By
    • Category
    • Character
    • Genre
    • Author
  • Info
      Useful Info
    • General Information
    • Message Board
    • Membership & Story Ratings
    • Submission Rules
    • Important Links
    • Support The Petulant Poetess
    • Writers' Resources
    • Punctuation Guide
    • Writing Fan Fiction
    • Harry Potter Resources
    • Dictionaries
    • Beta Resources
  • Create an Account
    • Create an Account
    • Sign In
Potions Under Duress Melancholy Whore
Chapters Menu
Download PDF Version

New Chapter for Melancholy Whore

Melancholy Whore

1: Prologue

2: Chapter One

3: Chapter One, Part II

4: Chapter Two

5: Chapter Three

6: Chapter Four

7: Chapter Five

8: Chapter Six

9: Chapter Seven

10: Chapter Eight

11: Chapter Nine

12: Chapter Ten

13: Chapter Eleven

14: Chapter Twelve

15: Chapter Thirteen

16: Chapter Fourteen

17: Chapter Fifteen

18: Chapter Sixteen

19: Chapter Seventeen

20: Chapter Eighteen

21: Chapter Nineteen

22: Chapter Twenty

23: Chapter Twenty-One

24: Chapter Twenty-Two

25: Chapter Twenty-Three

Melancholy Whore

CordyAngelSeer

250 Reviews   |   250 Ratings, 0 Likes, 131 Favorites )

Drama Angst Romance Smut Alternate Universe Horror Psychological Potions Under Duress 44,627 Words 25 Chapters WIP
Hermione Granger Severus Snape Alastor (Mad-Eye) Moody Ginevra Weasley Harry Potter Ronald Weasley Albus Dumbledore Antonin Dolohov Bellatrix Lestrange Fenrir Greyback Lucius Malfoy Nagini Original Character Tom Riddle (Voldemort) Yaxley (Death Eater) James Potter Lily (Evans) Potter Minerva McGonagall Peter Pettigrew Remus Lupin Sirius Black Colin Creevey Dolores Jane Umbridge Neville Longbottom Filius Flitwick Pomona Sprout Poppy Pomfrey Justin Finch-Fletchley Rubeus Hagrid Walden Macnair Avery (Death Eater)

She was light branded by darkness. She was innocence. She was his melancholy whore.

Start Reading

Chapters (25)

Chapter 1: Prologue

Chapter 2: Chapter One

Chapter 3: Chapter One, Part II

Chapter 4: Chapter Two

Chapter 5: Chapter Three

Chapter 6: Chapter Four

Chapter 7: Chapter Five

Chapter 8: Chapter Six

Chapter 9: Chapter Seven

Chapter 10: Chapter Eight

Chapter 11: Chapter Nine

Chapter 12: Chapter Ten

Chapter 13: Chapter Eleven

Chapter 14: Chapter Twelve

Chapter 15: Chapter Thirteen

Chapter 16: Chapter Fourteen

Chapter 17: Chapter Fifteen

Chapter 18: Chapter Sixteen

Chapter 19: Chapter Seventeen

Chapter 20: Chapter Eighteen

Chapter 21: Chapter Nineteen

Chapter 22: Chapter Twenty

Chapter 23: Chapter Twenty-One

Chapter 24: Chapter Twenty-Two

Chapter 25: Chapter Twenty-Three


About CordyAngelSeer

Validated
Author

CordyAngelSeer

Member Since 2006  |  1 Story  |  Favorited by 21  |  86 Reviews Written  |  402 Review Responses

As of 1/16/2016

To all my devoted readers and reviewers just wanted to let you know that I haven't forgotten about my little tale that has been neglected over the past few years.  As stated in my previous update, real life got in the way, but I feel ready to write again.  

Reviews for Melancholy Whore

Displaying Review 151 - 175 of 250 in total
← Previous 1 2 3 4 5 6 7 8 9 10 Next →
10/10

snitchette

I knew he couldn't just said he loved her. And I like the way how he said goodbye to his first love: burning her thingd just like she burnt him (without knowing) for so many years. It's just brilliant.

Response from CordyAngelSeer (Author of Melancholy Whore)

Thank you so much for your review

Response from CordyAngelSeer (Author of Melancholy Whore)

, I apologize for the lateness of my response, real life has been hectic, but on the plus side I'm working on chapter 10 and hope to have it off my beta by this weekend.

Response from CordyAngelSeer (Author of Melancholy Whore)

Thank you so much for your review

Response from CordyAngelSeer (Author of Melancholy Whore)

, I apologize for the lateness of my response, real life has been hectic, but on the plus side I'm working on chapter 10 and hope to have it off my beta by this weekend.

0/10

Isode

When is he going to learn that obliviating her memories is not going to erase the love in her heart.  She will always come for him and her oblivation makes the situation even more dangerous for her because she will act on her heart and not out of logic. Thanks for a wonderful afternoon cry.

Response from CordyAngelSeer (Author of Melancholy Whore)

Hey

Response from CordyAngelSeer (Author of Melancholy Whore)

, Severus is a stubborn and confused man who has a long road ahead of him.  Severus is about to find out the hard wsy that magic isn't always the solution.  I'm in the process of writing chapter 10 so stay tuned.  Thanks for your review.

Response from CordyAngelSeer (Author of Melancholy Whore)

Hey

Response from CordyAngelSeer (Author of Melancholy Whore)

, Severus is a stubborn and confused man who has a long road ahead of him.  Severus is about to find out the hard wsy that magic isn't always the solution.  I'm in the process of writing chapter 10 so stay tuned.  Thanks for your review.

10/10

Muggline

You do realize that you are keeping us on tenterhooks, don't you? I hope that this downward spiral will end eventually...

Response from CordyAngelSeer (Author of Melancholy Whore)

I promise there will be some happy shining through this cloud of sadness.  Chapter Ten is being organized as we speak.  Thank you for your review/rating.

Response from CordyAngelSeer (Author of Melancholy Whore)

I promise there will be some happy shining through this cloud of sadness.  Chapter Ten is being organized as we speak.  Thank you for your review/rating.

0/10

Terab

Another great chapter!  My heart just breaks for both of them.  Can't wait to find out what happens to Umbridge.

Response from CordyAngelSeer (Author of Melancholy Whore)

Thank you

Response from CordyAngelSeer (Author of Melancholy Whore)

for your review, please stay tuned for chapter ten.

Response from CordyAngelSeer (Author of Melancholy Whore)

Thank you

Response from CordyAngelSeer (Author of Melancholy Whore)

for your review, please stay tuned for chapter ten.

10/10

mummy

Beautifully written, so full of emotion. Thank you

Response from CordyAngelSeer (Author of Melancholy Whore)

Thank you so much for your review and rating, Mummy, stayed tuned for chapter ten. 

Response from CordyAngelSeer (Author of Melancholy Whore)

Thank you so much for your review and rating, Mummy, stayed tuned for chapter ten. 

10/10

mia madwyn

You're breaking my heart.

Response from CordyAngelSeer (Author of Melancholy Whore)

Aww, I'm sorry Mia, I promise that there will be some happy to get over the sadness.   Thank you for your rating and review.

Response from CordyAngelSeer (Author of Melancholy Whore)

Aww, I'm sorry Mia, I promise that there will be some happy to get over the sadness.   Thank you for your rating and review.

0/10

soccermom

Very interesting.  Severus obviously has a lot of his own issues to work out.  Looking forward to seeing what happens with Umbridge. Thanks for the great story.

Response from CordyAngelSeer (Author of Melancholy Whore)

Thank you so much for your review

Response from CordyAngelSeer (Author of Melancholy Whore)

, Severus is going to have to work through his issues, and learn to trust Hermione and in himself; which is not going to be easy with Umbridge in the picture. 

Response from CordyAngelSeer (Author of Melancholy Whore)

Thank you so much for your review

Response from CordyAngelSeer (Author of Melancholy Whore)

, Severus is going to have to work through his issues, and learn to trust Hermione and in himself; which is not going to be easy with Umbridge in the picture. 

10/10

braye27

It is both sweet and heartbreaking that Severus must keep his fond memories of Hermione in his Pensieve.  He must do all he can to protect her.I thought it was especially telling that he destroyed his keepsakes of Lily, but it was necessary.  He is in love with Hermione, and it would seem disingenuous to our honorable Severus to have done otherwise.His life is such a mass of contradictory feelings.  He loves Hermione, he even told her so, then he had to obliviate her so that she wouldn't recall his words or his tears as he knelt before her—her protection his first concern.... Umbridge is coming.What will become of the Potions Master and the Lioness of Gryffindor?  Surely there is solace to be found for them somewhere.I like this story of yours very much and can't wait to read the next update.  Well done!!!Beth

Response from CordyAngelSeer (Author of Melancholy Whore)

Beth, thank you so much for your words, I haven't started chapter 10 yet, but I will say the Umbridge is in it and that Severus will learn that his actions have consquences.  Again, thank you so much for your review.

Response from CordyAngelSeer (Author of Melancholy Whore)

Beth, thank you so much for your words, I haven't started chapter 10 yet, but I will say the Umbridge is in it and that Severus will learn that his actions have consquences.  Again, thank you so much for your review.

8/10

livvy6

Why did he have to do that? And when are we going to get to some punishment for Umbridge, or did I miss something?Livvy

Response from CordyAngelSeer (Author of Melancholy Whore)

Hey Livvy, Severus does not deal with emotions well,  and he feels that he is protecting Hermione from himself. As to why he Obliviated her, that will be explained more in chapter 10 when Umbridge makes her apperance. I had planned to have her in chapter nine but she did fit with the chapter arc. 

Response from livvy6 (Reviewer)

Okay, so I didn't miss something. I was scouring at the other chapters thinking-did I forget? So, I'm glad I didn't b/c Umbridge getting hers has been on my "can't wait" list for the fanfics I'm reading right now :) I'm glad you'll explain more about what Snape Obliviated her-that just about broke my heart!Thanks!Livvy

Response from CordyAngelSeer (Author of Melancholy Whore)

Hey Livvy, Severus does not deal with emotions well,  and he feels that he is protecting Hermione from himself. As to why he Obliviated her, that will be explained more in chapter 10 when Umbridge makes her apperance. I had planned to have her in chapter nine but she did fit with the chapter arc. 

Response from livvy6 (Reviewer)

Okay, so I didn't miss something. I was scouring at the other chapters thinking-did I forget? So, I'm glad I didn't b/c Umbridge getting hers has been on my "can't wait" list for the fanfics I'm reading right now :) I'm glad you'll explain more about what Snape Obliviated her-that just about broke my heart!Thanks!Livvy

9/10

sinbad

I think Hermoione may have been right about Severus's being a coward he keeps Obliviating her.

Response from CordyAngelSeer (Author of Melancholy Whore)

Well he only Obliviated her once, but Severus has his own issues that he needs to work out, he feels that he is protecting hermione from himself.  Up next Umbridge will finally make an apperance, I promise. 

Response from CordyAngelSeer (Author of Melancholy Whore)

Well he only Obliviated her once, but Severus has his own issues that he needs to work out, he feels that he is protecting hermione from himself.  Up next Umbridge will finally make an apperance, I promise. 

0/10

MollysSister

I havent read Crime & Punishment since high school-thanks for the reminder on who Sonia is. I am impressed at the story about how Snape had to skip breakfast and then falsy accused of stealing. It just broke my heart. ~sniffle.

Response from CordyAngelSeer (Author of Melancholy Whore)

Thank you for your review

Response from CordyAngelSeer (Author of Melancholy Whore)

, I apologize for the lateness of my response, RL and all that got in the way.  On a side note Chapter Nine is in queue.

Response from CordyAngelSeer (Author of Melancholy Whore)

Thank you for your review

Response from CordyAngelSeer (Author of Melancholy Whore)

, I apologize for the lateness of my response, RL and all that got in the way.  On a side note Chapter Nine is in queue.

10/10

Lkmaide

He said it, he really said it.  Plain as day, and in public no less.  Please continue!

Response from CordyAngelSeer (Author of Melancholy Whore)

Thank you so much for your review/and rating, again, I apologize for my tardiness in a response to your review RL kind of got in the way.  Chapter nine is in queue so stay tuned. 

Response from CordyAngelSeer (Author of Melancholy Whore)

Thank you so much for your review/and rating, again, I apologize for my tardiness in a response to your review RL kind of got in the way.  Chapter nine is in queue so stay tuned. 

10/10

Vorona

I was raised Catholic, and still have great respect for it.  I thought it was a great touch in this story.In general, I was expecting much less from the title than what I've actually read.  This is an amazing story, and I'm looking forward to reading more.

Response from CordyAngelSeer (Author of Melancholy Whore)

Thank you so much for your review

Response from CordyAngelSeer (Author of Melancholy Whore)

, I was a bit nervous introducing religion into this story, afriad it would offend readers or its use be misinterperted/misunderstood.  But as I stated in an authors note I've always been told write what you know, so when I hit a wall creatively on how to further develop Snape's character, I introduced the conflict of what it might  be like to be a half-blood with morals and an upbringing in both worlds.  I'm just glad it translated well.  Again thank you for the R&R and stay tuned for Chapter 16.  

 

0/10

Isode

OK, I have read and reread from chpt. 1 twice, so you know I am lovin' your characters, the plot and the writing.  I like like the references to WWII and nazi Germany in the previous chapters and I have a great appreciation for Severus' darker side and his inner conflicts. However I am a little confused as to the relationship between Hermione and Severus.  Why does she go to see him two or three times a day? They seem to provoke each other to irritation. What purpose does her visits serve, and in a year and a half hasn't anyone noticed?  Not much seems to happen except he has warned her about Umbridge and seen her through an extremely painful episode.  Perhaps a little more back story as to how and why they have come together would be helpful. At the moment I don't feel invested in Hermione's plight, maybe because I haven't heard her voice enough.   I can't wait for the next update, you have my brain running on overdrive.

Response from Isode (Reviewer)

I just read the other reviews after I wrote and submitted this one.  All I have to say is "never mind."  Like I said before I very much enjoy your story and really can't wait for the updates!

Response from CordyAngelSeer (Author of Melancholy Whore)

Thank you so much for your review

Response from CordyAngelSeer (Author of Melancholy Whore)

, I apologize it has taken a while to respond to RL kept getting in the way.  On a side note, I've finished chapter nine and it is in queue.

Response from Isode (Reviewer)

I just read the other reviews after I wrote and submitted this one.  All I have to say is "never mind."  Like I said before I very much enjoy your story and really can't wait for the updates!

Response from CordyAngelSeer (Author of Melancholy Whore)

Thank you so much for your review

Response from CordyAngelSeer (Author of Melancholy Whore)

, I apologize it has taken a while to respond to RL kept getting in the way.  On a side note, I've finished chapter nine and it is in queue.

10/10

snitchette

OH MY GOD. He said IT. *happy dance*. I wasn't expecting so much so soon from him. Now you MUST make him find a cure.

Response from CordyAngelSeer (Author of Melancholy Whore)

Thanks, Snitchette, yeah, he uttered those three little words, now let's hope he doesn't screw everything up because Severus is not one who handles emotions well.  As for a cure something along those lines might be in the future, but we shall see what the ol' muse has to say.  Thank you again for your review.

Response from CordyAngelSeer (Author of Melancholy Whore)

Thanks, Snitchette, yeah, he uttered those three little words, now let's hope he doesn't screw everything up because Severus is not one who handles emotions well.  As for a cure something along those lines might be in the future, but we shall see what the ol' muse has to say.  Thank you again for your review.

10/10

Nessa

Great update. I think the curse is stopping Hermione from seeing what is truly in front of her because she still thinks she can't love. Umbridge needs die very painfull death!

Response from CordyAngelSeer (Author of Melancholy Whore)

Thank you for the R&R

Response from CordyAngelSeer (Author of Melancholy Whore)

.  Umbridge's slow and painful demise seems to be a consensus amongst my readers and reviewers.  Perhaps that wish will be fullfilled.  Chapter 16 is upnext and will touch upon ways in which the curse can be removed.   

10/10

erbpcola

Love this story.  Can't wait for another update.

Response from CordyAngelSeer (Author of Melancholy Whore)

Thank you for the R&R

Response from CordyAngelSeer (Author of Melancholy Whore)

, Chapter 16 is being written so stay tuned. 

9/10

sinbad

Interesting chapter, looks like Hermione has her hands full.

Response from CordyAngelSeer (Author of Melancholy Whore)

That she does

Response from CordyAngelSeer (Author of Melancholy Whore)

, thank you for the R&R and stay tuned for Chapter 16.

9/10

pythia_delphi

Oh! Such lovely angst. Touching without being maudlin.

Response from CordyAngelSeer (Author of Melancholy Whore)

Yeah, I didn't want his admission to be too sentimental, but admitting feelings is a hard  thing for Severus to do, let's hope he doesn't cock it up. Thank you for  your review and stay tuned for chapter 9.

Response from CordyAngelSeer (Author of Melancholy Whore)

Yeah, I didn't want his admission to be too sentimental, but admitting feelings is a hard  thing for Severus to do, let's hope he doesn't cock it up. Thank you for  your review and stay tuned for chapter 9.

10/10

sinbad

Nice chapter, I'm a bit surprised that Severus shoved Hermione but it was a good way to show just how close he was to loosing control.

Response from CordyAngelSeer (Author of Melancholy Whore)

I know I didn't want Severus to be physcially violent with Hermione,  but he needed to have her removed from the situation before he completely lost control.  And he regrets his actions, which is not to say that I condone what he did, but that is something Hermione will have to deal with.  Thank you so much for the rating and review.

Response from CordyAngelSeer (Author of Melancholy Whore)

I know I didn't want Severus to be physcially violent with Hermione,  but he needed to have her removed from the situation before he completely lost control.  And he regrets his actions, which is not to say that I condone what he did, but that is something Hermione will have to deal with.  Thank you so much for the rating and review.

10/10

braye27

This was totally awesome!  I can't tell you how moved I was at Severus' admission in the last scene:A familiar shadow fell over her. “I shouldn’t have called you a coward.” Severus set her rucksack down by the sill, the sleeve of his teaching robe brushing her denim-clad leg. “You could have struck me, and I would have accepted it gladly. I had no right to lay a hand upon you.” His normally smooth and arousing voice was gone. In its place was a fragile and mournful imitation. He was on his knees before her, his head falling forward to rest in her lap. Her heart constricted: her poor, broken man. “I love you,” he breathed.Pretenses shattered, he cried. This entire chapter was so beautifully written!1000 Points to your House.Beth

Response from CordyAngelSeer (Author of Melancholy Whore)

Thank you so much Beth, I hope it didn't seem like I was progressing their 'relationship' too quickly, up next will be the backstory of our duo and a bit of Umbridge thrown into the mix.  Once again thank you muchos for you wonderful review.

Response from CordyAngelSeer (Author of Melancholy Whore)

Thank you so much Beth, I hope it didn't seem like I was progressing their 'relationship' too quickly, up next will be the backstory of our duo and a bit of Umbridge thrown into the mix.  Once again thank you muchos for you wonderful review.

10/10

Maddie

The poor guy is doing his best to walk that fine line and take care of Hermione's curse, while trying not to loose his heart over her. Now that she has confessed her feelings, it looks like he has lost his inner battle and his heart has won out over his logic. With Hermione falling apart, I imagine it was the last straw that broke the camel's back, so to speak, for Severus. The guy is an emotional wreck now. I hope there is no one to witness Hermione and Severus's interaction in the Library.

Response from CordyAngelSeer (Author of Melancholy Whore)

Thank you for the review and rating

Response from CordyAngelSeer (Author of Melancholy Whore)

.  Snape has worked so hard to keep others out, and to protect his heart/feelings, but Hermione just got under his skin. Poor man just needs a hug.  Up next will be more on Sev/Hermione's relationship and Umbridge pays a visit.  Thank you again for reveiwing.

Response from CordyAngelSeer (Author of Melancholy Whore)

Thank you for the review and rating

Response from CordyAngelSeer (Author of Melancholy Whore)

.  Snape has worked so hard to keep others out, and to protect his heart/feelings, but Hermione just got under his skin. Poor man just needs a hug.  Up next will be more on Sev/Hermione's relationship and Umbridge pays a visit.  Thank you again for reveiwing.

0/10

leonix8238

(Scratches head) . . Call me stupid but Im well and truly lost yet still enjoying it!Snape crying means something rather significant must be going on here..my I wish I had a Ravenclaw mind!

Response from CordyAngelSeer (Author of Melancholy Whore)

Snape in a damaged man, for him to let someone in as he has Hermione is a big step on his part.  I promise this will all make sense, I thank you for sticking with it Leonix, uo next more light will be shed on the backstory of our duo and Umbridge visits Hogwarts.  Again thank you for taking the time to review. 

Response from CordyAngelSeer (Author of Melancholy Whore)

Snape in a damaged man, for him to let someone in as he has Hermione is a big step on his part.  I promise this will all make sense, I thank you for sticking with it Leonix, uo next more light will be shed on the backstory of our duo and Umbridge visits Hogwarts.  Again thank you for taking the time to review. 

10/10

portugal_faro

Wonderful chapter.Heart moving. Many thanks

Response from CordyAngelSeer (Author of Melancholy Whore)

Thank you so much for your review and rating, I'm probably going to start chapter nine tomorrow, in which Umbridge makes her debut. 

Response from CordyAngelSeer (Author of Melancholy Whore)

Thank you so much for your review and rating, I'm probably going to start chapter nine tomorrow, in which Umbridge makes her debut. 

10/10

mia madwyn

Wow. This is such amazing angst and I still don't know where it's going, but you've got me for the ride.

Response from CordyAngelSeer (Author of Melancholy Whore)

Thank you so much Mia, don't worry everything will be cleared up and sorted out, I promise.  Up next Umbridge visits Hogwarts and some backstory on Sev and Hermione.  Again, thank you so much for taking the time to review. 

Response from CordyAngelSeer (Author of Melancholy Whore)

Thank you so much Mia, don't worry everything will be cleared up and sorted out, I promise.  Up next Umbridge visits Hogwarts and some backstory on Sev and Hermione.  Again, thank you so much for taking the time to review. 

Displaying Review 151 - 175 of 250 in total
← Previous 1 2 3 4 5 6 7 8 9 10 Next →

The Petulant Poetess

A moderated archive, hosting stories by authors who enjoy dabbling in the wonderful world of Harry Potter fanfiction.

More About The Petulant Poetess

© Copyrights. All rights reserved. ThePetulantPoetess.com

Explore

  • All Stories
  • by Author
  • by Category
  • by Character
  • by Genre

Links

  • General Information
  • Terms and Conditions
  • Message Board
  • Writers' Resources
  • Submission Rules