Very high cheese factor, but for some reason I liked it anyway. What, no marriage law or pregnant teenage 'Minie? Such a rip off. Lol.

Ha ha ha!! The funky sex scene was the best part! I'm not big on SS/HG either, but this was awesome/hilarious and that's the best ship in my opinion. Har har har.

LOL! That was a great bit of fun!The love scene?  Well...It was beautiful.*giggles*

This parody was excellent!  I don't know how many of these 'potion assistant' stories I've read that were meant to be serious but ended up being written so poorly that I was embarassed for the author.    The fact that you wrote this story tongue-in-cheek made it postively delightful.  I would highly advise aspiring fan-fic authors to use your Parody as a comical and instructional example of what not to write. 

Yep, use a retro on the final battle, so we're not getting emotional here! A.D: and M.M. conjuring a new concept out of the blue fits always in! Your love-scene deserves ... err will re-writing even do? or re-doing? Lemme think, they have 2x twins plus 2 poor sods in between, and now another is coming --> they have done 'it' 4 more times after this. Maybe they do better now?Your epilogue was an excellently obsolete finish for your wonderfully chiché story. Do I see a parody on a well-known non-fan-fiction?Now, I'll check for the parody on a time-turner, please do not disappoint me!

hillarious!Besides the wonderfully nondescript ingredients (this and that) I loved the nondescript sway of his actions and opinion as in this passage: “Are you ready?” he asked, nodding at the elixir. “Yes, let’s do this.” “Hermione, I don’t like the idea of you taking something like this. Let me take it.” “No, please, let me contribute something more here.” Her eyes were pleading with him. He didn’t say anything. He simply poured a small amount of it in a glass, The pleading eyes are just where they belong, too! Oh, please, please, Severus, risk my life, just the once!! I'm rather sure that he focused on her eyelashes here.Contrasting that, Sev's dicussion with HP is perfectly straight-forward and emotion-free. Yep, it is what those two are! Eeeh, but... but you got your ideas from stories in this archive ... maybe I should re-check my own story? No time, need to read on!

OMG. Hairy Pooter. The BEST line in the whole fic. Hehee.

cute. corny, but cute.

OMG - you might have missed one or two cliches, but I'd be hard pressed to think of which ones. That was a total HOOT! Cheers!

Invincible!Harry, sex scene written in a thirteen-years-old style and fertility potion :D Brilliant end to a brilliant story!It made my exam-cramming much more interesting :-)Thank you!E.

Love it!  bad sex AND bad children's names.   Personally, (and seriously) If Hermione and Severus ever did marry, and produce young, I could see all the kids with names from Shakespeare........ But not Harry/Henry for any of them!

Commanding Officer Harry is so funny!  Fiesty boyfriend, and, oh, yes, Draco's been spying for me.  This story is so full of cliches.  Thanks for posting it.

I just love how they are discussing potions, but instead of talking about herbs and other things that could be used as Potions ingredients, they say, 'the first one' or 'add that.'   As if the author intended to look up some cool plants to use their names, and never got back to it!

You know I really enjoyed most of this story. I loved the scenes with Serverus and Hermione, when she is helping his when he's sick. theres a lot of feeling there and sexxxual tension. really well done. I th9ought about the last of it all night and day and would like to just say that I wish you would rewrite the love scene at the nd before the epilouge. Put some of that tenderness and feeling in that scene. It just seemed so quickly glossed over and with (sorry) really crude sexual references. You can say the same thing with more gentler words ad images and make it sooo good. I really did enjoy this story.

I've just tried to read a very poorly written story before starting yours. It didn't help that there was no SS. Anyway, you could double the exclamation points and yours would still seem like high art. You make even cliches entertaining.

ROFL!  LMAO!  

Please post a Time-Turner  parody!  In that last chapter, you reached new heights of bad, but I can't get the dumb grin off of my face.  Sooo funny!

XD Oh dear god. The epilogue was the icing on the cake. Especially the final battle and Harry's eyes. ::sneeerks:: Thanks for giving us all something to laugh at! I certainly needed it to get through my 12 page research paper.

"His totally evil Dark Mark" LOL!  I read a few lines aloud to my Hubby, and he said it sounded like Scooby Doo.

WTF!!!?!!! Nice love scene. XD It's all sweetness and lovey doveys until you get down to some "feeling on each other"! LOL Thanks for the story. I *had* a great time reading it!

"She wanted to give something back to the community. How decent." Holy crap! That earned a right out loud "Ha!" from me. This is really brilliant, subtle humor. "Hermione, you are something else." What!? LOL OOC indeed. I love it. I failed to review the last chapter, so caught up in reading ahead was I, but I wanted to mention that I loved the "She will bear you two Slytherins" bit and his double take!  I'm off to read some more...

Hairy Pooter? Mental Joy?   damn. Nice jammies...nice coincidence! Hubba hubba. XD

Good God, woman! This is the funniest, cutest, loveliest thing I've read that made me laugh and cry at the same time (although the crying may have been my daughter standing on my toes!). Brilliant job, keep 'em rolling!

*lol* This was good.You may have put me off sex for a while with that scene (I'm not sure if I'm talking about the sex or the fertility potion one, though :P )

Great work!