Thanks!

Thanks!

Thanks for your review!

Thanks for your review!

Thanks!

Thanks!

Thank you for your review.  I tend to agree.  Note that she said, 'unwise', not 'incorrect'.   She's trying to form a relationship with Elizabeth at this stage.   Narcissa doesn't feel that Elizabeth would be flattered by such a label.  Elizabeth, having grown up away from Hogwarts, isn't hung up on the prejudices, so the comment falls a bit on deaf ears, but Narcissa was trying to use that comment to flatter.

Thank you for your review.  I tend to agree.  Note that she said, 'unwise', not 'incorrect'.   She's trying to form a relationship with Elizabeth at this stage.   Narcissa doesn't feel that Elizabeth would be flattered by such a label.  Elizabeth, having grown up away from Hogwarts, isn't hung up on the prejudices, so the comment falls a bit on deaf ears, but Narcissa was trying to use that comment to flatter.

I should have noted this as I went. I chose an AU situation for my own benefit.  It may become a bit more obvious later in the story why I did so.   Elizabeth's inexperience with such things becomes more important later, so I wanted the Malfoys to be titled even though they are not in canon. 

But thank you for the comments.  The titles I definitely get tangled up in my writing, but the Malfoys having some form of title is a deliberate change.

It would be a good idea always to include an Author’s Note to that effect. Otherwise it just looks like a particularly stupid mistake, leading the reader to assume the story will be full of such mistakes. I see errors of that sort as signal flags that a story might not be worth my time. (An Original Character with a blatantly Mary-Sue name is another such signal. Fifty points to your House for naming your OC Elizabeth!) It may not be fair to judge a story on such a small thing, but the signs are surprisingly reliable, and there is so much fanfic to sort through that such snap decisions are inevitable.

I should have noted this as I went. I chose an AU situation for my own benefit.  It may become a bit more obvious later in the story why I did so.   Elizabeth's inexperience with such things becomes more important later, so I wanted the Malfoys to be titled even though they are not in canon. 

But thank you for the comments.  The titles I definitely get tangled up in my writing, but the Malfoys having some form of title is a deliberate change.

It would be a good idea always to include an Author’s Note to that effect. Otherwise it just looks like a particularly stupid mistake, leading the reader to assume the story will be full of such mistakes. I see errors of that sort as signal flags that a story might not be worth my time. (An Original Character with a blatantly Mary-Sue name is another such signal. Fifty points to your House for naming your OC Elizabeth!) It may not be fair to judge a story on such a small thing, but the signs are surprisingly reliable, and there is so much fanfic to sort through that such snap decisions are inevitable.

It's a world gone mad, isn't it?   Only two more chapters to go.  And the sweetness quotient does not decline until the very end. 

It's a world gone mad, isn't it?   Only two more chapters to go.  And the sweetness quotient does not decline until the very end. 

Yes, Evelyn is quite lovely.   It's a shame she wasn't able to be more of an influence in Severus' childhood.

Yes, Evelyn is quite lovely.   It's a shame she wasn't able to be more of an influence in Severus' childhood.

Severus has a tremendous network of support these days.  This is something he hasn't really had in the past.  The response will not be universally positive, but they will be just fine.  There's a lot of curiousity about Severus that he will undoubtedly find annoying, but he'll be fine.

Severus has a tremendous network of support these days.  This is something he hasn't really had in the past.  The response will not be universally positive, but they will be just fine.  There's a lot of curiousity about Severus that he will undoubtedly find annoying, but he'll be fine.