Chapter Thirteen: The Victory Ball
Chapter 13 of 40
kittyperrySeverus flirts and dances while the Malfoys plot.
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Following the Order meeting, Ron had tried very hard to spend time with Hermione. The Greasy Git's pronouncement that he and his family were touched by the Dark had hit a sore note indeed. Ron wanted to prove that he was not jealous of Harry and Hermione's moment of fame.
Ron felt that since Hermione had kissed him in the heat of the final battle, he was now entitled to certain benefits. He had read and heard enough about Muggle porn to feel that Hermione as a Muggle-born would be frisky and therefore quite willing to sleep with him. Before, they had been on the search for Horcruxes, and there was a crazed Dark Lord on their trail, but now, things were good. Surely, thought Ron, Hermione will soon be in my bed.
Ron, Ginny and Molly were looking forward to the Victory Ball with almost irrational anticipation. Ginny had bought herself a daring dress in gold satin that made her look incredibly sexy. She wanted to be the one photographed on Harry's arm. She wanted to be the belle of the ball.
Ron had made an extra special effort with his appearance, as well. His navy blue robes were very dashing, and he felt that tonight, with the attention of the world's media upon them, Hermione would not be able to push him aside. He was determined that tonight was the night that Hermione would stop acting like a frigid ice queen and sleep with him.
The Weasleys had all arrived at Grimmauld Place with the intention of leaving for the ball with Harry and Hermione. Molly and Ginny had decided that it would be most fitting if they arrived at the Ministry Ballroom en masse. Harry had been pleased when he had heard of their company, for he had been dreading having to appear in public and deal with the media attention alone.
Hermione was not particularly looking forward to the ball, but she realised that it would do Harry a lot of good to get out and about. She was, however, dreading Ron and his now un-wanted attentions.
As they were about to Floo to the Ministry, Ron slid his arm around her waist and whispered in what he thought was a seductive tone. "You look very pretty 'Mione; I can't wait to get you out of your dress."
Hermione was both embarrassed and furious. She knew that Molly had heard her son's remark. Realising that not causing a scene was impossible, she pulled herself out of his grip and said, "Ronald, you're a total cad and an idiot. You and I are through. You've called me a tart and a scarlet woman in front of almost everyone of the Order, and if you now think that I am going to sleep with you or be your girlfriend, you've got another thing coming."
Hermione's attack took almost everyone aback.
Harry was extremely uncomfortable because he did not know what Hermione was speaking of.
Ginny stared furiously at Hermione and whispered, "Frigid bitch. My brother can do so much better than you."
Arthur Weasley was the most embarrassed. Trying desperately for a jovial tone of voice, he quickly ushered everyone into the Floo and to the Ministry Ballroom.
When they arrived at the Ministry Ballroom, Ron immediately marched off. It took Hermione a moment to realise who, or what, he had spotted on arrival. Following the direction of Ron's swagger, she found Lavender Brown in an extremely low-cut, provocative dress of almost see-through scarlet lace. Ron had not wasted a moment in asking the very pleased young woman for a dance.
The other Weasleys, seeing Ron's seeming oblivion to Hermione's rejection, soon scattered, leaving her still standing forlornly by the fireplaces.
Harry tried to stay with Hermione, since he wanted to know what was going on, but Ginny's glare had Hermione shooing him off with a false smile. She did not want to cause a scene in front of the gathered crowd even though she wanted nothing more than to howl and scream inside. "Don't worry about me, Harry, I'm fine. I just want to sit down and have a moment to myself. Go dance with Ginny."
As Harry was led away by a victorious Ginny, Hermione looked around in hopes of finding a friendly face in the crowd. Not finding one, she made her way to the tables after glancing at the seating plan. As she was walking through the crowd towards the distant tables, Hermione was stopped by Narcissa.
With a knowing look, the older witch asked, "Is there trouble in paradise?"
Hermione pretended to smile. "No, everything is fine." It was obvious that Narcissa's comments were based on the ridiculous piece in The Daily Prophet. The ludicrous piece, of course, was the horridly personal article written by none other than Rita Skeeter. After Harry and Hermione's refusal to speak to the media following the press conference, Skeeter had approached Ron. Ron, who had been keen to get into the action and have his own moment of fame, had given an in-depth interview and had told her everything about their year on the run. Skeeter, who had never liked Hermione, had asked Ron if Hermione was seeing Kingsley, but Ron had spluttered and said no, that she was his girl. Thus, the sight of Ronald Weasley now snogging Lavender Brown rather publicly was hard to miss.
At Narcissa's raised eyebrow, Hermione once again attempted to smile brightly. "Really," she said with false cheer. "Everything is just perfect."
Narcissa gently patted Hermione's arm and guided her to one of the darker alcoves and insisted, "My dear, I've been around long enough to realise that you are unhappy. Come now, if it is Mr. Weasley, then perhaps I can be of help?"
Hermione nodded mutely and tried to stop the tears that were now threatening to fall. She had not expected gentle understanding from Narcissa Malfoy, no matter their previous seemingly friendly conversation in town.
Narcissa was ever the opportunist. In a calculated move, the witch asked, "Do you know, my dear, that Severus is alone tonight as well?"
Hermione blinked and looked questioningly at the older woman. She found the sudden change of topic rather confusing.
Narcissa smirked. "I suggest that perhaps if you sit with Severus, his very social personality will ensure that you'll be left free of the tender mercies of the wondrous Mr. Weasley."
Hermione was initially appalled at Cissy's suggestion, but almost immediately saw the benefit of such a position. Smiling brightly through the tears that were swimming in her eyes, she said, "I do agree, Cissy; I just think Professor Snape would not be amused."
"I'll handle Severus," said Narcissa confidently.
Hermione smiled again. Speaking to Narcissa had helped Hermione focus on something other than the sight of Ron trying to stick his tongue down Lavender's throat.
"I was dreading dinner, actually," confided Hermione. "I saw that I was placed next to Ron at the main table, and it would have been excruciating after our recent break-up. I just ended it before we arrived actually. Professor Snape is also at the head table though, so doing a bit of place shifting would not be too difficult if he is agreeable with altering the seating arrangements."
Narcissa smirked wickedly. "What the men don't know won't hurt them," said the Slytherin confidently. "I'll just make a tiny alteration to the seating plan, and all will be well."
Hermione grinned and forced her tears away. She had not even considered doing anything like that.
Seeing Hermione smile, Narcissa smirked again. Then, the older woman helped Hermione repair her face and guided her towards the Slytherin group where Lucius and Draco were talking to Severus.
As they approached the party, Hermione saw Lucius and froze. "Cissy," she said desperately, "I don't think I can."
Narcissa noted the abject terror on Hermione's face and hugged the girl briefly. "My dear, let me apologise once more for our previous behaviour. I assure you that you won't be harmed. Lucius is many things, but he isn't a fool. He was only a Death Eater because he knew to refuse the Dark Lord would result in immediate and painful death."
Hermione was still skittish. This was the man who had threatened her, terrified her. How could she approach him for anything less than sheer necessity?
Narcissa sighed. "Please, Hermione," pleaded the older woman. "Don't let the others see your fear. Don't cause a scene. I promise you that the only true loyalty a Malfoy can ever have is to his or her family. As Draco's godfather, Severus is family. You saved his life; we are indebted to you. You have nothing to fear."
Hermione nodded. She was still not really convinced, but she had grown to like Narcissa Malfoy, and she trusted Professor Snape completely. "Okay, Cissy," she said softly. "I'll do this for you."
Harry and Ginny bumped into people on the dance floor as they watched in bemusement the sight of Hermione being led to the Malfoys and Snape by Narcissa.
As Hermione joined the waiting men, there was furious whispering around the ballroom. Severus could not help his amusement and raised a sardonic eyebrow at Narcissa. "What in Circe's name are you up to, woman?"
This caused Lucius to laugh out loud, which attracted even more attention from their attentive audience. Chuckling darkly, Lucius replied, "Severus, you know my brilliant wife; she's match-making."
Draco nearly choked on his drink in shock. Then, seeing the utterly gobsmacked expression on his godfather's face, the younger man joined his father in uproarious laughter.
Hermione had expected coldness and aloofness at her introduction into the exclusively Slytherin group. She had not expected her presence to cause laughter and amusement at Professor Snape's expense. Unable to find a suitable way of responding, the young woman could only blush furiously and smile.
Narcissa huffed in affront. "I'm doing nothing of the sort," she said, before changing her mind to admit, "so what if I am?"
This was all too much for Draco. Bowing to his mother and Hermione, he said, 'This has been very pleasant, but I think it is time I left to ask Daphne Greengrass to dance.'
As Draco strolled off with a slightly amused smirk on his face, Lucius smiled like a predator shark at his wife and said, 'Cissy, my dear, I think it is time for us to take a turn about the room.' Smirking evilly at Severus and Hermione, Lucius led Narcissa away.
This, of course, left an extremely embarrassed and uncomfortable Hermione standing alone with Severus with the eyes of curious observers trained upon them.
Hermione was very unsettled. She wasn't usually this awkward, but she did not know how to behave. All Hermione could do was try to look relaxed while blushing furiously.
Seeing Miss Granger's reaction at being left alone with him in the ballroom, Severus sighed. "Please stop blushing, Miss Granger," he said tiredly. "If you continue to colour up so charmingly in my presence, you will make our attentive audience think that I'm flirting with you or being suggestive."
This statement only made Hermione blush even more.
"Merlin's pants, woman," said Severus gruffly, before taking her hand and leading the now utterly astonished Hermione onto the dance floor.
As they danced, Severus asked her, "Am I correct in my assumption that Cissy was rescuing you from Mr. Weasley's offensive behaviour?"
Hermione nodded and said softly, "I broke it off as we were leaving for the ball. I didn't think he would be so insensitive as to snog Lavender as soon as he got here, as if nothing had ever gone on between us."
Severus sighed once more and said, 'Then you were the only one.'
Hermione was startled by the response. She looked up at Severus in confusion.
"Really, Miss Granger," Severus said in irritation. "Why do you think I disapproved so vehemently of your friendship? They used you from the very first. You lied for them, you worked for them and they gave you the crumbs of their friendship."
Hermione spluttered, "But, but... isn't that what friends do?"
Severus sighed. Bloody Gryffindors. "Think carefully before you speak, Miss Granger. Analyse not from your eyes but from the eyes of an objective outsider how it always appeared to be them against you. Think back to how Weasley walked out on you and Potter in the hour of your greatest need."
Hermione was quiet for a while and then said gently, "But he came back."
"Yes," said Severus, "but think about why he came back. Did he come back because he realised his mistake, or did he come back because he was ashamed and guilty? If it was shame and guilt that brought him back, what was he ashamed and guilty of? And then, consider objectively what he gave up for the year on the run and what you have given up in terms of your family, your respectability and your place in society."
Hermione looked at Severus in confusion and consternation.
Severus merely continued to speak as he twirled Hermione around the dance floor. "Miss Granger, you're supposedly an intelligent woman; consider, are you going to be able to retrieve your parents from Australia? Has anyone even asked you about them, or how you're going to go there and un-modify their memories? Has anyone even discussed with you the possibility of being able to give them back their memories completely without them trusting you? Or indeed, if they will be able to ever forgive you for what you have done?"
Hermione did not respond. What was there to say? No one, not even Harry, had asked any of the questions that kept her up at night with inexpressible worry.
Severus continued to speak. "You are a young woman who did what you had to do in a difficult situation, but you must realise that British Magical society is Victorian in its attitude. Molly and Miss Weasley are not the only ones who are dragging your name through the mud over your supposed loose morality. Young ladies do not go traipsing off into the wilderness with two hormonal teenage boys, even if they are supposedly her best friends. It is simply not done. The fact that Mr. Weasley is now rejecting you will be taken as a sign that you have been deemed unsuitable as a marriage partner by his family. They are, as a family, destroying your reputation and any chance you may have of marrying into Magical society."
Hermione was appalled. "But nothing happened," she said miserably. "I've never slept with anyone."
"I know that," said Severus with a sardonic smirk. "To me it is obvious. You do not look at men with that calculating gleam in your eye, but to others, especially people who are waiting to see the fall of the Gryffindor Princess, this is a dream come true."
Hermione's face was now red with embarrassment. She had not expected to have a discussion of her sexuality with Professor Snape, of all people.
However, Severus was still not done. "I would suggest that you stay close to Narcissa. If the Malfoys appear to befriend you, you will be redeemed. Whatever their position, they are still the leaders of pureblood society. If they court you, if they are seen to associate with you, then you will be forgiven all."
Hermione nodded. She was so confused. "I have never..." began Hermione, only to be interrupted by Severus.
"I realise your Gryffindor sensibilities abhor the concept of making use of your friends, but remember that the Malfoys are Slytherin. They will use you, so use them in turn, and all will be well. Just because there is an advantage in association does not mean there is any lack or falsehood in the friendship. Lucius and I have used each other since our days at Hogwarts. That does not mean our friendship is any less worthy or true."
Hermione nodded. She was no fool. She understood what Professor Snape was trying to tell her. Tentatively, she met his dark gaze. "Will you be my friend, sir?" she asked.
Severus smiled. It was not a happy smile, but that of a predator gazing upon its prey. "Indeed I shall, Miss Granger," he said.
His tone of voice made Hermione realise she'd just asked the Devil for a favour. What will he require in exchange? wondered Hermione worriedly.
Severus saw that Hermione had come to the realisation that she would now have to be of use to him. Dipping his head close to her ear, he whispered seductively, "In return, Miss Granger, I shall have your very soul."
Hermione's head jerked up in fear, but when she saw his smirk, she realised that he was not being completely serious.
Severus chuckled darkly. "I see you realise that I do not completely jest, Miss Granger. Like for like is usually the way these things are done in Slytherin circles." Severus hadn't really thought about what he was going to demand of Miss Granger; in truth, he already felt indebted. He didn't really owe her a life debt, since it was the Dark Veela who had cured him, but he did owe her for her efforts in clearing his name. However, Severus did enjoy baiting Gryffindors. Watching the young woman's confusion and panic was very amusing. Deciding to play a little, he pulled her closer into his embrace as he neared the end of the dance.
Hermione was not too sure she understood everything that was going on. On one level, she realised that Professor Snape was toying with her. She also realised that he had indeed flirted with her in an indirect, sardonic way. However, she also trusted him to protect her and knew instinctively that he would never hurt her or abuse her physically. Words were his weapons of choice. Deciding that Professor Snape was testing her confidence and trust in him, she smiled at him. "I trust you, sir," she said softy. "Whatever you demand from me in exchange will never be something that causes me pain."
Severus was floored. Although he did not show it, he was touched by this blatant display of trust. No one had ever trusted him so explicitly. "Gryffindor, indeed," he murmured before smirking at the smiling young woman.
Meanwhile, on another part of the dance floor, Lucius asked Narcissa, "Cissy, what in Merlin's name are you doing with the Granger girl?"
Narcissa smirked at her husband and replied, "Really, Lucius, you can be so blind. We discussed this last week, and you said you wanted the Malfoy name to be cleared as soon as possible, for it was starting to affect business. Now, think about who put in the most effort to clear Severus' name. Besides, if being seen publicly with Severus is good for our name, then being seen to be on friendly terms with one of the Golden Trio is sure to flummox all the gossips."
Lucius smirked in amusement as he listened to his wife's explanation.
Narcissa continued, "You did say after our chat with Severus that he was looking for a wife. You know there is hardly anyone who would marry him. No one from the pureblood circles will have him; he is too difficult, opinionated and unfortunately poor, so it must be a half-blood or a Mudblood. Hermione is quite brilliant even Draco admits that and a foolish woman would be completely unsuitable for him. She's been through the war, understands his role and thinks he's a hero. It's perfect; we get to steal the Gryffindor Princess and annoy the do-gooders while simultaneously ensuring that Severus has an intellectually suitable, politically well-placed wife who is young, easily manipulated and will be tireless in her efforts to help us if she feels we are true to our word of wanting to turn over a new leaf. Nimue knows I never really bought into all of that Death Eater nonsense. I just did what you wanted and what I felt would be the best thing for the Malfoy name. We need to do as much as we can to distance ourselves from that past, and befriending a Mudblood...no... I must stop using that word... a Muggle-born...would help matters greatly."
As Narcissa finished her speech, Lucius stared at his beautiful, brilliant wife in wonder. Finally, he said plainly, "I'm a very lucky man. You're perfect, brilliant, beautiful and thoroughly Slytherin! But Cissy, a Gryffindor for Severus? They'll drive each other mad!"
Narcissa angled her head towards the dancing couple and observed drolly, "I think not. I think they will provide the perfect counterpoint to each other."
Lucius smirked whilst watching Severus dance. Finally, he murmured into Narcissa's ear while drawing her closer to his chest, "You may be right, my dear, you may be right."
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A/N: Love it or hate it, please let me know what you think.
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432 Reviews | 6.61/10 Average
Even though real life demanded my attention for quite some time, I'm so glad I finally got to finish reading this story. We'll done!
Response from kittyperry (Author of Dark Veela)
Thank you. It's not finished really. I've written more chapters and posted them on another site, but I don't have a beta now so can't really post it here at the moment.
Response from mom2divas (Reviewer)
Which other site? Beta or not, I'd still love to read it.
Lol I just loved how Severus was handled! Ginn really annoys me so I was happy to see that come to an end. So glad some of the Weasleys started the mend!
Response from kittyperry (Author of Dark Veela)
It has been fun to make Ginny into the evil one in my story. She's just perfect for the role. Glad you approve :)
It feels like I should be offended for some reason at the start of some chapters due to misunderstandings between Hermione and Severus and her almost always apologizing and then you go and keep writing the chapter and make me see why it worked out the way it does. Lol! Another fantastic chapter (or couple of chapters as I can't recall if I reviewed consistently as I get very involved and just keep reading) and I loved the castle getting into it.
Response from kittyperry (Author of Dark Veela)
Thank you. I don't want Hermione to always apologise - and I'm sure he'll be on bended knee to her at some point too :)
Lovely chapter. I really like how the Malfoys are taking to Hermione. Can't wait to read about her chat with Narcissa and her date with Severus.I hope you don't mind but found 2 small typos. "This brought fought another round of giggles" and "Hermione blushed and shock her head."
Response from kittyperry (Author of Dark Veela)
Thanks so much for your eagle eyes. I really appreciate all such heads-up. I really need to find a beta.
Lol love the portraits!
Response from kittyperry (Author of Dark Veela)
Thanks so much. I love them too.
I had a feeling that was going to happen however that last sentence... I must find out where he's going with that!
Response from kittyperry (Author of Dark Veela)
Glad you're enjoying the story :)
Sorry to see that reaction but I can see it fitting in well with how the story has progressed so far.
Response from kittyperry (Author of Dark Veela)
I'm pleased you think so. This is a bit of a long winded story - a bit of this, a bit of that, but the action is still there.
Still loving this story. Different take on the reason behind certain Weasleys behaviours as well as relationships surrounding the Malfoys. Excellent chapters so far!
Response from kittyperry (Author of Dark Veela)
I'm so happy to read your reviews. Thank you so much for taking the time to tell me what you think.
Yet another excellent chapter! One small typo though; severed instead of served in the sentence, "Hermione was conscious of the amount of alcohol being severed..."
Response from kittyperry (Author of Dark Veela)
Thank you so much for your review. I do appreciate your kind words. :) And great job with the eagle eyes.
Yay! Fantastic interactions between Severus and Hermione.
Response from kittyperry (Author of Dark Veela)
Thank you so much. Glad you enjoyed them together.
new and interesting learning about severus' family history!! so must didn't have their true love.. so dad...
Response from kittyperry (Author of Dark Veela)
It is sad. But that's the curse of the Dark Veela and fingers crossed that Snape breaks it for the rest of the bloodline.
Oh, I haven't been around for awhile. I was so excited to see two new chapters!
Response from kittyperry (Author of Dark Veela)
Thank you. Sorry it has taken me so long to get back to you. It wasn't showing up that I'd got reviews for some reason.
Thank you for a marvelous update, it was all one could have hoped for and more:-))
Response from kittyperry (Author of Dark Veela)
Thank you. Glad you enjoyed it. Next chapter is waiting to be gone through.
So excited to see this. I was so sad to think it would be lost to WiP.You had a couple of minor errors. Fluer's sister is Gabrielle.
Response from kittyperry (Author of Dark Veela)
Thanks so much for letting me know. I thought I'd caught that one :)Also, no, I've written up to chapter 48 and am working on 49. But not having a beta makes the whole process of posting a lot slower. But it isn't going to be a WIP.
Response from chyara (Reviewer)
I remember when you started writing this one and the other one, the name escapes me. I am pulled into your story. Truly a work of art.I had to go back and start over and re-read it, as it had been awhile. Then I went back to read it again...lol
Response from kittyperry (Author of Dark Veela)
That is one of the nicest things anyone has said to me. Thank you.I do that all the time with stories I enjoy/love. So I'm feeling really over the moon. You made my morning honey.xxx
Congratulations Doctor Perry! So glad that you've finished the post grad work, and it was definitely worth waiting for to get a new chapter of this story. Even though Severus had been laboring under a powerful curse, it was breathtaking to see that despite everything it wasn't all powerful. If one had the ability to see past the surface of those around them, the curse just didn't pack its usual punch. In a way, it's an analogy for life--everyone around us has more to them than what we get to see at a cursory glance. But how many people take the time to really look?Thanks for the update, and I'm looking forward to the next one!
Response from kittyperry (Author of Dark Veela)
Love your insightful review. Thank you so much for taking the time to think and respond. Yes. Exactly. I couldn't have put it better myself. Because really, people didn't look beyond the caricature of Snape the evil dungeon bat, the slimy git. He played the role so well he became the role. And yet, there is more to him. The dedicated potioneer, the passionate lover.
What a marvellous update, well Worth waiting for. I loved it, absolutely loved it. Severus realising that Hermione was never repulsed by his Veela curse was icing on the cake.
Response from kittyperry (Author of Dark Veela)
Hello my dear,So glad you enjoyed the chapter. I wanted Hermione to be more than just the girl who fell for the man but someone who had seen his worth even before, kind of like Luna had done.
Any betas in sight? :D It's great that this story hasn't been abandoned. :D But still WIPs make me nervous... :D
Response from kittyperry (Author of Dark Veela)
Hello lovely,No, still no betas in sight. Desperately looking out for one.Sorry I've not responded to this before today. I've not got the email that tells you someone has written for some reason and I'd not checked for ages. Sorry. Don't worry, I'm working on more chapters. They will get written the story will be complete :)
Lovely. I'm so glad to be reconnected to this story. Defintely enjoyable to read and watch the growth of all the many characters. I'm very impressed with your ability to balance so many of them. I look forward to future chapters. Thank you for sharing. Also, congrats on submitting your PhD thesis, I hope it was well received.
Response from kittyperry (Author of Dark Veela)
It was. I am now Doctor Perry. Glad you are enjoying the story. Have actually posted new chapters on another site but haven't got a beta so can't post here yet.
Severus is capable of finding true love, but it will take some convincing to get him to belive that he is truely loved.
Response from kittyperry (Author of Dark Veela)
Yes. Exactly. He's so used to being hated, or used. To accept that the love that's offered is real is going to be a challenge.
Given her previous experence at the manor, I doubt Hermione would want to go back there just yet, but as it was her that lead them to Severus, it would hav been nice to be asked at the very least.
Response from kittyperry (Author of Dark Veela)
Oh, I totally agree. But I think that at this point the Malfoys haven't had enough time to think of how useful getting Hermione on their side is. They're still only thinking of survival, kind of like on instinct. The plotting will fall into place later.
I spent the last day re-redating this wonderful story!!! You have me in tears here. This last chapter was so powerful. Thank you for the wonderful read. I so look forward to another installment.
Response from kittyperry (Author of Dark Veela)
Thank you so much for your wonderful review. I'm so glad you enjoyed it, that it has touched you so deeply. I'm beyond words.
I was so delighted to see another chapter up for this story. I have really enjoyed your writing and I am very intrigued by this story! Congrats on getting your PhD thesis in! What an accomplishment!
Response from kittyperry (Author of Dark Veela)
Thank you. I'm so happy the PhD is done and dusted. It was 4 and half years of drugery.
I am so glad you're back, and congratulations on the PhD!The ceremony was lovely, and the emphasis on magical intent and near silence of it all made it quite profound. Tansy is a fun new character as well--I'm looking forward to seeing more of her in the future.
Response from kittyperry (Author of Dark Veela)
Thank you so much. So glad the PhD is done. Tansy is marvellous. I'm so into her.
Still enjoying this immensely. I love the slow progression of the relationship and his inner tumoil. It’s refreshing and he’ so in character, even when being romantic. Great job. I wonder though, and forgive me for suggesting, but there are a few things. This: ‘If her Gryffindor brashness sent him scurrying away, she would use her Slytherin wiles.’ – I get so tired of the house thing all the time, repeated over and over, wouldn’t it have been better if she’s simply thought: If her brashness sent him scurrying away, she would use her feminine wiles. And it’s Severus’ house, er, manor now, cant’ he rename the place Snape Manor? And what’s with the opening of the two buttons – mum always told me that was a ‘loose’ thing to do, it would have read cuter if the buttons were ornamental, a decoration, not gapping and straining because she’d gained weight or a larger bust.
Response from kittyperry (Author of Dark Veela)
Hello lovely,Well, I get your point about not linking everything to House affiliation. And you're right of course, but, Hermione is still too close to Hogwarts to think in such a grown up manner. I'm sure she'll get there eventually. The same is true for her ane the buttons. I mean, before Severus, she's only had Ron as a possible beau. I'm sure as time progresses that she will learn to be more subtle and lady-like.As for the name change, there is magic tied with the name of the place. To change a name also means sometimes in letting go of the magics that are tied to it. I really appreciate you thinking things through so carefully. It is wonderful to have a review that is so detailed. Thank you so much for reading my story with such great care. Lots of love. Do keep reviewing. It makes me so happy.
Response from beaweasley2 (Reviewer)
You're right, and keep in mind these are only my thoughts, nothing more, and it's your story. It's a great story and I'm enjoying it. My bedtime read actually. I'll rememebr to review more frequently (me bad at that) and try not to be too critical. But I can easliy immerse in it and it is really that good.bea~
Response from kittyperry (Author of Dark Veela)
You have me grinning. Thank you. Given that I adore your work, this is a real compliment to me that you are enjoying my story.