Five for Silver
Chapter 5 of 33
HogwartsClassof91Hermione can’t seem to resist getting drawn into Snape’s challenges. Will she be able to prove herself to him?
Chapter 5: Five for Silver
Hermione awoke early the next morning, showered and dressed quickly, and then headed into the small kitchen to make toast and tea. She was surprised to find Snape already seated at the breakfast table, reading a newspaper and carefully sipping from a steaming white mug. After living alone for so many years, it was more than a little unnerving to suddenly find a man in the kitchen, and Hermione's step faltered as she approached. Despite the impressive size of the quarters, Hermione suspected their living arrangements would prove quite awkward for some time.
"Good morning," she said stiffly.
Snape grunted an acknowledgement without looking up.
Hermione prepared her breakfast and hesitatingly placed it on the table across from him. Then, remembering that she was handing over half of her classes today, she hurried to the office and grabbed her timetables and lesson plans for the students he'd be teaching. Hermione felt a pang of sadness over the loss; it had only been two months, but she had grown fond of many of the students in the early years and fiercely hoped that Snape would try to be kind to them.
She returned to the kitchen and took the seat across from him, asking, "Would you like to review the classes you'll be teaching now?"
Snape continued to read his paper and answered her without a glance. "That won't be necessary. As you may recall, I have done this before."
Hermione gritted her teeth and searched for patience. "Yes, of course. But we've already covered quite a bit, and I can show you where we are in each class. I've recorded the details of all the assignments and results in these notebooks; I can brief you on each students' progress."
"You need not bother."
"But why waste your time teaching them something they've already learnt?" she asked irritably, annoyed that he wouldn't even look at her when she spoke.
Finally, he raised his eyes from the newspaper and gazed at her coolly, causing Hermione to rethink her desire for eye contact. "To ensure they learn it correctly."
Hermione recoiled at his words, her face flushing with the insinuation of her incompetence.
"You really are an arrogant bast," she began, but was promptly interrupted by a loud knock on the door to the living quarters.
Rising from the table, she left the kitchen and marched through the sitting room, angrily waving her wand at the door to Vanish it.
Draco Malfoy and Neville Longbottom stood before her with identical looks of concern on their faces.
"Hermione!" Neville spoke first, sounding out of breath. "It's all over the castle! Everyone's saying that Snape is here...and he's teaching Potions!"
"Yes, Neville; he arrived last night. He's having breakfast if you'd like to speak with him," Hermione told him, pointing toward her kitchen and watching as the colour drained from Neville's round face.
Draco eyed her speculatively. "I thought that might happen," he said quietly.
Hermione looked at him with only mild surprise. She knew Draco had travelled to St Mungo's to see Snape a few times since his miraculous awakening, but he hadn't given her any details about the visits. She'd presumed Draco had much to reconcile with his former Potions professor and hadn't wanted to pry into their discussions.
For her part, Hermione hadn't told either of her friends about her late-night visit to the headmistress' office on the first night of school. There had been no point in belabouring the idea if it might never come to fruition. But Draco didn't seem at all surprised about Snape's sudden appearance, and Hermione suspected he had sources of information which she could only guess at.
"He'll be living here?" Draco asked her now. "Are you all right with that?" He would of course remember the animosity between Hermione and Snape.
"I'll survive," she said with a smile. She'd certainly been through much worse than having Snape for a housemate. Even though she didn't relish the current situation, it was still better than leaving Hogwarts. This was her home.
"Well, you just let us know if he... if he..." Neville began in a protective tone but then trailed away, looking over Hermione's shoulder. "Good morning, Professor Snape," he mumbled.
Hermione turned around to find Snape silently watching their exchange. He was calmly leaning against the door to the sitting area with his robes drawn tightly around him, shrouding his arms where they lay folded across his chest. Upon his face, there appeared an all-too-familiar look of contempt.
"Ah, another trio," he said, his tone dripping with false enthusiasm. "How quaint."
Although she was still stinging from his earlier barbs about her teaching skills, Hermione forced herself to swallow the retort that sprang to her tongue, determined to avoid another scene like the one they'd shared in McGonagall's office last night. She could feel Draco and Neville standing behind her, and the way they shifted just slightly closer bolstered her courage.
With a look of disgust, Snape told her, "I see you are still incapable of residing in this castle without becoming part of an entourage."
"That's right," she bit back angrily, feeling herself neatly plummeting from her moral high ground, but unable to stop the fall. "They're called 'friends', Professor Snape. But I wouldn't expect that term to mean anything to you."
He paused only slightly before replying, "I've never felt compelled to surround myself with admirers to validate my sense of worth."
The phrase 'unlike you' was unspoken, but the implication was not lost on Hermione.
"How fortunate for the rest of us!" she fumed, placing her hands on her hips imperiously, annoyingly aware that her voice was becoming shrill. "If your sense of worth were any higher we'd all be crushed by your massive conceit!"
Snape merely looked amused at her insult and shifted from the doorway. "As charming as this has been, I'm afraid you will have to pardon me. Some of us have work to do," he added as he sauntered past them, through the office, and into the Potions classroom.
Hermione could tell by the faint sound of shuffling feet that the students had begun to fill the classroom and hoped they hadn't overheard her; it was hardly professional to be arguing with another teacher. Her arms fell back to her sides, and she clenched her fists in mounting frustration over the way Snape always managed to get under her skin.
"We've got to get going too, Hermione," Draco apologised. "Are you sure you're okay?"
Hermione shook her head, but answered in the affirmative. "I'm fine, really. Thank you both." More than anything, she was angry at herself for once again getting drawn into such an exchange with Snape. He really was the most irritating man she'd ever met.
"What are you going to do today?" Neville asked curiously.
"I don't know," Hermione replied, considering. It was Friday, which was already a short day for her, consisting only of classes with first-years, third-years, and fourth-years. She realised with a jolt that Snape would be teaching all but the last class, leaving her with a great deal more free time than she was accustomed to.
Thinking of McGonagall's dictate from the previous evening, she tried to stifle a sense of dread as she said, "I suppose I'll get to work setting up a research lab." Then she smiled a little mischievously and added, "Perhaps I can invent a 'Personality Potion' for my new housemate."
The other teachers chuckled and seemed reassured by her disposition. They departed, and Hermione reinstated the Vanishing door behind them. Even through the door, she could hear Snape's captivating voice emanating from the classroom and had to suppress the desire to stand there and eavesdrop. Instead, she returned to the kitchen and focused on her breakfast, which had now grown quite cold.
Hermione had just popped the last bite of toast into her mouth when she realised with a start that all the lesson plans, notebooks, and timetables she had brought in earlier were gone. She searched the kitchen and other rooms with growing confusion. Hermione knew they couldn't have just Vanished; she had long ago learnt to protect her books with an anti-Vanishing charm after a rather unfortunate incident with a cheeky sixthyear student.
Gazing at Snape's empty chair in puzzlement, Hermione realised this could only mean one thing: despite his obvious reluctance, Snape had taken the books with him after all.
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Hermione spent her day heeding McGonagall's advice and creating an area which would eventually function as a laboratory. With the caretaker's help, she found an abandoned classroom on the ground floor and worked hard to make it suitable. It would take some time to bring in the equipment and supplies she'd need, but McGonagall had stopped by at midday and had promptly authorised the procurement of everything she'd asked for.
"There's no reason why advancements and breakthroughs can only happen at institutions of higher learning," she'd informed Hermione. "I believe it's time you put your excellent mind to work and start earning Hogwarts some of those accolades you brought to Jagiellonian University."
Hermione assured her that she'd try her best, secretly hoping the headmistress' expectations weren't too high. She had been so shaken by her time at Arglist Industries that just going through the motions of setting up a lab was causing her to break out in a nervous sweat.
By the time Hermione returned to the dungeons to teach the Gryffindor and Hufflepuff fourthyears, she was actually pleased with the progress she'd made. Passing by the office on her way to the head of the classroom, Hermione saw that Snape was inside the small room, sitting at her desk. Our desk, she corrected herself mentally, feeling her mood sour.
When all the students had arrived, she instructed them to break into groups so they could resume work on the Creativity Potion they'd started the previous day. It was a complicated draught which required the preparation of the many ingredients during one lesson while the brewing commenced separately. There was a great deal of noise as students got their cauldrons out and banged them onto their desks.
Hermione began a brief lecture on the history and uses of Creativity Potion but faltered when Snape came out of the office and slowly stalked amongst the tables at the back of the class. She quickly resumed her lecture, glancing his way occasionally and wondering what he was up to. Snape appeared entirely unconcerned by her discomfort; he casually leant his hip against an empty desk and watched her speak, his arms folded elegantly beneath the folds of his robes.
When Hermione finished her speech and could no longer stand his silent presence, she asked, "Professor Snape, is there something you need?"
The students turned to watch with avid interest, and Hermione had a feeling her argument with Snape this morning had not gone unnoticed. From the looks on the students' faces, the story had grown in the retelling and had undoubtedly been a topic of great interest around the school today.
"Not at all...this is quite fascinating. By all means, please continue, Professor Granger," he said with a tone of civility she knew better than to trust.
Hermione quickly realised she was trapped. Snape obviously intended to stay and watch her teach the entire class, which, she remembered miserably, happened to be a double lesson. She saw no way out of the situation...she certainly couldn't stand here and argue with him in front of the students, nor could she demand he remove himself. She doubted McGonagall would support that; after all, the headmistress had directed Snape to investigate whatever he'd missed in the past fourteen years. Hermione could just imagine him telling Minerva how he merely wanted to familiarise himself with the new teaching methods.
No, there was simply no way out of it. With great conviction, Hermione reminded herself that she'd never backed down from a challenge in her life, and she wasn't about to start now.
She forced a friendly smile onto her face and told him sweetly, "Excellent! Feel free to ask any questions you may have." His lips pursed at her statement, mollifying her slightly.
The students returned to their work with disappointment; they were evidently hoping for something much more dramatic. Hermione began to lead them into the process of brewing their potions. She walked around their tables, watching them work and stopping every so often to offer bits of advice to the class or answer questions from an individual.
Creativity Potion was actually one of her favourites to make, and she soon felt quite comfortable. She was inordinately proud of her students, who were all progressing very well; soon each table had a promising-looking brew cooking in their cauldron.
"Once your potion has started to smoke, watch it carefully for bubbles," Hermione advised them, stopping by a table of Hufflepuffs. "After you've seen the fourth bubble, you may begin to slowly add the nun moth larvae."
"Don't you mean gypsy moth larvae?" purred a voice from behind her. Hermione spun around to find Snape towering over her, his hands clasped behind his back. She hadn't realised he had left his spot from the back of the class and was alarmed by how silently he could move.
"No, it's the nun moth larvae," she affirmed.
"The recipe requires gypsy moths. Nun moths are much smaller than gypsy moths," he pointed out imperiously.
"Yes, that's why we're using twice as many," she said through gritted teeth.
Out of the corner of her eye, Hermione saw that several of the students were watching their exchange, completely ignoring their cauldrons. "Four bubbles, students!" she shouted, turning away from Snape. "If you miss this window, the results will not be pretty!"
Hermione noted with satisfaction that the faces quickly returned to the potions, and she soon heard the requisite hissing as the larvae were added. Snape had moved to another table, and Hermione watched him intently observing the mixture boiling in the Gryffindors' cauldron. When it rapidly turned from a pale puce to the required dark grey, he returned his gaze to Hermione, arched one dark eyebrow, and slowly bowed his head in acknowledgement.
Feeling deliriously happy at the small gesture, Hermione smiled at him genuinely before turning back to the class.
"As Professor Snape pointed out, many recipes for Creativity Potion call for the larvae of gypsy moths, or Lymantria dispar. The nun moth, Lymantria monacha, is a close relative with a slightly different diet, consisting mainly of fruit trees. This means that nun moth larvae contain higher concentrations of sugar," Hermione told them.
Several students nodded in understanding, so she ploughed on, pointing to the swirling contents of the cauldron beside her. "As you can see, the sugar enzymes serve as activators for the other bio-molecules, thus providing the catalyst for rapid chemical reaction."
Twenty-odd blank faces stared back at her, completely gobsmacked.
With a slight huff she said, "It turns grey faster."
Now she could see comprehension on their faces, and she even thought she heard a soft chuckle from Snape, although his back was turned to her so she couldn't be certain.
"This particular potion used to require six hours to brew," she informed her class as she walked to the storeroom and returned with a small tank which looked surprisingly heavy.
"Today, I'm going to show you a way to cut that down to less than two hours," she announced, delighted to note the students...and even Snape...watching her with interest.
Hermione set the tank on her desk and removed the vacuum flask inside, opening a pressure relief valve with a loud hiss. Then she filled an insulated container with the bubbling liquid from the flask. Huge waves of thick vapour emitted from the vessel, roiling and whirling before sinking to the ground from their heavy weight.
"This is a critical point in the brewing process of the Creativity Potion," Hermione said as she joined the students at one of the desks. "Gather 'round, please."
The students clustered around the desk, and Hermione was pleased to see that even Snape was standing behind them, his curiosity evidently outweighing his disdain.
Hermione continued, "Normally, at this juncture the potion would be removed from the flame and the mixture would need to be cooled as quickly as possible. In the past, this involved rapidly stirring it or, for someone skilled in Charms, casting the difficult Frigus charm. Both methods worked, but were quite labour-intense."
Lifting the smoking thermos, she said, "Now this... is simple!"
Hermione instructed one student to extinguish the flame beneath the cauldron and carefully stir the contents while she slowly added a few drops of liquid from the container. There was a great hissing noise as massive clouds of white smoke rose over the sides of the cauldron, spilling onto the desk and swirling hypnotically around them.
Hermione gently leant across the table and angled her chin over the cauldron. Then ever-so-softly and ever-so-slowly, she blew on the vapour and watched it float away, revealing the perfect silver potion churning in the bottom of the cauldron. Her face alight with triumph, she looked up and met Snape's gaze. With amazement, she noted that for once he wasn't frowning at her. There was a look of blatant interest in his dark eyes that sent her pulse speeding and skipping through her veins like a hummingbird searching for nectar.
If she could have seen herself, Hermione would have been surprised by what a lovely picture she made, leaning over the cauldron with her face flushing prettily amidst the billowing vapours. It was an image that did not go unnoticed by others in the room that day.
Hermione told herself it was just the success of having passed Snape's little unspoken test that had her stomach fluttering nervously when he regarded her. It had nothing whatsoever to do with the fact that his ebony eyes seemed to caress her face or with the way his gaze held hers far longer than propriety would dictate.
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Thanks so much to karelia for amazing support and unparalleled beta skills (little_beloved is on holiday and hopefully having a fabulous time!). The lovely lettybird does the Brit-picking and is ever so kind to me!
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Already loving this, do tense! Can't wait to find out more about Argilist and Snape!!
Our reactions to threats may differ, but let me assure you, I take it quite personally when something of mine is threatened. His gaze travelled over her face, his expression almost desperate.
Mine, she thought. The term should have annoyed her, should have had her rebelling at the very notion. She was her own woman, strong and independent. Possessive men had never held any appeal for her. But somehow, this was differentthis man made it different. Where she was independent, he was autonomous to the point of being a recluse. He didnt appear to need or want anyone. What could it mean that hed claimed her, of all people?
Have I made myself perfectly clear? he asked, interrupting her train of thought.
Perfectly. Unlike earlier, her smile was genuine.
He released her arms, cradling her face with both hands. This time, he didnt bother to glance at the open door. He kissed her without hesitation, without concern as to who might see. His lips were greedy, his mouth covetous, and she responded with a hunger that matched his, clinging to his warmth far longer than wisdom would have allowed. Through the haze of passion, her thoughts once again returned to her earlier quandary, but she no longer cared whether he considered her his girlfriend, his lover, or something else entirely. The need for such description had passed.
She was, quite simply, his.
Absolutely the sexiest ending to a fan fiction chapter EVER!!!!!!!!
That was amazing! The dialogue just crackled with energy & wit & snark. Loved reading this fic so much. Has become a favourite & hope you continue to write. Well done!
Response from HogwartsClassof91 (Author of A Murder of Crows)
Thank you so much! I'm delighted you enjoyed it. I haven't written fanfic in ages, but I will ALWAYS love it (and defend it to the death, LOL). Thank you for reading my story and leaving lovely reviews. I've been writing original fiction, but I'm currently taking a break after getting chewed up and spit out by the publishing world. ;-) I can't tell you how nice it is to receive a reminder of why I loved writing in the first place. xoxo
Still reading but just had to stop to say, this story is wonderful! Enjoying it so much & happy there's still more to read.
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Aww ... thank you so much for taking a break to let me know you're enjoying it! xoxo
Love, love, love this story!
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Awesome - I'm so glad you enjoyed it! Thanks for reading, and thanks especially for leaving a review to let me know you liked it. xoxox
I finally finished reading this story! Wow! It been awhile but it was wonderful and truly enjoyable. I loved your characterizations of Snape and Hermione. They were perfect! Thank you so, so much for sharing your talents with the rest of us! Wonderful!
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Yay - I'm so glad you finished it. Thank you so much for reading this story and for leaving such a lovely review. I'm pleased you enjoyed it! xoxox
Absolutely wonderful! Thank you for devoting your time to writing. This was a masterful work. I know it's fanfiction. My husband often tells me to read something written by a REAL writer. I wish he understoon what your writing proves... this is REAL and REALLY GREAT writing! It's special because it's done with love and community. And your efforts are appreciated. I'm sorry if you got negative reviews - because, honestly, you diserve great praise for not only sticking with it but creating something so beautiful. You made me feel for these characters. I love the way you write. I've read quite a bit - I've got a Masters in Literature. I've read what everyone considers to be the best literary works. Yet, it astounds me that so many people don't appreciate what fanfiction writers create. You bring that world alive for me, and you give characters like Snape a chance to breathe free and LOVE. THANK YOU!
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Thanks so much for saying this. I hate to see fanfiction writers maligned, although I understand some of the criticism. I've read some truly awful fanfics (and written some, too, LOL!), but the idea that ALL fanfic writers are hacks is just silly. I haven't written fanfic in several years, but I can tell you that my process didn't change when I moved to original fic. If anything, fanfic took more skill (or at least a different skill set), because I was forced to stay within the constraints of the world and characters someone else had established. (It's one of the reasons I prefer writing original fics now - there are no rules or boundaries!)Thank you for defending fanfic, and for reading fanfic, and for dishing out such lovely praise. You're the best!! xoxo
THis is one of the most awesome stories I've read so far. Thank you for writing. I'm sorry I haven't reviewed before, but I was just so engrossed in the story. But had I done so, they would have been effusive,glowing reviews telling you that each twist and turn has kept me at the edge of my seat. THANK YOU!
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Being engrossed in the story is probably the biggest compliment any reader can give to a writer, so THANK YOU, dear
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, for letting yourself get swept into the action. I'm so glad you've been enjoying it, and I'm glad it's kept you guessing!Thank you very much for this lovely review. :-)
I love this story and i love your Snape!!! I am sure I will read this one again!! I think I hve read this twice and I can not remember leaving a review!! wonderful great work!!
Response from HogwartsClassof91 (Author of A Murder of Crows)
Aww ... thank you so much, deedeebug! I'm rather fond of this story and this Snape, too. ;-) Thanks for reading!!
Heard of this story for ages. It. Ever read it. It's quite compelling. I'm looking forward to more.
Response from HogwartsClassof91 (Author of A Murder of Crows)
Thanks so much for giving this story a shot! There are soooooo many things I'd change if I ever had an extra month (or six) to re-edit it. But it's also fun to see how the writing changed (and improved, mostly) as the story progressed. But still, I cringe at the first half ...And if THAT isn't a resounding endorsement, I don't know what is! Now we see why I'm not in sales or marketing. :-)Thanks for the review!
This was a fantastic Fan Fiction, well put together, long enough to have a perfect story-line yet not long enough to be incredibly boring. I hope to read more of you work sometime.
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Thank you so much for your lovely review! I'm glad you liked the story -- and I'm glad it hit the sweet spot as far as length for you. Thanks so much for reading it!
Response from HogwartsClassof91 (Author of A Murder of Crows)
Thank you so much for your lovely review! I'm glad you liked the story -- and I'm glad it hit the sweet spot as far as length for you. Thanks so much for reading it!
Wonderful story so far, I'm quite enjoying it. Great job!
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Thank you so much! I'm glad you're enjoying it ... it's always so nice to receive reviews on a story that's been around for awhile. Thanks for reading!
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Thank you so much! I'm glad you're enjoying it ... it's always so nice to receive reviews on a story that's been around for awhile. Thanks for reading!
Amazing! I like drunk Hermione. She's rather humourous!
Response from HogwartsClassof91 (Author of A Murder of Crows)
I had a lot of fun imagining that scene. Thanks so much for the review!
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I had a lot of fun imagining that scene. Thanks so much for the review!
Interesting first chapter, I rather enjoyed it! I love that you paired Draco with Luna, that is defintely a pair I haven't seen very often at all! Your description of the surroundings was fantastic as was the dialogue. I can't wait to get to the next chapter. Severus was always my favorite. :)
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He's my favorite, as well. I'm glad you enjoyed the pairing of Draco and Luna; it was fun to imagine them together. Thanks so much for reading the story and leaving reviews. I appreciate it!
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He's my favorite, as well. I'm glad you enjoyed the pairing of Draco and Luna; it was fun to imagine them together. Thanks so much for reading the story and leaving reviews. I appreciate it!
I really loved this chapter!
Response from HogwartsClassof91 (Author of A Murder of Crows)
I'm glad! Thanks for being patient with Snape's arrival ... hopefully it was worth the wait. ;-)
Response from HogwartsClassof91 (Author of A Murder of Crows)
I'm glad! Thanks for being patient with Snape's arrival ... hopefully it was worth the wait. ;-)
What a superb piece of writing, your Hermione and Severus in particular are so well written. I've read it all in one go, though I think I may have read the begining before, when it wasn't finished. Very satisying, I know I shall be reading it again. Thanks
Response from HogwartsClassof91 (Author of A Murder of Crows)
What lovely praise - thank you so much for taking the time to read my story and leave a review. I'm delighted you enjoyed it!
Response from HogwartsClassof91 (Author of A Murder of Crows)
What lovely praise - thank you so much for taking the time to read my story and leave a review. I'm delighted you enjoyed it!
I started reading this not long after you started posting.....then I stopped reading fan fics for a while. I remembered how much I liked this one, and was happy to see that it was finished, so I just read the whole thing in one sitting. I cannot believe this is your first fic! I've been reading HP fan fiction for YEARS and this is one of my favorites. You write Snape so well! That's no easy feat. Thanks for an amazing story!
I cant believe that was your first attempt at a fic. it was excellent! I thouroughly enjoyed it. !
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Aww, thank you so much! I'm delighted you enjoyed it. :-)
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Aww, thank you so much! I'm delighted you enjoyed it. :-)
First, let me apologise if I have not reviewed before..I simply cannot remember! I have as of now read this lovely story three times and it is like putting on a wonderful pair of slippers. After reading the MOST OCC Severus Snape story EVER I had to read one that would help me wash my brain to remove the wierdness of that story. I chose "A Murder of Crows" and I am glad I did!! Wonderful story...I would NEVER have thought this was a forst attempt!!! Well done! Hugs~dee
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You are too sweet! Thank you so much for leaving this lovely review. I can't tell you how much it means to me, especially since I received some very bizarre reviews on this story (all from one reader) yesterday at a different archive. Everyone is entitled to their opinions, of course, but reviews like this REALLY help me shrug off the other ones. I am SO glad you left me this review. Thanks for reading, dee!!!
Response from deedeebug95 (Reviewer)
I read the other reviews,you put it mildly "it" being the MANY reviews....wow!!! I think the reviewer liked the story over all...boy I have read many,many stories and have never seen anything like that on a review page!! A great story Severus and Hermione are in character the flow was great!! Don't let the bizarre reviews get you down!!! Hugs~dee
Response from HogwartsClassof91 (Author of A Murder of Crows)
You are too sweet! Thank you so much for leaving this lovely review. I can't tell you how much it means to me, especially since I received some very bizarre reviews on this story (all from one reader) yesterday at a different archive. Everyone is entitled to their opinions, of course, but reviews like this REALLY help me shrug off the other ones. I am SO glad you left me this review. Thanks for reading, dee!!!
Response from deedeebug95 (Reviewer)
I read the other reviews,you put it mildly "it" being the MANY reviews....wow!!! I think the reviewer liked the story over all...boy I have read many,many stories and have never seen anything like that on a review page!! A great story Severus and Hermione are in character the flow was great!! Don't let the bizarre reviews get you down!!! Hugs~dee
Okay, I am always wordy, but this might be a whopper. And disjointed because it has been a long day, and being tired might make me ramble more than usual. As just evidenced, LOL.
This may well be one of the best epilogues that I have ever read. Frequently, they either feel like they are just extra junk, not needed in the story. Or characters that were once strong and serious become all mushy and unlike their former selves. Or they try to cover the next fifty years in one thousand words, and in doing so, diminsh their importance. Not a single one of those things happened here. And epilogue should enhance a story, not drag it down, and that is exactly what happened here. Perfection.
I think that you could have killed Hermione and Snape off and I wouldn't have cared because I was so joyful about Sandy and Neville. I had sort of forgotten about both of them, and since I loved both of their characters, why not let them be happy together? Yay!
What a time for Luna's baby to decide to make his appearance. I loved that Hermione considered the fact that Severus may have planned this to get out of his speech.
Let's see ... oh yes, Ron ended up with the pretty-eyed girl. I was happy to see everyone happy. And you made all of that happen without any of it seeming forced. Things just naturally fell into place for everyone.
As for Severus and Hermione, I have loved their interactions-both good and bad-throughout, but I think that this ending scene, where he asks her to marry him, just might be my favorite. Your Severus was perfect to me because he was serious and sincere in the sentiment, but he didn't turn all lovesick and gooey. And Hermione continued to tease him just like always. Their banter has always been fabulous, and this was no different. I loved her taunting him with "old man", and then later him capitulating and calling himself old man. They are adorable in spite of Severus' wish to the contrary.
Okay, I could go on and on, but surely there is a cap on how long a review can go. Although if I haven't reached it in this point of my reading career, I surely never will.
I have very much enjoyed conversing with you through review and responses. I feel like I owe authors a review, not because they demand it, but because they have spent so much time and effort, and poured their heart into something for which they will get minimal recognition and no money. If I had to pay, even a penny, for every hour I have spent reading fanfic over the last few years, I would owe a ton of money. I can't even imagine. I also don't feel like authors are required to respond to review, but I always think it is lovely when they do. I have always wished as I was reading through books, that I could tell the author the things I loved and the things that didn't work for me, or be able to get insight into their reasons for making a literary choice etc. What a delight to be able to do so in fanfic!
I can't believe I waited so long to finish this thing! Truly one of the best I have read in a long time. And I've read a lot. I hope you continue to write. I have read "All You Need is Love," and recall being very amused by it. Perhaps I shall go back and reread since I don't remember much of it, and I wasn't reviewing at the time I read it *listens to you groan over an inbox full of more reviews* :)
Okay, I'll shut up now. You are super talented and I really hope you continue to write. Thanks for entertaining me over the last week!
What a lovely chapter. I was worried that the first time between Draco and Hermione would be more awkward than it was. I mean, it was sufficiently awkward for reality sake, but it could have been worse. I think in the end, his family may be better off without Lucius.
I think maybe Hermione was wise in keeping her memory of the day prior, for the exact reason she mentions.
Poor Severus can't come up with a name for his ... woman. How about the love of his life. That goes quite well with a happy ending, I think.
Off to the epilogue ...
Yay! If Hermione had died, she would have simply died. But it would have completely killed Severus. He would never recover from losing love number two.
I loved that he was under an unbreakable vow. It certainly explains the way he handled some things throughout.
So good that Hermione isn't held responsible for her activity in the lab at Arglist. A happy ending may well be in sight.
Sadly, I must be off to bed (and hopefully finish tomorrow), and I hope that Hermione and Severus do the same.
I know I am not quite at the end yet, but I love when stories go out on top, strong all the way to the end. Barring any unforseen awfulness in the next two chapters, I'd say this one is going to do just that. So excited for the conclusion!
If she had only trusted him, they could be celebrating now. I have no doubt that she will be okay, because you wouldn't bring us this far, only to kill her off, but still, I am nervous.
Good for Severus to be calm and cool (on the outside, anyway) and force her to see the good memories.
And speaking of memories, did I understand that hers were ruined? I was reading so fast by the end that I may have misread that, though. What will she do without them? Not that I think those are pleasant memories that she would want back, but I hope there is no damage from all of their removal. And I suppose that renders them completely unusable, so no worries about someone trying to steal them from her.
I must know more!!!
Okay, I retract my statement from the last chapter in which I said that Hermione was going to kill Severus. Because he will surely kill her first. What was she thinking?!?! I do understand what was at stake if he were on the wrong side, but how furious and hurt is Severus going to be that she doesn't trust him ... again. That is if they make it out of the situation in one piece. Not that I doubt for a minute that Severus could take Lucius with minimal effort, but how is he going to proceed with the plan, if he has to rescue her?!? Stupid girl!
Boy, Hermione is a persistant little thing. She really should have removed the memories over two days time, but I can't fault her for wanting it over and done with.
What is Severus doing to Hermione? I mean I know literally what he is doing, and you can't blame him for not telling her because she would surely protest. But, she is going to kill him, regardless.
“Remember the mare.”
That was the smartest thing he could have said to her. Sill ... she is going to kill him.