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I'm Sacred
fyiagcg4 Reviews | 4 Ratings, 0 Likes, 0 Favorites )
Just a poem I wrote. The title refers to a text message typo, I was trying to tell someone that I was SCARED.
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fyiagcg
Member Since 2005 | 18 Stories | Favorited by 18 | 27 Reviews Written | 52 Review Responses
I was originally an SS/HG shipper that then fell in love with HG/DM as well. I now read and write both. I also have some original fiction and poetry up here on TPP, and love getting feedback on everything.
I have faced some writer's block on my only multi-chaptered story, but I PROMISE nothing is abandoned.
I do love to write, and I love REVIEWS!!
Ah, last thing. I am NOT HBP compliant. And now that I'm updating this profile in November 07, I need to tell you I am NOT DH Compliant
Reviews for I'm Sacred
I think I need a hug now. And maybe some chocolates.Very nice work :)
It's amazing how you formed an entire poem from one little typo, nicely done.
i liked this and thought it expresses the sentiments well of not wanting to take the risk of being hurt.my one criticism, if you are interested, is that the first few stanzas flow very nicely, and then in the last two stanzas it seems like your pushing a little harder to make it work. i thought maybe: "i'll never believe it's not all a big joke when you say that you're not just like those other folks." and in the last, "eventually" seems a tad awkward - maybe change it to "finally"? as i said, i do like it overall.
Response from fyiagcg (Author of I'm Sacred)
i always appreciate a bit of criticism, assuming that it's there to make my writing better and not make me feel like crap about myself. (i took yours as the former)
it also helps when it's bracketed by praise. ;)
What a sad poem of hurt and fear allowing no room for the experience of love. You wrote this strikingly and conveyed well the feelings here. Thanks for writing it.