What was that "Muffliato" at the end for? I thought she lost the baby? 

It's been a splendid, believable, zappy story... unfortunately, your proof-reader should know it's "discreet" not "discrete". 

Profound and powerful, love how you explored and fleshed out these characters in such an intimate and very *human* intriguing way. Excellent, engaging work! Can't wait for either more of this tale (there could be a sequel of sorts...?), or of course, more of Moody!

I feel for Ginny, losing her first baby is tragic, but I think she would have always have been watching for signs of Riddle had she gone to term.

If Bunbley is trying to heal Ginny's soul, Voldermort is not going to like it.

Wow, you promised creepy, and you do not disappoint. 

How can Lucius help to start the madness all over again, he lost his wife, his son, his magic, and his selfrespect in the last war. The old saying is right, never leave someone with nothing to lose, it makes them very dangerous, now Lucius is more dangerous than he ever was.

Mmm, brilliant twists and turns! ove the fleshing out of Tom Riddle, Ginny's strengths and defiance, and again, her strength and will, and Lucius' careful but resilient act of defiance--who'd thought it?And the chilling cliffie... great chapter!

Mmmm, fascinating and mesmerising trance--'patient heal thyself'--soemthing has opened inside her, an unforseen strength, power? great chapter!

ooh, I don't think prodding and poking into the depths of Ginny/Voldemort's mind is going to fair well for Bunbley, no matter how skilled a Healer he may be *biting nails* great chapter!

I love this--love the depiction of possession; the connection of and power connecting them together through all the time and space and (Dark) magic... Truly enjoy your refreshing take and depiction between them, as I've always felt the treatment of Voldemort possessing Ginevera was lightly tossed aside--as if being possessed by one of the greatest Dark Lord's wouldn't have left a lingering trace on any level. I'll stop ranting--just want to say that I enjoy the powerful, provocative tale and your wonderful writing, as always!

Oooh, brilliant! Sneaky, clever, desperate, slippery Slytherin(s)! HA! Deeply enjoyed this slip of a powerful force still thriving in the midst of a Tom Riddle Exhibit--wonderful!

Love Luna and George (these two would definitely have a wonderful quirky chemistry between them, having unique perceptions of others), and love something insidious lingering around, on or in Ginny... Great chapter!

Mmmm. this is brilliant. Just brilliant. Love this unique take on evil incarnate in an irresistable *shell*, and Lucius--putty in the Dark Lord's palm, as slippery and willing as ever, eh? Brilliant, and your writing is a luscious and delectable as always, White Eyebrow!

Wow Tom really loves the sound of his own voice doesn't he. Lucius is not so sunk in self pity as we thought, and Ginny is a true daughter of Griffindor.

I love your characterization of Voldemort.  You made him more complete, more three dimensional than JKR.  And his monologuing was very entertaining.  Reminded me of a twenty-first century Jim Moriarty, a man in love with his voice and himself.  Excellent!

There is a lot of truth in Ginny's nightmare, I just hope she can figure it out before it's to late.

I like where you are going with Luna and George, but Ginny is in all kinds of trouble.

A very creepy start, looking forward to more.

Ooooh!  Lucius' uninvited guest(s) give(s) me the creeps! *shivers*  And I mean that in the best possible way.  You set a tense and intriguing mood in this new story.  I look forward to reading how (if?) evil will prevail in this brave new post-war world.  Well done, White Eyebrow!