I can't remember when I have experienced so much intensity in so few words.  I held my breath as I read one word after another.  Brilliant!

I found myself hoping that Severus would find an outlet that would allow him to return to their world, but his circumstances permit him only to follow the progression of storms as they cross the world.  They mask his uncontrolled magic.

Well done!
Beth

This was so utterly intense! I sat down to read and felt completely drawn through the story. The way you have him talk, the way he manipulated her into the house of mirrors. It was facinating!
I even liked how concerned he was for Hermione's safety and that she should tie back her hair.

Very dramatic piece.

No matter how many times I read this, I always find something new.  Brilliant, as usual.

Very powerful stuff! :)

Poor, mad Severus!  Excellent stream-of-consciousness.  I wasn't sure until the very end what his broken mind (and even he realizes it's broken) might lead him to do to her.  Excellent!