Not That it Mattered
karelia28 Reviews | 28 Ratings, 0 Likes, 18 Favorites )
She added his name—again—as if it was an afterthought. “Severus.” He liked his name on her lips. Not that it mattered.
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Reviews for Not That it Mattered
That was lovely. Nice how he used the idea that it didn't matter--how often is that used as an excuse rather than a reason? Lovely that he realised his error.
Response from karelia (Author of Not That it Mattered)
Thanks,
Response from karelia (Author of Not That it Mattered)
! Glad you liked it!
I loved it!I have lots of ideas why. Not that it really matters.
Response from karelia (Author of Not That it Mattered)
Teehee! Thanks for this thoughtful review! :)
I never even noticed no commas. Good job. I like his inner war in this. :)
Response from karelia (Author of Not That it Mattered)
Hee, thank you! It was quite the challenge to avoid commas. :) Glad you like it!
What a beautiful little story! And you were able to do it without commas! That makes it even more impressive. I enjoyed Severus' inner conflict and his development. And I wrote you a comma-less review :)
Response from karelia (Author of Not That it Mattered)
Thank you! I'm so glad you liked it! And thank you for not using commas either. :)
Just noticed that there are quite a number of commaless stories! You made it rather difficult for yourself, but pulled it off anyway. Nice story.
Response from karelia (Author of Not That it Mattered)
I didn't find it difficult per se. It was challenging rephrasing sentences so that no commas were needed, but I also found it quite fun to do. ;)Thanks for reviewing!
Response from HannahSmith (Reviewer)
Well, I just thought I noticed you were using longer sentences and less dialogue (relatively) than some other stories in this category, which would make it more difficult to leave out all commas. But then who am I to know, as a non-native speaker. Anyway, all stories are delightful to read so far :-D
Response from karelia (Author of Not That it Mattered)
Heh, I never thought about it. The non-native excuse doesn't work for me; I'm not a native speaker either. I do have a love for the language, though, which I guess helps. :D
Excellent! I was afraid a no-comma fic might seem a bit choppy, but it doesn't. However, I can appreciate the thought and talent it takes to produce such a story. What an evil challenge,lol.I liked how heartrending it feels though. (Even without commas.) And the passing of time works well. 
I am very happy he came to his senses.Cheers,Stef =o)
Response from karelia (Author of Not That it Mattered)
It was quite an evil challenge *nods* LOL But I enjoyed doing it. Thanks for your lovely review! :)
Very lovely and blissfully free of commas. :)
Response from karelia (Author of Not That it Mattered)
Thank you! I didn't realise how much I depend on the blighters...
Absolutely wonderful. I feel very tempted to join this particular challenge because, for once, I won't have to care where I should put all that infuriating commas. ;o)
Response from karelia (Author of Not That it Mattered)
Thank you for your kind words.*grins* I do hope that many will join this one; it makes for a wonderful writing exercise! :)
I am glad to see that this is supposed to be continued. Well done, dear!
Response from karelia (Author of Not That it Mattered)
Oops, my bad. It's a one-shot. Thanks for reviewing!
Response from Muggline (Reviewer)
*sniff* too bad. But I love it nevertheless!
Ah, the clever use of the dash in place of the comma. Loved this story, by the way.Liz
Response from karelia (Author of Not That it Mattered)
Thank you!Yes, I think without using other punctuation, it would have been a lot more difficult, although it was quite challenging already, LOL.
I loved it!!!!
Response from karelia (Author of Not That it Mattered)
*smiles* Glad you did. Thank you.
The stoic man finally realized it mattered! He can be so stubbornly silly at times. It's funny how you don't realize how much you use something until you can't. I'm sure this was much harder than you made it look. 
Response from karelia (Author of Not That it Mattered)
*smiles* It was harder than I thought it would be. For once, the plotting was the easy part. LOL. Once I'd written it all, I started turning every single sentence over to wonder about show or tell, but I soon gave up. In the end, all that was important to me was to oblige the prompt, and I really didn't care about show or tell or, in fact, sentence structure. It was, all in all, a humbling experience. LOL.Thanks, Deb!
Good job! Exclamations, questions, and descriptions of actions took the place of where we'd often see commas. I can see how you were lured into this. It does sound like fun to try to attempt it. My tendency to write lengthy sentences and to write lists would make it very hard for me!
Response from karelia (Author of Not That it Mattered)
Thank you! It wasn't easy, but a very worthy challenge, one that took me well beyond my comfort zone. :)
This is amazing. I can really see how leaving out the commas makes for powerful sentences:)This is perfect:)Fizzabella
Response from karelia (Author of Not That it Mattered)
*grin*Believe me, it was a challenge. It does sound easier than it is...Thank you so much for your kind words and the stars! *pats them fondly*
Ah, poignancy without a comma. It can happen! Love it; loved the little challenge!!
Response from karelia (Author of Not That it Mattered)
That was in large parts thanks to you. Thank you! :)You know what's really funny? When I told you to "go write some more," you nearly fainted. And hours later, you did. LOL
Response from notsosaintly (Reviewer)
I was definitely in a different frame of mind. I hardly remember you telling me that.
Response from karelia (Author of Not That it Mattered)
Wow. That was, I think, in my review to the Cissy/Sev fic. I'm so glad to see you perkier!
Response from notsosaintly (Reviewer)
*looks down* Oh, you mean my mood!
Response from karelia (Author of Not That it Mattered)
*THWACKTHWACKTHWACKTHWACKTHWACKTHWACK**falls over laughing*
Nice! Hope it was fun to write 
Response from karelia (Author of Not That it Mattered)
*laughs*It was far more challenging than I thought it would be, but yeah, it was great fun. :)Thank you! *pats the shinies*
I loved the repitition and pacing of this. I absolutely couldn't resist reading yours and NSS's comma-less stories. And, I must say, you did an amazing job. It flowed really well for have so many shorter sentences. The progression was very real for it being such a short story.All in all, I enjoyed it very much. Thanks to sunny33 for challenging you and NSS for coming up with the prompt!
Response from karelia (Author of Not That it Mattered)
Thank you, hon!It was, without a doubt, a really great writing exercise. It forced me beyond my comfort zone because I love long sentences, and those were almost impossible to do without the trusted comma. I am very happy that it's not a boring read. *ponders revenge in the shape of a challenge for sunny33*
Little did she know that he was with her the whole time. LIttle does he realized that he just confessed he's been with her the whole time. Well done.
Response from karelia (Author of Not That it Mattered)
Thank you. :)
you certainly rose to the challenge and created an entertaining little gem besides. :D
Response from karelia (Author of Not That it Mattered)
Teehee, thank you! *pats the shinies*I should lure you into this, too, shouldn't I... *ponders*
Response from kittylefish (Reviewer)
don't think i haven't already been thinking about it. *iz eazily lured (or do i mean lurid?)*
Response from karelia (Author of Not That it Mattered)
Muahaha. I so love corrupting friends. :)
Response from kittylefish (Reviewer)
then it's your lucky day, as i do so love being corrupted. ;)
p.s. i've started working on it already. and i am already feeling the lack of that dear little punctuation mark. *sighs*
Naw!
Response from karelia (Author of Not That it Mattered)
Oh, yeah. Totally. *nods gravely*Hee. Was it really that horrible?
Response from morgaine_dulac (Reviewer)
Haha. It was sweet, it truly was. But you know me. I have issues with sweet ;-)
Wow, no commas - not even in the dialogue! I am SO impressed - that takes a lot of thought and planning. Add to that the fact that the story was well-written and enjoyable, and hey - you ROCK! Thank you very much for posting this; I really enjoyed it. Cat
Response from karelia (Author of Not That it Mattered)
*grins* It was rather challenging, this challenge. LOL.Thank you for your kind words!
Clever girl! Have to make the challenge harder next time...
Response from karelia (Author of Not That it Mattered)
Good heavens, even harder??? LOLThank you! *pats the shiny stars*
Wonderful story, dear.
Response from karelia (Author of Not That it Mattered)
Thank you, I'm so glad you liked it! *pats the shinies*
I like it! I like it! But I really want to know what the boys' reaction to a mini-Sev/'Mione blend is.
Response from karelia (Author of Not That it Mattered)
Not that it matters. LOLThanks for reviewing!
Response from irishredlass (Reviewer)
LOL now that was really baaaad!