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The Devil's Game
Ugly Kitten186 Reviews | 186 Ratings, 0 Likes, 87 Favorites )
The future is bleak for the wizarding world after Voldmort died. Scorpius Malfoy and Molly Weasley become the future’s hope for the past. They enlist fourteen-year-old Hermione Granger’s help with two stipulations: She can never return to the future and she can’t remember it. Dealing with the Marauders is the least of their troubles. Severus/Hermione eventually, Lucius/Hermione to start. Scorpius/Hermione in a sibling relationship. Time-Turner fic with a twist.
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Reviews for The Devil's Game
Very interesting beginning. It seems full of adventures. I'm gonna run to read next chapter.
Response from Ugly Kitten (Author of The Devil's Game)
I've got a few surprises up my sleeves. Thanks for reading. ^_^
Nice opening hook!! I am waiting excitedly for the next chapter. This has lots of potential.
Response from Ugly Kitten (Author of The Devil's Game)
Thank you so much! ^_^ I'm just waiting for my beta to get it back to me.
Quite lost there at the end, as I'm assuming I'm supposed to be. Okay, here are the questions you probably can't answer: Why do they have to be Obliviated? What just happened? Have they just traveled into the past, or was she Obliviated? And why? Sorry, I'm being redundant!
Response from Ugly Kitten (Author of The Devil's Game)
The Obliviate will become clearer later on. Several things happened between now and then, but she won't recall them until much later. And yes, you should be lost. ^-^ Thank you for reading!
I like the premise and I think Lucius would do a thing like this including persecute his own grandson. Though it still boggles me that JKR thought Ron/Hermione. Geeze!
Response from Ugly Kitten (Author of The Devil's Game)
I have a slightly varient view on Lucius, but that'll will become apparent later in the story so I won't bore you with details. The Ron/Hermione thing bothers me, too, especially with all the fights they had. Thank you for reading~! ^_^
It's okay. As the other reviewer said, it kind of jumps around, and the tenses are a bit messed up right in the first sentence: "I was Hermione Granger, and I am 14 years old." No matter what time period she speaks from, she IS Hermione Granger, and as this is past tense, she WAS at that time 14 years old, so it should be the other way around.Molly Weasley being completely different also struck me as somewhat Sue-ish... I can't come up with any reason that makes sense why she would have short, spiky white hair. Is it just supposed to be because she's old, or because she, for reasons beyond me, decided to be 'cool' or something? But if it's just old age, why would it be spiky?...Just little things like that which bothered me. I'll check out this story in the future, though, to see if it gets better as it goes.
Response from Ugly Kitten (Author of The Devil's Game)
I've always had a horrid time with tenses, I am trying to keep them straight, though. ^^; The reason Molly changed her appearance may or may not become apparent. Mostly it was to conceal her real identity. Thank you for giving me a chance! ^_^
I kind of like it, but it seems to jump all over in the conversations, like the charecters know stuff we don't, or rather Hermonie shouldn't yet know. If you slow it down it might make more sense, but I do like it so far.
Response from Ugly Kitten (Author of The Devil's Game)
The conversation was meant mostly to confuse Hermione, and thereby confuse us. It'll all make sense in the end. ^-^ Thank you!
Powerful beginning -- I look forward to reading more.
Response from Ugly Kitten (Author of The Devil's Game)
Thank you very much! More is on the way. ^_^
Sounds very interesting and original! I like your pairings...
Response from Ugly Kitten (Author of The Devil's Game)
Thanks so much! I like them, too. Minerva needs some love in her life...as does Sev. ^-^
I normally wait for a second chapter before I start a new story, but your story concept caught my attention. I can't wait to see what you do with the rest of the story. This is interesting. I take it Molly won't be obliviated?
Response from Ugly Kitten (Author of The Devil's Game)
Molly is the only one who will not be, yes. Glad to hear my concept is good, it's what I was aiming for. ^__^ Thanks so much!
this is awesome! but there's no such thing as an ugly kitten.. I love time travel and this is so different, props to you.
Response from Ugly Kitten (Author of The Devil's Game)
LOL, no one likes my name. I think it suits me rather well, though. ^-^ I wanted something other than the usual Time-Turner fic. I hope you come back for the next chapter! Thanks so much!
Very interesting and intriguing start; I'm looking forward to more!
Response from Ugly Kitten (Author of The Devil's Game)
Thank you so much! More is on the way - my new beta is supposed to send it back tomorrow. ^_^