Chapter 1
Chapter 1 of 4
ShadowSeverus Snape is dead. But why can't his spirit move on, and WHY can't anyone see him?
ReviewedDisclaimer: No money is being made from this story. Thanks to JKR for letting me play with her toys. They will be replaced in more or less the same condition.
A/N: Huge thanks to my betas, who will remain nameless until the reveal. You beautiful babes are wonderful!
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** “Look … at… me …” he whispered.
The green eyes found the black, but after a second something in the depths of the dark pair seemed to vanish, leaving them fixed, blank and empty. The hand holding Harry thudded to the floor, and Snape moved no more.
… Hermione glanced at Snape’s body, then hurried back to the tunnel entrance. Ron followed her. Harry gathered up the Invisibility Cloak, then looked down at Snape. He did not know what to feel, except shock at the way Snape had been killed, and the reason for which it had been done… **
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Arms folded across his chest and a fierce scowl marring his features, Severus Snape leant against the wall of the Shrieking Shack, glaring down at the floor. Various footprints had disturbed the dust that had collected over the decades. At his feet was a large pool of congealing blood, and in the middle … his dead body.
If Severus could sigh right now, he would. It was bad enough he had failed to warn Potter (he could only hope the memories he had given him would help the thick-headed dolt put it all together), but now he couldn’t even die properly! Could this day get any worse?
Why hadn’t he “moved on,” gone to “a better place,” passed on to “the next level of existence”? This was so frustrating.
“What the bloody hell do I do now?” He yelled at his still bleeding body. His vacant eyes gazed back at him. No answers there.
Severus growled in frustration, pacing pack and forth along the cold, miserable room. Vaguely, he noticed how his feet made no impression in the dirt. He was nothing but a presence, a manifestation, a … ghost.
Severus’ head snapped up. The Bloody Baron! He had been dead a long time. He may be able to help Severus to figure out what was going on.
With one last disgusted look at his broken body, Severus left the Shack and headed up to the castle.
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A huge, decapitated body lay at the foot of the steps leading up to the front doors. As Severus neared it, he realised with a shock that it was Nagini. He had done it. Somehow Potter had managed to make the Dark Lord lower his defences around that infernal beast long enough for him to kill it. Will wonders never cease?
Inside, the Entrance Hall was chaos; rubble, shards of glass and precious stones lay everywhere. Here there were more blood stains. Severus knew without a doubt that this was human blood.
The doors to the Great Hall were flung open, one of them hanging drunkenly by one hinge. Contradictory sounds of both laughter and sobbing came from within. Severus was unable to resist. He had to know if… how it had ended.
The Great Hall was filled with people. McGonagall was near the raised dais where the teachers ate, comforting a large group of red-headed people… Weasleys. Severus felt something cold clutch at his chest. Surely not one of them…
Severus tore his gaze from the group and forced his eyes to survey the crowd once again. His gaze again came to an abrupt halt as it found two still figures on the floor, Tonks and Lupin. He had never really forgiven the man for his part of that group, but he never really wished him ill. Not to mention Nymphadora. Yes, it was always easy to get a rise out of her, but he had always secretly been quite fond of her bumbling and clumsy, yet effective ways. He had heard they had a child now…
Shaking his head, Severus’ gaze landed on a silent group. All three Malfoys were sitting at the end of the Slytherin table, none of them looking at each other or anyone around them. If the Malfoys were here, then surely –
Severus looked more closely at the mass of people. Many of them were yelling, drinking and laughing. From the back of the room came the drunken toast, “To Harry Potter! The boy who lives again!”
Relief flooded Severus. It had not been for nothing. Somehow the boy had figured it out and lived to kill the Dark Lord once and for all!
Severus’ relief was short lived as a strange sensation flooded his body. Someone had just walked through him. For a brief moment, Severus had forgotten about his death. Looking about again, he noticed many people looking in his direction, but not one person looking at him. If he was a ghost, surely he would be visible?
Quickly, Severus turned and headed for the dungeons. That was where the baron was bound to be.
Half an hour later, Severus had still not found the elusive ghost. It was also very frustrating not being able to open doors. Just when he was ready to give up and try to find one of the other ghosts (Heaven help him if he had to ask a Gryffindor) a flash of silver caught the corner of his eye.
“Baron,” Severus called commandingly, confident the Baron would answer his summons. He had never ignored him before. When the spectre did not answer him, Severus strode around the corner, watching the ghost float slowly away from him.
“Baron!” Severus barked, quickening his pace until he was standing in front of the ghost.
“Baron, I need your assistance.” The Baron floated on, as if completely unaware of his presence. “Baron, for the love of Merlin, at least pretend you still have some respect for me!”
As the Bloody Baron floated past him, completely unaware of the former Head of House standing two feet away from him, something cold and hard landed in the pit of Severus’ stomach.
He was dead, but not a ghost. He was a phantom, but not visible, even to other ghosts. No one could help him, because no one could see him.
“What the bloody hell do I do now?”
Suddenly, with an inaudible pop, Severus Snape disappeared.
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While every other soul was up in the castle, celebrating, commiserating, comforting and grieving, one other snuck into the crude and shabby hut that had seen the passing of one of the Wizarding Worlds greatest, but unsung heroes. Slowly, the figure made its way further into the building.
Quickly, quietly, it found its target. Then, as silently as it had arrived, the figure disappeared, taking the body of Severus Snape with it.
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A/N: I have used Prompt no 6: The kids leave after Snape dies. He sits up and realizes he is a ghost.
** Direct quote from Harry Potter and the Deathly Hallows, Chapter Thirty Two, The Elder Wand, pg 528, UK edition and Chapter Thirty Three, The Prince’s Tale, pg 530
(No infringement intended)
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Latest 25 Reviews for Of Ghosts and Men
46 Reviews | 6.5/10 Average
I don't know if I should start reading this. It has not been updated since June. I hate to commit to unfinished fiction but this one has so much promise. I am intrigued. Please say you will continue!
Response from Shadow (Author of Of Ghosts and Men)
I apologise from the bottom of my heart. My husband and I recently started a new business and I have been running around like a crazy person. I have so much reading and writing to catch up on, but i do promise I will finish this story.
Response from Shadow (Author of Of Ghosts and Men)
I apologise from the bottom of my heart. My husband and I recently started a new business and I have been running around like a crazy person. I have so much reading and writing to catch up on, but i do promise I will finish this story.
Thrilled at this latest chapter. Worth the wait! Thanks a lot. Looking forward to more mysteries and some answers.
Response from Shadow (Author of Of Ghosts and Men)
Thank you. I hope the rest wont disapoint!
Response from Shadow (Author of Of Ghosts and Men)
Thank you. I hope the rest wont disapoint!
I really like this story - good characterisations plus the 'little'details such as the quill brushing backwards and forwards on her chin. Oh and the final line offering Snape tea is so incongruous, but so Hermione when you can think of all the other questions she must have. Brilliant!Looking forward to the next chapter.Cheers, Rita
Response from Shadow (Author of Of Ghosts and Men)
Yip, I thought Hermione may just be at a loss for words for a change. I am glad you like this. I am diligently working on the next chapter. Hopefully it will be up soon.
Thank you for not having Ron and Hermione a couple (one of the more puzzling things JKR did). And I love that Hermione can also see Snape. This could work out quite interestingly if it's only the trio who can see him. I can see the day in the court and the ensuing thoughts by the Wizengamot that they had all gone mad.
Response from Shadow (Author of Of Ghosts and Men)
Yip, they may think the trio had gone a bit barmy from all the camping and living on mushrooms!
Response from phoenix (Reviewer)
That is the perfect way to put it. LOL There's a part of me that's just envisioning that and ROTFLMAO
I don't know if this is wrong, but this chapter makes me laugh. LOL I Loved Snape's stream of consciousness as he realizes that Potter is the only one who can see him. But the part before that, with him talking to Lily was very moving and well done.
Response from Shadow (Author of Of Ghosts and Men)
Yay. I am so glad it did. I wanted the beginnig to be about Snape and Lily, and the rest to be about the humorous sitiation he finds himself in when he can only be seen by Potter!
Oooh, that is a very ominous start. I'm looking forward to seeing where this goes. A ghost, but not quite a ghost. Very interesting that there would be a transition period or something. Well done.
Response from Shadow (Author of Of Ghosts and Men)
Thank you. What has happened to Severus will be explained later on.
Poor Severus, he's dead (or is he?) and the one person he can turn to is Potter - the only person he can turn to!! and Hermione Granger!!
To have to be so desperate that he has to rely on the two students who get his craw every time!
He must really be needing help to agree to this!
Poor Sev!
Response from Shadow (Author of Of Ghosts and Men)
Thats exactly it. He has to ask the two people he would rather never see again, all because Harry seems to be the only one who can see him.
So, all three can, but no one else? Weird, but neat. I can't wait for the explaination!
Response from Shadow (Author of Of Ghosts and Men)
Thanks. The explaination will come soon.
I loved Hermione's reaction when she saw Severus :D
This is getting more and more intriguing - I'm looking forward to seeing what happens next!
Response from Shadow (Author of Of Ghosts and Men)
Thank you. I felt that she needed to fall back on politeness in order to cope with a strange situation. I am glad you are enjoying it.
The chapters are very well-written. The essence of the characters, especially Snape, are accurately captured. The dialog rings true. Please keep the story going; I'm looking foward to reading it. Thanks!
Response from Shadow (Author of Of Ghosts and Men)
Thank you so much! I am so glad you are enjoying this! The next chapter should be coming soon.
Good chapter - It was good when the way you described Ron looking when he saw Severus and Hermione did not know it yet. The description was priceless. Good job.
Response from Shadow (Author of Of Ghosts and Men)
Thank you!
Response from Shadow (Author of Of Ghosts and Men)
Thank you!
I love Ron and the canary cream! and how self-possessed of Hermione, how sensible to fall back on good manners (that's what manners are there for, to fall back on when we are in need of logical thought.)Delightful!
Response from Shadow (Author of Of Ghosts and Men)
Thank you. The canary cream was my favourite part to write. I can only imagine Hermione falling back on good manners when she is completely flabbagasted in a situation!
Response from Shadow (Author of Of Ghosts and Men)
Thank you. The canary cream was my favourite part to write. I can only imagine Hermione falling back on good manners when she is completely flabbagasted in a situation!
Oh NO it is worse than Snape thought all the golden trio can see him. giggle snort! I look forward to the next chatper!
Response from Shadow (Author of Of Ghosts and Men)
Yip. poor Snape. I'm sure all he wants in his (after) life is to only be able to converse with the trio!
A black lily how poinant. Now why is harry the only one who can see him? What sorts of torture do you have dreamed up for my belvoed Snape? Hummm>
Response from Shadow (Author of Of Ghosts and Men)
Poor little Snape. All will be explained (eventually) as to why no one else can see him.
Well this is a fine start! He is not a ghost but a phantom. I have no idea what the properties of phantoms are, this is going to be a fun ride! Woot!
Response from Shadow (Author of Of Ghosts and Men)
Thank you. It will be explained later what exactly happened to him.
LOL for Hermione's reaction. She still doesn't know Severus isn't exactly alive, but it's funny all the same.
Response from Shadow (Author of Of Ghosts and Men)
I wanted to make Hermione a little gobsmacked when she saw the man who was supposed to be dead. Thank you for reviewing.
Perhaps only those that believe he was good can see him?
Response from Shadow (Author of Of Ghosts and Men)
The reason why only Harry is able to see Snape will be answered in later chapters. Thank you for reviewing!
I like the beginning of this. I wonder who it was that took his body and whether that was the reason he suddenly disappeared. It didn't look like he did so voluntarily. Perhaps he can only be so far away from the corpse at any given time? Like he's somehow chained to it.
Response from Shadow (Author of Of Ghosts and Men)
Hopefully all your questions will be answered in futeure chapters. I will be adressing how he disappeared soon. Thank you for taking the time to review!
Very interesting beginning. I personally deplore the work 'snuck' that you used towards the end of the chapter, but the new dictionary informs me that it is now aceptable. ARGGGGHHHH! (I remember very clearly my sixth-grade teacher telling us, "'Snuck' is not a word, it is 'sneaked.'")
Other than 'snuck,' I like this very much and did not 'mark off' any for that one slip, which i suppose I am not allowed now to call a slip. Lookiing forward to more chapters and the answers to some of my questions.
Response from Shadow (Author of Of Ghosts and Men)
I do apologise for the use of a depolrable word. I am glad though that you enjoyed the rest of the chapter. I hope future ones will answer all your questions. Thank you for reviewing.
Intriguing beginning. I am looking forward to more!
Response from Shadow (Author of Of Ghosts and Men)
Thank you. More should be up soon.
That was a mean cliffie...please do not keep us in suspense!
Response from Shadow (Author of Of Ghosts and Men)
Yes, it was. *Evil grin*
Next chapter should be up soon.
Response from Shadow (Author of Of Ghosts and Men)
Yes, it was. *Evil grin*
Next chapter should be up soon.
Wow, confusing. I can't wait to see what is going on...
Response from Shadow (Author of Of Ghosts and Men)
Yes, at first it is a bit confusing, but more will be revealed.
Response from Shadow (Author of Of Ghosts and Men)
Yes, at first it is a bit confusing, but more will be revealed.
Oh oh, what a way to go...*grins*
I like it, it got my attention and I will come back for more so please.........
My best wishes for this great start
Cloud
Response from Shadow (Author of Of Ghosts and Men)
Thank you so much. Next chapter is with my beta, so it should be up soon.
Response from Shadow (Author of Of Ghosts and Men)
Thank you so much. Next chapter is with my beta, so it should be up soon.
Liked the first chapter - cannot wait to see how you weave in that Hermione is the only one to see him. Also his existence - why in this form. I am so looking forward to more chapters on this one
Response from Shadow (Author of Of Ghosts and Men)
Thank you for your review. More should be up soon, and more will be revealed.
Response from Shadow (Author of Of Ghosts and Men)
Thank you for your review. More should be up soon, and more will be revealed.