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In Hiding Chapter 1: In Hiding
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In Hiding

In Hiding

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HBAR

Alone ... desperate ... in hiding

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He ran. Unsure of the distance, he ran just to escape the scene. Muggles hated his kind, so he knew his best bet was to make it to Diagon Alley. His hand was throbbing, but if he could just make it there, he could rest.

He slipped through the Leaky Cauldron, then rested out back while awaiting entrance to Diagon Alley.

Once inside, he stopped for a moment, realizing for the first time that he had no plan. He'd acted out of necessity, and now he would have to wing it. For how long? A week, a month? He'd never been the smart one, but he knew that his actions in the next few hours would determine his survival. The shops here would soon be closing, so he hid behind some bushes to wait.

Diagon Alley after dark was disconcerting, and he entered Eeylops Owl Emporium by mistake. The hooting and screeching reached a fever pitch as he hurried down the main aisle, causing the shopkeeper to come down from his residence and demand, “Who's there?” The intruder hid in the storeroom, silent.

Adrenaline on an empty stomach made him nauseous, so once all was clear, his next stop was for food.

So cold … tired. Instinct kicked in, and he made several more stops to procure the perfect bed.

He awoke the next morning to the Wizarding Wireless where several shop owners were reporting mysterious nighttime activities.

“Nothing is missing,” Madam Malkin reported, “but some of the robes were shredded. Men's, women's … they didn't discriminate.”

“It's curious that the vandal would take the risk of coming into the store, scratching up the display case and then leaving. It was risky, with no benefit,” said Florean Fortescue.

And so it continued. Bags of food ripped to pieces at Magical Menagerie, pages torn from books at Flourish and Blotts. Someone was on the loose, and the lack of motive was unnerving. Everyone was on high alert, for while Voldemort had recently vanished, there were surely devoted followers lurking in the shadows, preying on the fine folk of Diagon Alley. It was in the Daily Prophet, so it was true, of course.

I have to get out of here.

It was while hiding behind some shelving in Slug and Jiggers that his savior appeared in the form of a young boy. The red hair and tattered bag on his shoulder was a giveaway to the boy's surname. The Weasleys … they'll accept me without question.

He scurried over to the boy, climbed up on the counter, and jumped into his bag.

At the Burrow, Percy was emptying his things from the shopping trip that day. Inside was one item he hadn't purchased.

“Hey, little fellow, come on out. I won't hurt you.” Percy held out his hand, and the invitation was accepted. “Mom, he followed me home. Can I keep him?”

If rats could smile, this one would have.


A/N: Many thanks to my lovely and talented beta.

Prompt: An unseen presence unsettles the denizens of Diagon Alley.


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Latest 25 Reviews for In Hiding

28 Reviews  |  3.86/10 Average

10/10

mick42

Pity one of the owls cages wasn't left open, it would have been justice. Very well done.

Response from HBAR (Author of In Hiding)

Yes, that would have changed a lot of things, wouldn't it.  Still, I wouldn't have made any effort to save him.  Thanks for the read and review.

Response from HBAR (Author of In Hiding)

Yes, that would have changed a lot of things, wouldn't it.  Still, I wouldn't have made any effort to save him.  Thanks for the read and review.

10/10

Bettina

urgh, how could you?! How could you make me sympathise with HIM?!  An excellent little chapter that was (thankfully?) missing in the original.

Response from HBAR (Author of In Hiding)

Sorry! *pats you reassuringly* :)In the books, the details of this event are kind of vague, so it is hard telling how he got from Sirius to the Weasleys.  It intrigued me.Thanks so much for reading and reviewing!

0/10

Keppiehed

Oooh! Chilling! I like this PoV ... very effective, and creative. You show that you are able to write romance, humor, and drama with equal ease--that isn't easy to do, and I commend you for stretching out of your comfort zone. Very well done!

Response from HBAR (Author of In Hiding)

Yes, you know how much I fight leaving my comfort zone, but it happens occasionally.  I'm glad you liked this.

10/10

astopperindeath

i absolutely love "how percy found scabbers" stories.  this was excellent!

Response from HBAR (Author of In Hiding)

Thank you so much!  It is really hard to know if something you write is any good.  I hope the ability to discern such a thing comes with time and experience.  I appreciate the read and review.

0/10

mwk

Cool!

Response from HBAR (Author of In Hiding)

Thanks!

0/10

quaffswinegaily

That sneaky, wee rat!

Response from HBAR (Author of In Hiding)

Yes, he's a menace, that one.  Thanks for reading and reviewing.

0/10

silverdoe

A very clever way of how wormtail ended up with Percy.

Response from HBAR (Author of In Hiding)

Thank you.

10/10

HBAR

Pettigrew is good for nothing!

Response from HBAR (Reviewer)

Too true!

0/10

peppermint

I always knew Pettigrew was a creeper, but this takes it to a whole new level!

Response from HBAR (Author of In Hiding)

I couldn't agree more.  Thanks for reading and reviewing.

0/10

Hechicera

Wow, great suspense and twist at the end!

Response from HBAR (Author of In Hiding)

Thank you!

10/10

sweetflag

Now that's clever... and it neatly fits in with canon. Thank you for the good read.

Response from HBAR (Author of In Hiding)

Thanks!  I'm glad you enjoyed it.

0/10

sunny33

Percy, you know you shouldn't take in strays! :0

Response from HBAR (Author of In Hiding)

Yes, let's hope he learns his lesson. 

10/10

Dreamy_Dragon

This really could have happened in canon - lovely take on the prompt!

Response from HBAR (Author of In Hiding)

Thank you so much for reading and reviewing.  That is the beauty of fanfiction ... we get to fill in the holes of canon.

0/10

Severus49

Oooh, rotten rotten rotten! Pettigrew, that slimy, rotten, no-good rotter!

Response from HBAR (Author of In Hiding)

Nothing more for me to say.  I think you just about covered it all here :)  Thanks for reading and reviewing.

0/10

debjunk

So that's what happened.  ROFL.

Response from HBAR (Author of In Hiding)

One of the many ways it could have gone down.  If only Percy had kicked him to the curb ...

10/10

blue artemis

Oh, my. 

Response from HBAR (Author of In Hiding)

Indeed.  Thanks for reading and reviewing.

0/10

scaranda

Oh, I did like that. I just wish he'd slipped into my messages though; I'd have hit with a spade when I found him.Super use of the prompt, and as Rose of the West suggested, a nice little vignette of a missing part of canon.

Response from HBAR (Author of In Hiding)

The best kind of rat is a dead rat *hands you a spade*  Thanks for reading and reviewing.

0/10

HermioneJeanSnape

Ooh, Pettigrew, you son of a- hmph. Very well written.

Response from HBAR (Author of In Hiding)

Yes, he is ... well, a rat.  I'm pleased that you liked this.

0/10

nata

The if-onlys in this story could turn the whole canon series upside down. So much potential for vanquishing a pest, yet somehow he managed to avoid all rat traps. Darn!

Response from HBAR (Author of In Hiding)

Yes, if -only there were a store in Diagon Alley specializing in rat poison :)

10/10

Owlbait

Oooh very cool take on the prompt, well done

Response from HBAR (Author of In Hiding)

Thanks!  I'm glad you liked it.

10/10

nagandsev

Brilliant!! Simply, brilliant! Brilliant use of a very pivitol point in canon *goosebumps* - love the inner workings of Pettigrews mind - thank you mystery writer!

Response from HBAR (Author of In Hiding)

Oh, you've made my day!  I am so glad you liked this.  Thanks for reading and reviewing.

0/10

herbologist

Brilliant idea! You kept me guessing who it might be until almost the very end.

Response from HBAR (Author of In Hiding)

Thank you so much for reading and reviewing.

0/10

ofankoma

This is so unexpected. And fabulous. And that last line, following the innocence of young Percy's request? Powerfully, powerfully disturbing.

Response from HBAR (Author of In Hiding)

Powerfully, powerfully disturbing.What a compliment!  Thank you so much for your kind words.

10/10

Aurette

Excellent!  And that's how Scabbers came to the Burrow!

Response from HBAR (Author of In Hiding)

Yeah, it seemed like a better idea than him wandering up through the sewer :)Thanks for reading and reviewing.

0/10

Rose of the West

Ooo... interesting. That's a brilliant missing moment from the canon.

Response from HBAR (Author of In Hiding)

Thank you so much.  I'm pleased that you liked this.

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