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sunny33A doctor discovers he does not always really know his patients.
ReviewedMrs Enid Perkins was one of those patients a sensible GP tried to avoid. If discovered away from the protective walls of the surgery, her strident voice could be heard by all complaining about the appalling state of the health system, or worse still, how poor Percy’s prostate woes were no better and, ‘Exactly what are you going to do about it, Doctor?’
The woman controlled the lives of her husband and children with reins of steel, allowing no diagnosis to go unquestioned and no treatment unchallenged. But still she returned, week after week, leaving quailing receptionists and frustrated nurses in her wake.
One day, Mrs Perkins sat in the waiting room quietly. She did not arrive ten minutes early, demanding to be seen immediately. Neither did she harass young mothers, whose children were usually in her opinion quite out of control. No harrumphs of disgust were heard as she flicked through the pages of the latest women’s magazines.
In my office, she failed to berate me for my lack of a tie and sat without ceremony.
The breast lump she allowed me to examine, after declining a useless chit of a girl as a chaperone, was hard and craggy and accompanied by an obvious lymph node.
The indomitable old lady offered no argument to the likely diagnosis of breast cancer. She had no comment to make regarding my plan to refer her urgently to the dreadful local hospital. Sitting quiet and still, she stared at the wall opposite as tears rolled down her wrinkled cheeks.
“Whatever will Percy do without me?” she asked.
An awkward pat of her arm was my only reply as Enid Perkins crumpled before my eyes. Some time later, dry-eyed and stiff-backed, she settled her account and left the surgery.
I did not see her again. Swallowed whole by the bureaucratic machine that was the Public Hospital and Palliative Care Service, prescriptions alone were my only contribution to her care as she rapidly faded. And died. My failure to know just what to say prevented any positive action on my part.
Three months after she died, Percy Perkins spoke for the first time of her during a routine visit. “You know, doc, it was odd. My Enid never once cried, not even at the end.”
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A/N: Both Enid and the doctor are figments of my imagination. However, they are moulded by twenty-five years experience practising medicine and the personalities and situations that I have encountered over those years. So often, I become aware the face presented to me in the consulting room is a careful construct, and the real person behind the patient remains a mystery.
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Latest 25 Reviews for Enid
11 Reviews | 6.36/10 Average
This is one of the best character studies I've read. I imagine a lot of us can identify with Enid at one time or other in our lives. I know I can. Beth
Response from sunny33 (Author of Enid)
Thanks, Beth. :)
Brilliant , touching, and real. What better thing can I say than that? I am so glad I decided to read this. Thank you for sharing this. Have you sent it off to magazines yet?
Response from sunny33 (Author of Enid)
That never occurred to me. :)
Oh honey... you just, wow, that's sad. God. That's about all I can think, 'God, that's sad.' I'm not about to go off myself or anything, but that's one of the saddest things I've read in a while, to see a woman crack for love and fear. I suppose that means you've done a brilliant job, but right now I'm just shaking my head and possibly rereading.
Response from sunny33 (Author of Enid)
Thank you for reading and for the lovely review. :)
I know this lady. Great despription.
Response from sunny33 (Author of Enid)
I expect most GPs would. :)
nice to see you in the ofic category! very interesting little vignette about the faces people put on. or this one person, anyway.
Response from sunny33 (Author of Enid)
Thanks, kitty. xx :)
Beautifully written, we all know people like that I'm sure.
Response from sunny33 (Author of Enid)
Thank you, :)
You've beautifully captured the complexity of real people - something writers strive to do with our characters but can never quite manage, not fully. We are too aware of the need to make them sympathetic. Otherwise, we lose audience. The dichotomy between what Enid showed the world - even her own husband - and what she felt inside is heartbreaking and reads true. Thank you for sharing this.
Response from sunny33 (Author of Enid)
Thanks. :)
This is sad, but so true. I am a nurse in a specialty that doesn't have to give bad news too frequently, but I have encountered Enid many times, and it is never any easier to deal with her type, no matter how many times you see it. You think the abrasive, demanding personality is hard to deal with, until you see the side of them that is vulnerable, but it is so hard to know how to respond and console them. People really are a mystery, even the ones you think you know well. I think I took a wrong turn to end up in original fiction, but I am glad I did. Thanks for sharing.
Response from sunny33 (Author of Enid)
You summed it up beautifully! :)
Wow powerfull, so sad but such a brave woman up until the end to endure something so horrible as that.
Response from sunny33 (Author of Enid)
Thank you, Marty. :)
Those single painless shotty nodes....Anyway, I really liked Enid in this short piece. The reader sees different layers of her by learning of her from others -- both the narrator and her husband.Thank you for posting this.
Response from sunny33 (Author of Enid)
Thank you for your review. :)
So sad but shows what the world can be like even to wizards. Thank you for writing this.
Response from sunny33 (Author of Enid)
Er... no wizards were harmed in the writing of this story. :)